Author: Cereal Velocity
Description: Sometimes, getting your cutie mark doesn't mean you have all the answers.Having a Ball
Additional Tags: Or, if you prefer, RarityxBall.
Wednesday, August 3, 2011
Story: Having a Ball
Author: Cereal Velocity
Additional Tags: Or, if you prefer, RarityxBall.
94 comments:
lol tags :3
RarityxBall XD
Cereal, I love you.
And you too Seth.
The best pony gets the best stories.
this story is bad and you should feel bad
That was nice. I enjoyed that.
What else can I say?
That was very nice. You make me smile.
This story was amazing. Thank you, Cereal!
DAAAAAAAWWWWWW
D'aww :3
More evidence of the obvious: Rarity is the best pony.
This really is very adorable. I'm so glad that picture had a story written about it. This fiction gave me a chance to stare at the picture some more.
I don't know how you did it Cereal, but you managed to evoke the simple pleasure of a good old fashioned bouncing inflatable ball. I can hear the POINK of it now...
Cute :3
>inb4 mass influx of diabeetus and various heart conditions
Cute story! I really like the exploration of finding one's special talent versus finding what you spend the rest of your life doing.
There were a few grammar issues ("balloons were *want* to do" rather than "balloons were *wont* to do" and "Inevitable, though," instead of "Inevitably, though") but overall still great.
I love this story. :3
... I still beat you to it. Granted yours is ten times longer.
With a bit of imagination they do segue together, though!
D'awwwwwwwwwwwwwww. Good on ya Cereal! :D
That was impressive. It didn't just make you D'awww uncontrollably, but it also gave a nice story about finding yourself and growing up. Along with that, it gave Rarity a nice backstory that wasn't as one sided and bizarre as randomly finding rocks and then bedazzling her schoolmates' outfits.
I love this story too :D
I dawwwed so hard.
But tgis brings a new question to me
we have as follows:
rarityXball
applejackXapple
and of course derpyXmuffin
whats next????
twilightXbook
RainbowXcloud
Pinkie pieXballoon??????
D'aaaaaaaaaaaaw.
^_^
Cute, Cereal. Nice job.
Read this on FiMfiction.net. I thought it was good up until the ending...
Which I thought was great.
@twilightlover21
TrixieXmirror?
TOO CUTE! *Explodes*
*Explodes*
I read this on FiMFiction before Seth posted it.
It was pretty good.
@RiffBrony
Obviously, that is bound to appear.
loved it :D
D'awww. This story is all kinds of adorable. Whoever gave it less than five stars should feel bad.
Better than the official series, and somehow even more adorable.
Has there been a Fluttershy x Bloomberg or any FlutterxTree stories made yet? lol!
Valcron, Cereal...I fuggin' love you guys. Both my inner child and my outer adult greatly approve of this simple, yet heartwarming and endearing story.
It's a cute story. I like it.
I feel like it needs a little bit of proofreading, though. Not a lot, but there were a good number of sentences like this:
"Rarity, however, despite her jubilance, had been doing some soul-searching for that long week."
There's nothing wrong with it, technically, but it just looks and sounds weird because there's a bunch of unnecessary text in there for no real reason. It should probably look more like this:
"Despite her jubilance, Rarity had spent that long week soul-searching."
Actually I still think that looks a little weird, but the point is just to illustrate that you can get say things more smoothly and concisely by dropping phrases like "however" and "has been doing" when they're not really necessary.
You know, now I hope that in S2 or maybe S3, that this ball falls out of the closet during an episode.. just because. And reminds me of yet another reason I love this fandom. Not only are the vast majority of those within it exceptionally nice folks, but they're also creative enough to take something COMPLETELY RANDOM as a silly picture and turn it into a heartwarming story..
A short but good read!
You underestimate yourself, Cereal.
We all love you here
You still have time to WRITE?!
Holy cowpony, Batman! I thought the blog tied up all your free hours!
That story made me smile! Very cute Cereal, a good read indeed.
This was sickeningly cute. RarityxBall for life.
/smile
Trumpery a great and powerful fanfic, not as great and powerful as Trixie but still great and powerful.
What a sweet story.
Bah... damn add-on auto corrected Truly and turned it into Trumpery... how did it even get that from truely :/
I just discovered that image yesterday.
Brilliant story, 5-star.
That was so damn adorable! It matched up with the pic, too. I know that's not something you would normally concern yourself with, but it still fits regardless.
Good read. That picture is so cute :D
On my way to star-6!
Y U no make Cereal post his own story?
Rarity is so awesome... might actually read this one ^_^
I love how Cereal retains the cuteness of the story while giving it a whole, new, deeper meaning. And I also love how the story is written in such a way that Rarity herself could have told it.
5 STARS AWAY
Not a bad fic, but it needs more editing. There were some strangely constructed sentences (e.g. "Rarity, however, despite her jubilance, had been doing some soul-searching for that long week"), a few homophone mix-ups (want/wont, for example), and you're mixing your metaphors with the phrase "come out of a blue moon" (also, you used 'literally' to precede it when you presumably meant 'figuratively.' Unless I'm missing something about the origin of the ball/Rarity's cutie mark?). The story itself is very cute, though frankly I thought the ball was a lot less interesting than Rarity's customer. I wish you'd brought us back to the dilemma that fills the first page at some point. As it stands, you've left what I considered the most interesting plot line completely unresolved!
3/5 stars from me. With a little cleaning up, this could easily rise higher.
hmm, a fic by cereal himself?
I just finished reading.
I feel... happy.
All of my love.
That was amazing. I loved it. The phrasing that others have mentioned didn't really bother me, and the whole story was just heartwarming to the core. Rarity was in character, the backstory was brilliant and with a nice little message.
Cereal, you should write more, because whatever you do is perfect.
A lovely cute story.
WILSOOOOOOOOOOON!
From what I read, I really enjoyed this back story of Rarity's life! It was cute, informative, worth reading and also funny at some points (like how she was trying to tell the earth pony suttly that the colors whould to go well together, but to no avail~) I love the art work that was put as the image too! I had seen it allready and loved the artists works (like the fluttershy comic). This was all around a well made, cute backstory of one of the main mares and give it a 5/5! Good work Cereal Velocity!
Stop making me like rarity more n more D:
First fanon gave Luna an abacus along with socks, and now Rarity has a ball.
What's next, bronies? Are we ever going to dive into Applejack's hardships of being composed of dark matter?
@Zarkanorf
Haven't Fanon established that Applejack's hat once belonged to her now deceased father?
To Cereal Velocity: I loved it! Wonderful and cute story! :)
@Scorch_Mechanic
Actually, I think the ball was not inflatable, but solid rubber, since if it was an inflatable ball and had a crack it would deflate
@Anonymous
Nope. Inflatable. It wasn't so much a gash as a large scratch on the surface. It was a thick ball.
I don't remember the last time a story's made me joyful enough to tear up and hug something.
Thanks, Valcron and Cereal. This here's something magical.
This was just a really great short story. Hope you keep writing :)
Many Manly D'AAAAAAWWWWWs were had. :D
Everything Cereal creates turns to gold
short, sweet, nice
I tried refraining from d'aaaawing, but it only brough forth tears. I mean manly tears. I mean… forget it…
Simple yet incredibly satisfying. One of the best fanfictions I have read on the entire internet/
Such a sweet story. Slowly but surely Rarity is becoming my favorite pony.
Ohh, Seth posting one of Cereal's stories.. I should read it when I have the chance.
+3 hearts to my Rarity love level.
Longer then Diamonds got +5, but this was great to.
Simple, endearing, and the idea of Rarity rolling in the closet on the ball was just so cute.
I love that you present a life situation rather than tell a life lesson. Its much sweeter, stories like these.
Maximum levels of d'awwww achieved
This story is adorable and you should feel adorable
This was adorable! So freakin' adorable! D'awwwwwwwwwww!
Good writing, excellent piece. One of my favorites.
My heart. It has exploded.
Hah !
People told me I was crazy (well, no they didn't; in fact they were rather happy, but that's beside the point ;) ), when I told them *Ponies with Balls* would be the next *Ponies with Socks* !
I knew this day would come to be ! :D
... now, to the story !
Awww that is so wonderful. What a great story. I think it speaks volumes in general. What person does'nt suffer with the thoughts of what do I do for the rest of my life vs your passion. I often get the lecture that I made the wrong choice doing what I love, "there's no money in it" But, I was told if you love what you do, you never work a day in your life and the money will fallow.
It's truly was touching, It hit close to home for me. Got me all choked up for all the right reasons. Now to hit it hard tomorrow!
Thanks Cereal, I think this story was EXACTLY what I needed at the RIGHT time. WUNDERBAR!
D'aww, that was cute. It kind of reminded me of a Pixar short.
Too, cute, cant, handle, awesomeness...
*explodes*
...
...
*explodes*
It is hard to imagine Rarity rolling down a hill clutching a ball. So unladylike! To be fair, the story does call that out.
Oh my gosh that was cute. /)^3^(\
This struck home, for some reason.
@twilightlover21
RD x cloud actually exists, saw it on ponibooru earleir today.
Lovely little character piece: short, sweet and very well written. :)
As my first fanfic I loved it, great writing.
Daww, what an adorable little story. It really put a smile on my face. It was an absolutely perfect short story. Short, sweet, and heart-warming. <^_^>
For some reason though, I can't help imagining Rarity telling Sweetie Belle the story about the ball on the way to the toy store. And then later Applebloom and Scootaloo get all jealous and began begging for a "cutie mark toy" as well. xD
:happyrarity: You sir, have written a short, sentimental delight that can be read in a few minutes, but loved for MUCH longer. Hats off to you.
Cereal, I implore you to write more often. Everything you write seems to get more and more awesome.
Damn that was pure raw uncut d'aww
What can I say?
I D'awwwwed hard :)
Such a nice and meaningful little story :)
Cute story. Cute picture. 'Nuff said.
Adorable and well-written :)
Also, interesting thought, that Rarity would still need to find what her cutie mark meant, after getting it so suddenly.
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