This was a great fic, and truly deserves it perfect 5-star rating. My only possible complaint is that it was a little short, and just left me wanting more!
Wow, this entire story was heartwarming, joyful, suspensful, and beautiful! The ending was completely unexpected, and the story had my on the edge of my seat until then!
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AUUUGH IT'S A SOLDIER ANT QUICK INSCRIBE ELBERETH elbereth elbereth elbereth elbereth elbereth ***You have died.*** Do you want your possessions identified? [ynq] (n) |
LOLOOwowlooAnonymous User 513: The opening line is such thAt hAs never been seen before. It simultAneously blends fAntAsy with reAlity and flAwlessly epitomizes the singulArity of ponykind. The tone in which the story is written is deeply personAl, which puts the reAder into A deep emotion stAte with eAse. I would hAve expected such mArvelous prose from A professionAl Author, but this just goes to show thAt even the best cAn rise from nothing. This is truly A mAgnificent mAsterpiece of literature. wow, that was the best comment ever.
The tastefully written sex scene between Twilight and Fluttershy was very well done, but my favorite part was either Pinkie Pie beating Deadpool at Age of Empires or Led Zepplin crashing into Celestia's castle.
I feel I have to let you know that the link to the story is not touch-screen friendly at all. That being said, I will open this link. Challenge accepted.
@joetraincool I do believe that'd be talking vegetables. *pompously adds internet to shelf*
Seriously though, about the story? Absolute trash. I give it one star. It had underdeveloped characters, a plot with holes as wide as North Dakota, and every cliche in the book. Plus don't get me started on the grammatical mistakes. There was one especially glaring typo that's just unforgivable. Does this author even know what a spell checker is?
It saddens me that this story already has six stars. This just shows how far EQD has fallen that the pre-readers would even let this through much less that the readers would obsess over it. If I were otsihtes I would be ashamed to even call myself a brony.
I'm done here. I hope you all are happy with your drivel.
@Corky64on the contrary, there was no sex scene, just a lot of intimate cuddling. also, there was way too much description in the last few paragraphs. also, for an update, it was a bit on the long side... 5 stars anyways
I can't.... I can't.... This fic has removed my ability to can.
I wept. I laughed. I gasped. I cried some more. Then when it was over I went back and read it five more times. Never has there been anything so moving as this. Words do not even begin to describe it.
Authors take note: THIS is how you write a fic. I'm now ruined for every other story out there in any medium.
Well, I learned a few interesting things here. Didn't know things like THAT were possible, but I guess there's always something out there to learn...and brain bleach out later.
While, it was starting to get very lengthy, I will look past that due to the amazing grammer free writing. It truly is worth more then five stars. Who would of guessed that he would of got that mare! What a twist. Oh and that fall, I cant wait to part 3. I just hope that my story is as great as this one! Keep it up seth.
Ponies' responses: Twilight: "Really?" Pinkie: "b! But not /b/." Rarity: *looks perplexed for a second, moves on* Fluttershy: "That was...nice." Applejack: "Ah don't think that's a good use of a page." Rainbow: "Twilight! I finally finished a book! And you said I never would."
My mind has been fully enriched by this long and thoughtful fanfiction. It really shows that the brony community is always capable of truly magnificent things.
Wow. I'm speechless. I'm almost ready to can my own project after reading that - there's no way I can compete with this. Any plan for an e-reader version so I can take it with me?
It IS deep. What nopony recognizes it's in fact a 42 chapter epic adventure, with ALL the letters stacked behind each other, instead of after each other.
This is the greatest fanfic I've ever read. Forget Past Sins, forget Fallout Equestria, forget It's A Dangerous Business! This epic, fillies and gentlecolts, stands head and shoulders above those tales, and raises the bar to heights previously unheard of. I thoroughly recommend this brilliant saga to everypony, and eveypony should read it, lest they want to be eaten alive by regret.
The main character is clearly a self-insert, and a shameless one at that. The romance subplot it tacked on and CLEARLY just for the author to indulge his sick fantasies, dragging the reader along kicking and screaming.
The mid-story twist was... "okay". I wasn't really expecting it, I'll give you that, but it didn't really have any real impact either. I think it could have easily been removed and the story wouldn't have suffered. In fact, I think it would have made it better.
1/5 Stars. I added the one because I did like the scene with Pinkie Pie and the washing machine.
This is the most disgusting insult to literature I've ever seen. Yet the quantity of rabid fans who will defend this fic against even the slightest of insults makes me question my faith in humanity. Otsihtes should be ashamed of himself for creating this abomination and its fanbase and I believe a few of the more sane bronies will agree.
Meh, it was good, but not as good as Past Sins. It was kind of lacking in character development. Also, I felt the twist in the middle was kind of stupid and contrived. It just appeared out of nowhere. You need to establish that kind of thing. A main character can't kill another one for no real reason. Pinkie is random, but not THAT random.
the intro was amazing but that ending was confusing =/ I still think it needs a bit more editing. Great job though and hope the next chapter can clear up that crazy cliffhanger ending I just read!
P.S. but a big deal really but try using a bit more spacing there at the end to make it look more professional.
@The Commander while it isn't fair to compare a Shipping fic to a Normal one I will say that the character in this story had just as much character as the OC in Past Sins. You should re-read the story from a different perspective and I'm sure you'll understand just how much character was put into them.
I KNOW!!! And I thought "Cupcakes" was graphic and disturbing! I mean, sure 'a' is brilliantly clever and witty in its writing style and descriptive narrative, but was it REALLY necessary to have them die like that?
You know, it's stories like this that are the true masterpieces of the world. The ones that leave your mind open to interpretation, and allow you to experience every possible event you can imagine, simply because of how beautifully simplistic it is. I dare say, this is almost as good as BLANK PAPER.
I don't really see what all the fuss is about. This fic is far too long for my tastes and spends too much time describing ponies. Honestly, I think the author was trying to cram an entire novel into a short story.
Jesus fuck the plot twists. Seriously it was Rarity all along? What the hell? I mean when you think about it it actually starts to make more sense than Fluttershy but seriously wow. I honestly can't get enough of this.
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A?
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
*facepaw* ROFL. Oh Seth, you silly pony... You're the best.
I lol'd.
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
6 stars, best fic ever.
Why is this not a star-6?
how do I get to part 2?
a
I can really feel the emotion conveyed by the characters to one another. Great. Just amazing.
Wait wouldn't a part 2 be b?
So are there going to be 25 sequels?
I cried at the ending
Never has so much been said with so little.
I give it A star.
This was a great fic, and truly deserves it perfect 5-star rating. My only possible complaint is that it was a little short, and just left me wanting more!
its... just... so amazing words can't describe
best fanfic ever
That had to be the greatest ending i have ever read, you can see now how part 1 foreshadowed it, but it still hit me like a truck
It was more moving then all the other fics combined.
Talos does it again!
I laughed, I cried, it moved me Bob. (1 internet to those who get the reference)
Hey Seth, will you fix the Vinyl Scratch Tapes link, please?
Absolutely Breath-taking. This is a Fic that no one will ever forget.
...But seriously, A?
Dammit, it's down to 4.8 stars. How could anyone give this masterpiece anything less than 5?
Soulless heathens, whoever you are.
*ROARING APPLAUSE*
Literary genius. I'm astonished.
my lord, this new chapter was just unbelievable, had me on the edge of my seat.
This is the most awesome story ever made.
The plot, the climax, the characters, everything mixed so perfectly.
It made me laugh, it made me cry, it made me angry, a lot of emotions conveyed in one single story, the author is truly a genious.
Wow, this entire story was heartwarming, joyful, suspensful, and beautiful! The ending was completely unexpected, and the story had my on the edge of my seat until then!
cant wait for part 3
This story has encouraged me to write again. This is what fanfiction should be.
Thank you otsihtes, for this beautiful work.
I love that the internet has come so far that instead of using text to render the letter a, an image of the letter a is used, just wow.
Best fanfic of 2011.
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Past Sins has nothing on this.
AUUUGH IT'S A SOLDIER ANT QUICK INSCRIBE ELBERETH
elbereth
elbereth
elbereth
elbereth
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***You have died.***
Do you want your possessions identified? [ynq] (n) |
I for one am shocked and appalled!!!
...I don't get it.
Wow. This fic blew me away. It's so well written and clearly had a lot of thought put into it. Best fic of 2011 hands down.
LOLOOwowlooAnonymous User 513: The opening line is such thAt hAs never been seen before. It simultAneously blends fAntAsy with reAlity and flAwlessly epitomizes the singulArity of ponykind. The tone in which the story is written is deeply personAl, which puts the reAder into A deep emotion stAte with eAse. I would hAve expected such mArvelous prose from A professionAl Author, but this just goes to show thAt even the best cAn rise from nothing. This is truly A mAgnificent mAsterpiece of literature.
wow, that was the best comment ever.
I'm not gonna lie, I cried like a baby.
Garbage.
Best story ever.
THIS STORY HAS CHANGED MY LIFE.
HOLY SHIT, THIS IS THE BEST FANFIC EVER!
The tastefully written sex scene between Twilight and Fluttershy was very well done, but my favorite part was either Pinkie Pie beating Deadpool at Age of Empires or Led Zepplin crashing into Celestia's castle.
Jeeze, how has this not yet got a legendary?
Predictable and cliché.
pft. 'a' is soooo played out by now. all the cool kids are already on 'b'. get with the times, sethisto
The story was riveting brining me from tears to similes and tearing and rebuilding my heart. The best pony story around
I cannot freaking wait for b.
You're the best fic ever a
Needs an award...
Reminds me of "B" on Newgrounds.
It gave me joy, heart ache, and Enlightenment. truly a fic to end all fics. It is in a word perfect.
Cool story, bro.
I don't get it.
Best. Fanfic. EVER.
The sex scene felt a little tacked on, and could have been written a bit better.
Other than that, the conspiracy involving B and C *really* got me. Amazingly done!
I feel I have to let you know that the link to the story is not touch-screen friendly at all.
That being said, I will open this link. Challenge accepted.
Words fail me.
I don't think I've ever been so emotionally gripped by a story in all my life.
This is a masterpiece.
Almost as good as history of PonyArchive
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This comment is brought to you by the letter f.
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Yes finally i love this story!!!!!!
amazing
I've read this fic like 5 times already.
@joetraincool
I do believe that'd be talking vegetables. *pompously adds internet to shelf*
Seriously though, about the story? Absolute trash. I give it one star. It had underdeveloped characters, a plot with holes as wide as North Dakota, and every cliche in the book. Plus don't get me started on the grammatical mistakes. There was one especially glaring typo that's just unforgivable. Does this author even know what a spell checker is?
It saddens me that this story already has six stars. This just shows how far EQD has fallen that the pre-readers would even let this through much less that the readers would obsess over it. If I were otsihtes I would be ashamed to even call myself a brony.
I'm done here. I hope you all are happy with your drivel.
>.>
I haven't seen a fic this greatly written since Spideres. Sipmly awe-inspiring.
@NOFURR Hell no, EVERYTHING'S a, lunadamnit
a?
i c.
@marioandsonic ..... Now I wish your crackfic was real.....
GOD FREAKING GRIEF! This is going to be a running gag, isn't it? That's it, I quit!
@PopeHatSkeletonthere will not 'b' a b...
@Corky64on the contrary, there was no sex scene, just a lot of intimate cuddling. also, there was way too much description in the last few paragraphs. also, for an update, it was a bit on the long side... 5 stars anyways
This is no match for spiderses. Lose.
Needs more character development.
A
There, that's better.
So... AWESOME
I can't.... I can't.... This fic has removed my ability to can.
I wept. I laughed. I gasped. I cried some more. Then when it was over I went back and read it five more times. Never has there been anything so moving as this. Words do not even begin to describe it.
Authors take note: THIS is how you write a fic. I'm now ruined for every other story out there in any medium.
So...many...alicorns...
Well, I learned a few interesting things here. Didn't know things like THAT were possible, but I guess there's always something out there to learn...and brain bleach out later.
I'm working on getting a PDF ready.
Really good 6
I'm sorry. I know we all have unique tastes, but damn.
This just made me vomit in rage.
If I may offer a slight suggestion, make it a bit more "v"-centric. Then I'll see if I have a compliment to offer.
This is just....Absolutely Beautifoal...I doubt I shall never read such greatness again..
This story is so predictable. I just KNOW b is going to happen next!
This is even better than spiderses. Srsly guise!
That was... so moving. I... I think I will cry myself to sleep every night for the rest of my life. ;-;
WHY WOULD YOU MAKE SOMETHING SO EMOTIONALLY POWERFUL DANGIT
6/5
This needs a dramatic reading!
While, it was starting to get very lengthy, I will look past that due to the amazing grammer free writing. It truly is worth more then five stars. Who would of guessed that he would of got that mare! What a twist. Oh and that fall, I cant wait to part 3. I just hope that my story is as great as this one! Keep it up seth.
The tears, they won't stop! Such Beautiful writing!
This deserves 7 stars, we need to create a new rating system just for this amazing piece of literature.
Ponies' responses:
Twilight: "Really?"
Pinkie: "b! But not /b/."
Rarity: *looks perplexed for a second, moves on*
Fluttershy: "That was...nice."
Applejack: "Ah don't think that's a good use of a page."
Rainbow: "Twilight! I finally finished a book! And you said I never would."
My mind has been fully enriched by this long and thoughtful fanfiction. It really shows that the brony community is always capable of truly magnificent things.
Can't wait for b
I have no idea whats goin on
must be too deep for me apparently
hmm 6 stars, might put it in my folder to read later, does anyone recommend this?
eh?
SO GOOD!
a is the best fic ever.
It makes Moby Dick look like Plan 9 from Outer Space.
Okay, what?
I was seriously expecting a story xD
Yeah, definitely an amazing story! 6 Stars!!
B?
Past Sins? Fallout: Equestra? Pffft, move over! "A" is the new face of fanfiction.
Where's the shipping? I was expecting ab or ac at least.
Best Fic Ever
Also: EDITING!
""a""
---should be "A."
Great otherwise, even with shiptease.
@Bronygirl09
We don't talk about them.
Wonderfully written! Now, I simply cannot wait for a sequel.
I can predict that this is gonna be a 26 part story.
Cant wait to see what happens next!
Sorry, I can't agree with the way you're developed a's character.
After a's traumatic experiences, I don't think he's be anywhere NEAR ready for a relationship.
That otsihtes ear for dialogue is as sharp and heartwarming as ever, though, so I can overlook it.
I... huh... I literally have no word ? Huh ? How novel.
Presented to you, by letter : E... EEEeeeee !!! : http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=4T8PxaMlsPw#t=10s
Wow. I'm speechless. I'm almost ready to can my own project after reading that - there's no way I can compete with this. Any plan for an e-reader version so I can take it with me?
@Beige Monkfish
The Dramatic Reading of "a" has been up since September!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uRkGJWPaduw
@DarkApostleMatt
It IS deep. What nopony recognizes it's in fact a 42 chapter epic adventure, with ALL the letters stacked behind each other, instead of after each other.
It's SUPER deep!
Just a pale imitation of "R" if you ask me.
I'm almost offended that this hasn't been tagged as 6 stars yet. MAKE IT SO, SETH.
Actually, I don't think 6 stars does it justice. Tag this as Equestria Daily's first ever... 7 STAR STORY.
DEAR LORD! THE SARCASM READINGS ARE OFF THE CHARTS!
*BOOM*
really, you guys? really?!
manly tears were shed
This is the greatest fanfic I've ever read. Forget Past Sins, forget Fallout Equestria, forget It's A Dangerous Business! This epic, fillies and gentlecolts, stands head and shoulders above those tales, and raises the bar to heights previously unheard of. I thoroughly recommend this brilliant saga to everypony, and eveypony should read it, lest they want to be eaten alive by regret.
@PS2Gator
*Monocle falls* Egads ! Dear chaps !
@Mattatatta
''It's A Dangerous Business'' did it first obviously... it's all hidden in the title, ya see ? ;)
It's A : Dangerous Business :3
This is just stupid.
The main character is clearly a self-insert, and a shameless one at that. The romance subplot it tacked on and CLEARLY just for the author to indulge his sick fantasies, dragging the reader along kicking and screaming.
The mid-story twist was... "okay". I wasn't really expecting it, I'll give you that, but it didn't really have any real impact either. I think it could have easily been removed and the story wouldn't have suffered. In fact, I think it would have made it better.
1/5 Stars. I added the one because I did like the scene with Pinkie Pie and the washing machine.
I most definitely will be following this fic. It's a modern masterpiece, and instant classic!
Sethisto is trying to hide his identity by writing his name backwards. He's obviously a vampire.
otsihtes totally isn't sethisto backwards.
This needs to be a 6-Star story. When this is finished i want a printed version.
So...when is the video coming out?
A+
999
999
999
In all seriousness, what the hell?
Give this a rating of Star-A
Eh, it was a little short for my tastes. 3/5 stars.
This is the most disgusting insult to literature I've ever seen. Yet the quantity of rabid fans who will defend this fic against even the slightest of insults makes me question my faith in humanity. Otsihtes should be ashamed of himself for creating this abomination and its fanbase and I believe a few of the more sane bronies will agree.
5 out of 5 stars.
Crap. I don't know if I'm doing this right. Maybe I should've wrote a 7-paragraph essay first.
this story deserves 5 stars for its humour xD
http://uncyclopedia.wikia.com/wiki/AAAA
Why no ponified "a" image?
This was so beautiful, A was an amazing piece of work.
FANART NAO
Also, the subtitle should be: "Sweetie Derelle: the Aaaaaabridged Version".
Fan art already
That link was made possible with the a tag :P
I was Blinded by the pure awesomeness of this fic!!
They say brevity is the soul of wit. Therefore, this is objectively the BEST FIC EVER!
Guys, this is just the novelization of the Newgrounds flash, b. Go watch that instead, it has pictures.
Meh, it was good, but not as good as Past Sins. It was kind of lacking in character development. Also, I felt the twist in the middle was kind of stupid and contrived. It just appeared out of nowhere. You need to establish that kind of thing. A main character can't kill another one for no real reason. Pinkie is random, but not THAT random.
Otherwise, I liked it.
the intro was amazing but that ending was confusing =/ I still think it needs a bit more editing. Great job though and hope the next chapter can clear up that crazy cliffhanger ending I just read!
P.S. but a big deal really but try using a bit more spacing there at the end to make it look more professional.
@The Commander while it isn't fair to compare a Shipping fic to a Normal one I will say that the character in this story had just as much character as the OC in Past Sins. You should re-read the story from a different perspective and I'm sure you'll understand just how much character was put into them.
For a ship fic I got to say this had a lot of A but very little amounts of T.
@2007excalibur2007
A brilliant use of minimalism. Worth at least $65 million. *art critic*
@The Kilted One
I KNOW!!! And I thought "Cupcakes" was graphic and disturbing! I mean, sure 'a' is brilliantly clever and witty in its writing style and descriptive narrative, but was it REALLY necessary to have them die like that?
lol
@Tylendal
Like Alucard and Dracula.. or Draclau.
Wow... and just to think that are not even the 1st of April ? :3
I request more characters.
You know, it's stories like this that are the true masterpieces of the world. The ones that leave your mind open to interpretation, and allow you to experience every possible event you can imagine, simply because of how beautifully simplistic it is. I dare say, this is almost as good as BLANK PAPER.
I don't really see what all the fuss is about. This fic is far too long for my tastes and spends too much time describing ponies. Honestly, I think the author was trying to cram an entire novel into a short story.
That was a work of genius. In fact, I would go as far as to rate this story...
An A.
*does the CSI sunglasses thingy*
BRILLIANT! I give it an A+
Shades of the infamous StrawberryClock!
Jesus fuck the plot twists. Seriously it was Rarity all along? What the hell? I mean when you think about it it actually starts to make more sense than Fluttershy but seriously wow. I honestly can't get enough of this.
To be honest, I like C better.
Personally, I thought the story focussed too much on the main character. :P
Awesome story!
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