Monday, April 30, 2012

Story: A Heart of Stone (Update Part Complete)

[Shipping] [Dark] [Comedy] [Sad]

Author: BorgiaBrony
Description: Before The Mane 6, before Nightmare Moon, before the all chaos, there was a little alicorn and a young draconequus. After a chance meeting one summer morning, they begin a relationship that spans millenniums, and its not always a happy one.
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A Heart of Stone: Part 1
A Heart of Stone: Part 2
A Heart of Stone: Part 3

A Heart of Stone: Part 4
A Heart of Stone: Part 5
A Heart of Stone: Part 6
A Heart of Stone: Part 7
A Heart of Stone: Part 8
A Heart of Stone: Part 9
A Heart of Stone: Part 10
A Heart of Stone: Part 11
A Heart of Stone: Part 12 (New!)
A Heart of Stone: Part 13 (New!)

Additional Tags: Origin, friends, growing up, history, future

24 comments:

Jango-Fett said...

Hmmmmm looks, interesting.

Bookmarked

INVDAER-GRIM said...

FIRST!


Ahhhh, feels good.

(Probably won't get first...)

Cain.Is.Blogging.Stuff said...

I gave it a 4 star, it's well written and the story seems cute enough.

Dublio said...

That picture is simply adorable. :)

TheManWithTwoNames said...

This story definitely has potential, but I think that it could use polishing up. Putting a little more detail into some of the settings would really flesh out the story.

Don't be afraid to use some metaphors or similes in there to spice up the language, too.

I'll be watching this one.

SaharaxMyst said...

Great storytelling, although the pace is a tad too fast and some of the description could use some polishing.

smartz118 said...

I hate to be anal, but the plural of millennium is "millennia" not "millenniums". I don't care if the spell checker says its wrong, millennia is correct.

RBDash said...

Celestia Luna shipping? What is going on?

BorgiaBrony said...

To the guy above me, its a DiscordxCelestia fic. IDK why they chose that picture. Lunas not even in the story yet...

AppleJack6 said...

And why would the two alicorns with two horns try to hold it up with there nose and not magic? *confused stare*

Tundra said...

@AppleJack6
The same reason two unicorns didn't use magic. Case in point Rarity and Sweetie Belle during the race in the Sisterhooves Social.
It wouldn't be fair to the other contestants.

ahhcute said...

d'aww i love filly gods

DirtyChildren said...

I dunno, I like celestia but I dont like discord. But the fan art is precious but then again..... Eh curse my love for fillys and friendshipping.

Baree said...

Ehhh...

Why oh why do you let Discord bury her all on his own, away from everypony, even her sister? That makes no sense whatsoever. Its both insulting and very selfish towards her subjects. For Luna even more so.

Starfall said...

The picture looks cute, but seems to be a buildup for some darkness/sadness, as the tag states.

Prophet of Ponies said...

OH CELESTIA I'M WEEPING WITH HOW EXCELLENT THIS STORY WAS

Avi said...

All my sadness!!!!

Awesome ending!

BorgiaBrony said...

@Baree

Well, there, you have a point. I wrote it as Discord still being selfish. He is still a bit of an asshat, after all. And the other reason for it was Celestia's disappearance is gonna lead into my next story.

Kabloohey said...

That ending made me cry enough tears to fill a ten gallon hat (ba dum tsss). 'Twas an amazing story. :)

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Moondreampony said...

"When violet eyes get brighter
and heavy wings grew lighter,
I taste the sky and feel a live again

And I'll forget the world that I knew
but I swear I won't forget you

Oh, if my voice could reach
Back through the past
I'd whisper in your ear
Oh darling, I wish you were here"

Owl City's Vanilla Twilight just seems to be made for this fic!

TwistedZephyr said...

@BorgiaBrony

I absolutely loved the story, it made my eyes water. I just felt like this actually could be the story because they acted like how they really would act. So very well written props to you.

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