• Story: Before the Sun Rises (Update Part 4!)


    [Dark][Adventure]

    Author: Pen Scratch
    Description: There was, long ago, a time prior to the unification by the dual monarchs, Luna and Celestia; the sun rose of its own accord, the clouds were free to roam the skies at the whims of none but the gods, and isolated communities sought stability in a time of relative chaos. An earth pony could live her whole life without seeing a pegasus or a unicorn, seeking only to exist within the boundaries of home. Most did this. Some did not.
    Before the Sun Rises Part 1
    Before the Sun Rises Part 2
    Before the Sun Rises Part 3
    Before the Sun Rises Part 4 (New!)

    Additional Tags: OC Ponies, Historical, Long, Politics, Non-Canon

    23 comments:

    1. Another writing-themed pony? Jeez louise.

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    2. I'll keep my eye out for this, not really in the mood for a fic like this at the moment.

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    3. I thought this fanfiction was pretty good. It does a pretty good job with setting up the scene for the world and an amazing job at describing things, especially at the beginning.

      I didn't enjoy the second part quite as much as the first part, although it was still quite good. This is a well-done story in general.

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    4. Pen Scratch is not the correct title for this, as far as I'm aware - it is the author's name as well.

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    5. Hm... The author has a great record and the first chapter is well written, but I'm rather wary of a tale that begins at a heaping pile of dead ponies. I'll keep watch on future installments but I do hope it lightens up a bit.

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    6. Just to clarify...

      This story is by Pen SCRATCH, not Pen STROKE of "Past Sins" fame. I was confused at first.

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    7. The fic should be titled "Before the sun rises."

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    8. Huh. This feels like a solid piece of work.

      Best thing i can say about this is the ude of double spacing. Seriously more then half of all fanfics from this community really doesn't do spacing very well.

      Personally I believe that double spacing is way easier to read then single spacing pieces of work. No wonder why my professor said to write my essays in double space.

      Anyways thanks for the story and the commom sense of using double sense. That to me is a god send :)

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    9. Ahh, I made the Pen Scratch/Pen Stroke mistake. That explains the very different tone of this story compared to Pen Stroke's work. It's still well written, though, that doesn't change. :)

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    10. @sleepingcobrox
      Double Spacing is atrocious for writing; just have blank lines between paragraphs. Most profs have Double Spaces to make corrections to errors and such.

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    12. And I assure you, Mister Bryan, that the story does get lighter for some periods and darker for others! I know that the massacre might just look like 'violence for shock value' at the moment, but it has a very important context in later chapters, and I hope that people read long enough to get to that.

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    13. Why did I only see the prolouge and the 1st chapter? Is there any more? Because with just that, it was...rather terrible. No offense, but I felt nothing towards the story. I hope my google is glitching out, and there is more to this.

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    14. It says incomplete! I am still writing, after all.

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    15. @Pen Scratch

      Well, I did stick around for part 2, and the writing's still good. :)

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    16. I suppose even if nopony likes the things I write about, I'll still have technical skill! I should have part three done before Wednesday, for those of you keeping track.

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    17. I'm not kidding myself that people are paying attention to this, but I suppose people do deserve an explaination if anyone new comes along! I had some troubles with google, where they very nearly deleted my account for scammer activity! I don't have the slightest idea /why/ they thought such a thing, but I had to spend the past two weeks trying to get it reactivated without losing all the files I had saved there.

      Luckily I managed to! I just have to fix up some things with chapter 3 and it'll be up either tonight or early tomorrow morning, based on when the stories go up.

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