• Story: Ingredients of a Rainbow


    [Grimdark][Shipping][Sad]

    Author: Rainbow.Slapped
    Description: When Rainbow Dash's showoff personality gets her into a situation where she is grounded for weeks, she never thought it would be a pegasus willing to help her. But, here's the twist, Rainbow has no idea who he is or what he's trying to do.

    Ingredients of a Rainbow

    Additional Tags: Love, Mystery, Finally, Renewal, Fun

    39 comments:

    1. Last one alive slaps my shit.

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    2. Why the change in image?

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    3. Damn. I think all the "first, second, third, etc" posters just got this story nuked from orbit. I understand, though: it's the only way to be sure.

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    4. People bombed it due to the image, i forgot to tell cereal not to have ponies making out on the front page.

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    5. @Anonymous

      Because the previous image didn't fit the fic, and was a bit too saucy to boot.

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    6. aww... I liked the previous image =[

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    7. Seth, when someone bombs a place you kill the bombers, you don't let them get away with it.

      Besides, they were acting like spoiled tweens.

      The story itself is interesting however, and I will be waiting on more.

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    8. Not a good story at all. Besides the spelling error (beggining?) in its title, please don't attempt to use a fancy word like "aileron" if you don't know what it means, especially if you're going to draw attention to it by footnoting the word and then giving it an incorrect definition.

      Besides that, though, reading this felt like I was being told what happened, step after step. I was being talked to rather than led through the story. It was boring and very poorly written.

      I give very few one-star reviews, but this is one of them, and these stories are becoming much more common on this site. Whomever was the prereader for this story needs to be reviewed themselves, lest they allow anything else like this through again.

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    9. good, you changed it

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    10. Lol, yea I was going to post "kinda a racy image... but I won't tell Seth how to run his site"

      Then I saw Cereal posted it, and I had a good laugh.

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    11. I thought it was all right, but a bit thin. I don't think there's any point to footnoting dictionary words - save that for world-specific stuff.

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    12. Really not that great of a story. The grimdark isn't really grim or dark, and both the sad and the shipping, while neither are very present, already seem pretty forced. A good spelling and grammar check wouldn't hurt either.

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    13. Dash gets shipped, CHECK
      Dash loses ability to fly, Most likely
      How cliche... But still interesting, will be keeping an eye on this.

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    14. Dashie getting shipped.
      Seriously, what if Season 2 comes around and Dashie doesn't want to ship with anypony.

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    15. Damn. I had first post on that last one too.

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    16. purple prose
      random list
      misspelling before it the thing even starts
      dash shipping
      and dash "D-Y-I-N-G!!"
      not understanding how to use ellipses

      I need a freaking drink

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    17. I liked it, Do want more. Although with the title I had assumed it was a Cupcakes reference.

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    18. Oh cereal. he's a crazy one. Good story though.

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    19. @Anonymous
      Author apparently edited it once on his own... without much... luck... it seems.

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    20. Not bad, but wouldn't a collision at Mach 1 kill just about anyone?

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    21. Luhood the ZebronyAugust 4, 2011 at 5:51 PM

      Even though my old comment got removed by the bombing, I still find the "Sad"+"Grimdark" combo clash with the additional tag "Fun". Somehow it just feels... odd!

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    22. I have an urge to know what the original pic was.

      Why do I want to know?

      Oy...

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    23. @Delta Pangaea It was Spitfire and Rainbow Dash being smexy.

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    24. Good so far...I withhold my rating until I see more.

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    25. I didn't bomb the story because of the pic. I bombed it for the story. Just sayin'.

      There's a strong (if somewhat tired) concept behind the story, but the execution is awkward. Everything feels rushed (from dialogue to plot), and poor use of transitions leaves readers feeling confused over the timeline. The lack of character development works for RBD, since we have canon knowledge to draw on, but what does Soarin have? Almost nothing, so he could use a little more than "oh, I'm suddenly secretly in love with Rainbow Dash". Give this story some time to breathe and expand upon itself, and something beautiful could happen. As it stands, however, my advice is to send it to the moon and try again.

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    26. Does anypony know any more stories with a similar concept such as this (ie Dash gets hurt, must recover)?
      I've heard that there are plenty, but I haven't found any.

      Thanks!

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    27. @Anonymous

      Yeah, everyone is always going on about Dash being hurt being a overused concept, but i have read maybe two complete fics where RD getting hurt is part of the main plot. And no, i'm not going to count Cupcakes or it's altendings.

      So i would really like to know if there are any good "Dash hurt"-fics around, as it's apparently so overused concept everyone must comment on it everywhere?

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    28. I'm sick of these Dashabuse fics. I wish people wouldn't be so sick minded all the time and hurt Dash all the time.

      Very poorly written and relatively pointless.

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    29. All you leaving mean comments, I'm pretty sure you went FORCED to read it. It's hard to get stories through the pre-readers, and they must have sorry Ed to go though. :) I personally loved the story! Is it on other websites by chance so I can watch it? Please update soon!

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    30. Sorry Ed :p spell check!

      *liked it

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    31. Meh... It's a cute little fanfic, but Rainbow Dash will be mine eventually, Soarin'. >:)

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    32. This is an okay fanfic... Nothing bad about it! :)

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    33. I'll be keeping an eye on this one

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    34. Why is this not being updated? D:

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    35. I want more of this story D: Please update!!

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