Monday, September 26, 2011

Story: Friendship is Surreal (Update Part 2+3!)


[Comedy] [Adventure] [Normal]

Author: WarhunterT71
Description: What happens if, due to an unlikely series of plot devices, everypony's favorite background ponies were brought together for hilarious adventures, reminiscent of the Mane 6's experiences? Octavia, DJ-P0N-3, Lyra, Bon Bon, Derpy and Doctor Whooves have to work together as they are put into odd situations.
Friendship is Surreal
Friendship is Surreal Part 2 (New!)
Friendship is Surreal Part 3 (New!)
 
Additional Tags: Funny, background ponies, I got nothing

61 comments:

Party Favors said...

OK, this I must read. The description's too perfect.

Lazulic said...

A fic with all the background ponies? it'll be fun to read how they develop

Dash-Cash said...

I saw this pic before an new somepony was going to do this. Will read.

Joey Wonton said...

Isn't Dr. Whooves a kind of game breaker?

SM51 said...

I have to read this story when i have the time.

Jelfes said...

I'm really interested in this one, I just really wish that Dr. Whooves wasn't in it.

Ranger Skies said...

That would be awesome~! :D

Scribejay said...

AKA How Dr. Whooves gets all the ladies.

Kim Fluttershy Dykas said...

Description: "Derpy".

Nope. Not reading it.

Dawid said...

OK this is awesome.

Drazla said...

K. That picture. DJ messing with Octavias mane sold it to me.

Must read.

Streek471 said...

Very interested, though Dr. Whooves makes them OP.

Thraxen said...

No Carrot Top, Colgate or Cheerilee?

John said...

SPOILERS:

What the...Lyra doesn't know how to stand on her hind legs?!? What kind of fanon story is this???

Oh heck, I'm kidding. Seriously, this is an awesome looking story with great potential. It's pretty heavily focused on Octavia at the moment, which I don't mind since she's probably my favorite fanon character, but it would be nice to get some more thoughts from the other ponies in the later chapters.

And I see you've minimized Doctor Whooves' presence somewhat, which is probably wise because I know from experience that once you start writing enough material for him he has a way of taking over the scene. :P

Looking forward to more!

Dash-Cash said...

Good read!
Derpy is best backround pony!

Lazulic said...

For the people who dont know, theres a link at the end of the first part that leads to another website that has the second part.

Lunas always getting into trouble, isnt she?

Fabrazio said...

i like the background ponies so i decided to read it and i also like the background ponies in this story.

Gabriel said...

I fell in love with this pic since the first time i saw it, i had to check it out.
The first part of the story was fair, nothing exceptional, but i will be waiting for the rest.

@Kim Fluttershy Dykas

Whut? Why u no like Derpy?

Homfrog said...

Aww, I was hoping for long-legged rabbits when I read the word "surreal". A la Salvador Dali's long-legged elephants carrying obelisks. Whatever, I might read it.

Bloomberg said...

This is pretty good.
Nearly died laughing at Octavia teaching Lyra to stand up!

Lazulic said...

"What is you preference on bananas?"

made me laugh. On the outside. I never do that!

P. Pony Ponyson said...

I knew this was going to happen as soon I saw that picture.
Must read.

John said...

@Lazulic
"For the people who dont know, theres a link at the end of the first part that leads to another website that has the second part."

Uh...I knew that. *Applejack lying eyes*

Well, I hate to say it, but chapter two didn't quite live up to my expectations. It just felt a little...rushed. And there wasn't as much character development as I would have liked. Still, it wasn't bad. I love the ending with Bon Bon (though I wish you fit her in some more).

"What is you preference on bananas?"

This is gold.

Xel Unknown said...

Not sure where this is going... I hope it gets good. But it can easly go bad... Also wondering what the hell Ditz was doing. Really hope that turns into a sorta brick joke.

Melodia said...

Man, every time Octavia and Scratch meet, it's hilarity.

Also, a Lyra and Bon-Bon who don't even live together? Me likey. Me likey a lot.

P1rate said...

Why's everyone complaining about the Doctor?

Me said...

Oh pony. What is incredibly odd is that I am also working on a Bon, Octavia, Scratch, Lyre fic as well. I find it quite strange that you added the Doctor and Derpy, seeing as they duo doesn't really fit in with the quartet. Either way though, I'm interested in where this is going.

Telofy said...

Inb4 don’t say “plot devices.”

A Pony Farce said...

I want to like this but good god the prose is driving me up the fucking wall. It just... well, it really isn't written very well at all.

Xel Unknown said...

*finds the other chapter and after reading*

Wow... That was extremely funny and somehow worked.

Xel Unknown said...

@P1rateBecause when it comes to The Good Doctor, you never know how powerful he's going to be. And if people play him too powerful it really brings down the Fan-Fic.

AnonymousBanana said...

This looks, SO AWESOME. /)^3^(\

Melodia said...

Aha, so there's a chapter 2.

Hmmm, Bon-Bon gets what she deserves for being mean to poor Applebloom and Rarity *sagenod*

Chandler said...

This is a entertaining fic.

Poor Bonbon. Think that that was a long walk with FRIENDS?

Bunnylisk said...

It was entertaining. Some of it felt a little awkward, though.

"Lyra was a Unicorn living in Ponyville. Her talent was playing the lyre, and her cutie mark reflected that."

It would have been better to describe her cutie mark and then show her playing a lyre later than to just tell us. Maybe have Bon Bon mention her talent with the lyre during their conversation. It's always better to have other characters describe something than to just tell the audience through the narrator. This happens a few times throughout the story and I personally think the fic could be improved greatly by using the narrator less and using characters to describe each-other instead. As my teachers used to say, "Show, don't tell."

That's just my opinion so take it with a grain of salt. Other than that, I very much enjoyed the fic and I'm looking forward to more.

Josh Spicer said...

Despite whatever mistakes it might have, I really like where this story is gonna go.

Ford said...

@P1rate Maybe it's because he got, like, four lines and practically no character development, other than how he appears to now be Emmet Brown.

Nando said...

Bah! It's not easy finding a voice for Vinyl Scratch. I have everyone in my head except her. Someone help me out here...

Anyway, this looks like it could be fun. I always enjoy reading these fanons in their own stories - with them all together, should automatically spell awesome.

Since I just found out there's another chapter, I'm off to read!

Timber said...

SPOILER ALERT!!!!!

Poor Bon Bon...

banjo2E said...

...Why's everypony so happy about the bananas line? Sure, it's a witty pop-culture reference, but it comes at the price of crushing Luna's dreams of not wanting to be somewhere that actively disturbs her!

Trollestia only works if you aren't taking her seriously.

Psudopod said...

"Why is the bow a different colour to the main instrument strings?"
What? Do you mean the horsehair is different from the strings? Or the wood of the body different from the wood of the bow? You know the bowstring is made of horse hair and the strings are wound metal wires...? The wood of the bow is often different, as bows and instruments almost never break together, or the bows are plastic. They will not likely be made of plastic in Equestria...
'The strings themselves are intact, just the body needs to be replaced.'
'Just'...? NO. Strings are a 5 minuet repair that can be done by the musician. High-end silver strings can be 100-200, cheap can be 20-50.
The body, on the other hand, when broken, renders the whole thing unusable. Depending on the break, you could need to buy a whole new instrument, not 'patch it up'. If I was Octavia and the body broke that close to a performance, I'd cry. So much. Just sayin'.
Bases are on average 2000-6000. On the cheap end. A heavily used no-name violin can be 20-50. A carved Stradivari cello, hot damn, millions? Priceless? Octavia would have a high-end body, but not a famous old one or one with a story. 20,000-50,000... I'd also have at least two instruments, if I was a pro.
Honestly, I haven't finished. I'll write more tl;dr about instrument prices later.

A Pony Farce said...

@Psudopod
That really bothered me, too. I mean, I don't even play any kind of classical string instrument (although I do futz around with the guitar every now and then), but even so the inconsistencies with the bass were really egregious and they absolutely drove me nuts.

Melodia said...

Yeah the bow thing struck me as "DidNotDoTheReasearch" fail.

Dill said...

@psudopod Yep, pretty much. I will say that string players generally own one of their instrument because switching between two or more causes inconsistent playing. It's important for the musician to get to know their instrument and its tendencies, and then connect with it for years to come.

But you're right. If a double bassist leaned over and heard their bass crack, they'd fall apart in tears because more often than not that means the thing is totaled, i.e. 9 out of 10 times you can't simply repair a crack, the integrity of the instrument in both tone and construction is shot.

VozDeSuenos said...

When I saw this image on Draw Friends, I begged Celestia for somepony to write this story for me. It has ALL my favorites (okay, except Luna) and she told she would keep it from ever happening. She's such a troll... >.>

Either way, I can't wait to read this.

Nintyuk said...

Ohh Bon Bon, Always overshadowed by Lyra.

Trolololol said...

I would expect a shipping tag with Doctor Whooves being the only male in the group.

warhunter said...

Thanks for all the positive comments, guys, and the criticism. Sure, I know, I screwed up with the whole instrument thing. Please keep in mind that it's my first. I'm also trying to avoid using Doctor Whooves, trying to make him out to be a bit 'undercover', as well as some people pointing out that if I did include him more, he might take over the show. I'm going to try and improve over the next few chapters.

Hawkeye16 said...

I didn't get the banana thing.

warhunter said...

@Hawkeye16

It's an animation called 'Friendship is Magic Bitch', where trollestia asks ponies if they like bananas. She then sends ponies to the moon after a complete nonsensical rant. It's implied Luna already knew about this (the first time she was sent to the moon), and couldn't decide, looking very fearful.
It's the animation that caused me to be interested in the show, aka it made me a brony, so that's why I put it in. Also it's a very well known animation.

Sdash said...

Im with the guy above...

i have 118+ fics, and im just finding out now, that some have not updated in awhile =(

smith0211 said...

Mother of God, it updated!

tehnoobshow said...

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Drop a like please? :D

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warhunter said...

@tehnoobshow

Author here. I saw that FB page. I considered posting this on it, possibly, but I don't use facebook.

warhunter said...

@technoobshow
Actually, I decided to like it and comment on it.

Silverlight said...

ERGH.

Authors, please, publish your stories on an /actual fanfiction website/, like FanFiction.net or FiMfiction. They are much better suited to reading literature than DeviantArt or Google Docs; and make it easier for people to, say, load your stories onto e-readers for reading on the go.

Brendan Keegan said...

More. MORE. MORE!!! NOW! HURRY PLEASE. If your fanfic was a drug, then your a dealer and I'm a bucking addict. Now, stop what you're doing and write, Celestia damn it! I love this fanfic like a fat boy loves Mrs. Cake, like Molestia loves going down on ponies, like Luna loves video games, like AJ loves bucking R-Dash and vice versa. "Eeyup," I went there. Btw I like that banana reference you used in Part 1.

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