Thursday, August 18, 2011

Story: Renaissance of the Moon


[Shipping]

Author: Habanc
Description: Princess Luna is sent to learn about the changes that took place in her absence. But with the help of another pony, she ends up learning far more about herself than she imagined.

Renaissance of the Moon: 1  |  2  |  3  |  4  |  5  |  6  |  Epilogue

Additional Tags: Romance, Heartwarming, Emotional, Friendship, Trust

44 comments:

Anonymous said...

Looks interesting, I shall give it a read

Anonymous said...

FlutterLuna? LunaShy? Well I'll give it a go.

Ihaveanamebecause? said...

I read this on fimfiction awhile ago.

I'd recommend it, to whoever looks through some of the comments before they read...

DaAnonymous said...

Anyone has a nice summary for this? spoilers too? It's frankly annoying as heck to not know if the story is worth it or not, due to 2000+ fanfics

Anonymous said...

Luna, getting kissed by Fluttershy, while wearing Applejack's hat. Definitely giving this one a shot.

Anonymous said...

Why is luna wearing AppleJack's hat?

R41nb0w D45h said...

that was really well written, im glad to see authors thinking outside of the box. great job !

Acriaos said...

Heartwarming really fits. It is a nice shipping story with a very good characterization of Fluttershy and Luna. No unnecessary drama and very enjoyable. The only thing that felt a bit off was Celestia in the end, there could have been more of a reaction from her than just "So, is it true? Oh ok, guess I'll have to raise the moon, kthxbye"

Pinkie Pie said...

The song should have been called scary maticores and nice ponies not manticores n stuff

Solarn said...

There are a few instances of Camelot instead of Canterlot, you might want to fix that.

Stargazer said...

oh god, they're shipping the two cutest ponies now... =X

Rated-R PonyStar said...

My favorite two ponies shipped together!? THERE IS A GOD!!

Marrock said...

@Anonymous The pic is the result of a three-way ship between Luna, Fluttershy, and Applejack's hat... you kinda had to be there for it to make sense.

MuffinShy said...

LunaShy?
Hmph, this is a MUST for me.

Kim Fluttershy Dykas said...

A shipping fic? Beetween mares!? On EqD?!? *sarcasm*

I'll read this one later, indeed.

TheDarkFiddler said...

That was absolutely adorable, and I enjoyed it greatly, but... if Luna's immortal and Fluttershy isn't... well...

Anonymous said...

Read it and loved it. They're so adorable together! :D :D :D

I don't think anything will dampen my good mood for a long while.

Anonymous said...

Relatively enjoyable and passable writing.
Nothing too spectacular, but worth a look if you need a cute pony fix.
Because Lunashy combines two of the cutest ponies in all of Equestria.

Anonymous said...

the best thing i EVER READ on my entire LIFE!!!

i loved it!
Luna and Fluttershy are such a nice couple!!! *-*

Anonymous said...

What's with the bad rating? Thiis is awesome.

thewisefish said...

This was one of the best stories ever.

Baree said...

Hmm. Its rather generic. There are some grammar issues as well. And to me it reads as if you kind of forcefully want to convince the reader that you take the time for the relationship to develop. Yet it does feel a little rushed. Does that make sense?

All in all, ok story.

MeshMeal said...

more of this nazi equestria shit

MeshMeal said...

another one of my favorite characters ruined by the filly reich

MeshMeal said...

@Stargazer

theese stupid Nazis shipping same-gender ponies

Pearade said...

Brilliant. I loved it, i don't usually read fic's which are over 5 parts, but this is 100% worth it. Couldn't fault it at all.

Michael Hahn said...

This was very cute. A couple of things stood out, however. There were some awkward turns of phrase on the first few chapters. In particular, "I just saw you collapse and I couldn't resist but to help you." doesn't feel like something Fluttershy would say. It might have been a bit better like so: "I saw you fall, and I just couldn't resist helping you."

The build up to the relationship was paced nicely, but I agree that Celestia's reaction was a bit subdued. I would have expected a bit more teasing, but its not a huge problem. The reactions of rest of the mane cast were well handled, except for Twilight. She seemed a bit too clinical in her reaction.

Crown8 said...

That was freaking adorable! I wish you could write more of it!!

Krycek said...

Well, in the end, I died enjoy the story, but I can't help to feel that the firsr few chapters felt rushed somehow, and every dialogue and event felt forced. I didn't follow the story and neither did I get into the actual characters. It wasn't until after half the story I became engrossed into it, and it was at that time that it began to shine.

Perhaps the writer felt the same way, that you grew into the story as you wrote it. I do feel satisfied after reading it, and my complaints are only minor as the overall story is good, although a tad cliché. But considering this is your first (?) story, I'll still give you a 5/5, despite the flaws, just for the effort and the second half of the story.

artrcland said...

Just spent a sunny Saturday afternoon sitting in a dark room reading from a computer monitor...
And I couldn't be happier, that story was fantastic!! 5/5
Thanks!!

Habanc said...

Yes, this was my first Fanfic.

This story was indeed built to I guess "grow" more than some other shipping stories. Still cliche, I know, but that was a necessary evil.

Thanks for the criticism and the replies, mates!

Elrond said...

Lunashy=Win :D this was a really great fic, the only sad part is that Luna is immortal and Fluttershy isnt :(

FabiotheTurtle said...

Uhum, anyone ELSE noticed the massively long neck that Fluttershy has in that pic?

Screw it. Imma read it. I've been putting it off, cause it seems kinda long and I don't really see how Luna and 'Shy could work, but hey.

Aight. Let's do dis.

RABBLEROUSE said...

D'awwww I can't get hardly enough of stories where Fluttershy is involved <3

Habanc said...

It seems that the majority of the feedback is about my picture choice xD

Zared said...

I may have cried at the end... Come on Z! Man up!

The communist pony said...

This was beautiful!!!!!! and MeshMeal go fuck yourself!!! Spewing hate like that, you do not want a Communist as an enemy *glare*

FurryForlife said...

Undoubtedly one of my favorite stories involving Fluttershy. My favorite involving Luna... just too cute.

Ragneki5880 said...

Finished reading this amazing piece of writing. It really brought out the feelings of love and was very heart warming. Loved every bit of it.

MrBrown said...

I can't actually find words to describe this beautiful piece. I...I didn't used to be able to think that anything could be so amazingly written. I just want to say that you get a level up. And while that sounds like the words compliment ever...it means a lot :)

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