Author: CoffeeGrunt
Description: Octavia is part of a rare breed, a pony that can create beautiful music, despite lacking the horn unicorn musicians love. Her love for music is rivalled only by her love of fine whiskey, but not on the rocks, what kind of charlatan are you?Allegrezza Part 1
Allegrezza Part 2
Allegrezza Part 3
Allegrezza Part 4
Allegrezza Part 5
Allegrezza Part 6
Allegrezza Part 7
Allegrezza Part 8
Allegrezza Part 9
Allegrezza Part 10
Allegrezza Part 11
Allegrezza Part 12
Allegrezza Part 13
Allegrezza Part 14
Allegrezza Part 15
Allegrezza Part 16
Allegrezza Part 17 (New!)
Allegrezza (All Links)
Allegrezza (All Links 2)
Additional Tags: Don't take this seriously bronies
Fan Art
383 comments:
And that's when the Fedichini hit the fan,
ReplyDeleteAwesome Fallout and Vinyl scratch tapes reference
Chapter ten feel... unfinished. So, what's happening with the Sound System Incident?
ReplyDeleteWait, wait, wait...
ReplyDeleteFor a moment there when she was playing with the radio channels... did Vinyl manage to tune into her own show from an entirely different fanfic?
@Pegasus Rescue Brigade
ReplyDeleteTIME PARADOX!
That Fallout 3 reference was genius. XD
ReplyDeleteOh lord Vinyl, how could you, you silly filly. You never mess with another mare's sound system. Never. Been nice knowing you Scratch.
ReplyDeleteIn all seriousness though, another great chapter, and I'm eagerly awaiting the next one.
Yay! I love this story. I couldn't stand reading any other fillyfooling story, I'm sure of it, but this one just hits all the right chords. (pun intended, and I'm sure it's been used before.) I like how Tavi just barely gets to terms with everything, and then Vinyl messes with her sound system. Well, good relationships can go through challenges. Hopefully even ones of this magnitude. Silly audiophiles.
ReplyDelete@fredericWhat? Most of the chapters have that "random" stopping point.
ReplyDeleteBy which I mean it ends in the middle of a situation, which is one of the fun things about reading this fic.
Seven stars, no, eight stars, no, all of the stars. All of them ever.
ReplyDeletePlease, keep writing, this and everything, you have a great talent for writing. This has been an uplifting, fun, joyous and heartwarming read.
x
@Nyte_Crawler
ReplyDeleteBut it usually say "to be continued" or something.
As I read it, the end was blank.
Whew. Vinyl was merely a second away from causing a time paradox; had she known it was her own radio show!
ReplyDeleteGlad to see their relationship is still technically the same. Now it just involves smooches and cuddles. D'aww!
Can't wait to read the wedding
ReplyDeletewell a good story im gone go and get som botter becos i ahve none
ReplyDelete@Coffeegrunt
ReplyDeleteYou just had to do the "Heartstrings" reference, didn't you?
Eh.
ReplyDeleteLoving the story, but chapter 11 was just.. meh.
It's mostly more of what we got from the previous concert, and built slightly on the last couple of chapters. I suppose it's moving the story along, but it felt slow, and with the last few parts of the story being Octavia's home, then her performance, followed by her home again, Vinyl Scratch's part in this story and relationship is starting to feel underused. The last major part she had was chapter 3 with her performance! From there it was interacting at the bar, and Octavia's life.
I love the story, but want to see a bit more Octavia dealing with Vinyls' life than the other way around. It seems like the story is being built up to something with the concerts, but like I said; that story seems to be more about Octavia and her life than Vinyl Scratch, whose part the past few chapters basically involve spending time with Octavia, and being teased by Bonbon.
Sure, when they finally unofficially became a couple in chapter 9 we finally had something pretty new, but.. that scene was also strongly driven by Octavia.
Still a great tale, very cute, but... I just feel like Vinyl and her part in the story and the ship is being downplayed. It's really Octavia getting the entire limelight here, with Vinyl just sort of standing to the side; maybe not too replaceable in the story all things considered, but as things have gone it's really feeling like Octavia's story, not Octavia & Vinyl's story.
Maybe they can use those tickets they got from Butterscotch.. that would be something that focuses more on both of them.
Hehe, already fitted Heartstrings into it. Love it.
ReplyDelete"Miss Heartstrings and Miss Philharmonica" I like.
ReplyDeleteI love that Bon Bon/Scratch dynamic, almost as funny as Octavia's and Scratch's antics. :)
ReplyDeleteThis has to be one of my favourite fics to date, keep up the great work! :)
ReplyDeleteIt's ten minutes till ten at night, and I've got an excursion tomorrow. Fuck it: I'm reading Chapter Eleven.
ReplyDelete... They need to make Trollbon canon... She is what made this chapter! XD
ReplyDelete~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
OI! SETH! WHY DOTH YONDER FIC HATH NO SIX-STAR RATING?! HASTEN THINE PLOT RIGHT NOW! YONDER FIC FIC HAS THE REQUIRED STARS AND COMMENTS, SO GET TO IT! Please and thank you!
ReplyDelete~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
I enjoy the fic but wonder about the logic behind chapter 11. In #9 Octavia decides she's willing to be exposed as a fillyfooler to be with Vinyl. So why is she suddenly freaking out in #11? Trying to keep it all hush-hush. It just feels like their relationship just took two steps back in #11. I feel it would be better if the two of them were less skittish about their new relationship and deal with the consequences as they come. IMO, Characters working through problems together makes for better reading than hiding and denying themselves. Still, I enjoy your story as a whole CoffeeGrunt, so please continue writing it.
ReplyDeleteYou know, I love your story. You have have really done a great job with my favorite shipping pair's personalities. Also this is a great start after a 1 month black-out period with Equestria Daily. Thank you for revitalizing the fan fiction side of me.
ReplyDelete*Bursts through wall, Kool-Aid man style.*
ReplyDeleteOH YEAH, NEW ALLEGREZZA CHAPTERS!
*Smooshes face against computer screen and begins reading.*
"The stalwart cello that relied on her for stability as much as she relied on it."
ReplyDeleteOkay, that was a good line.
SOMEPONY likes Bethesda games.
ReplyDeleteI am currently following only three fics and this is one of them. Cheers
This fanfic is fantastic! And I mean amazingly fantastic! PLEASE write more of it, cuz you do it so nice :).
ReplyDeleteThis last chapter felt uncomfortably like an ending. I hope to Celestia it's not. More please, Coffee!
ReplyDeletePart 12...
ReplyDelete*squee*
This whole story is so sickly sweet, it puts a stupid smile on my face every chapter. Definitely one of my favourite fanfics.
ReplyDeleteI was this magazine they speak of in chp 12?
ReplyDeleteONLY, and I do mean ONLY complaint...
ReplyDeleteDon't call it a cello. You sit down to play a cello. Call it a double bass, call it a hybrid, a violone, a viola da gamba, some new random name you made up. I don't care, but Octavia DOES NOT PLAY THE CELLO. Cellos are a distinct class of instrument, and NONE of them look ANYTHING like what Octavia plays.
Other than that, you totally deserve the 6 star rating. On principle I should have stopped the moment I saw the word, "cello," but your storytelling skills have kept me reading.
Simply genious
ReplyDelete“Junk mail. Came with two injury lawyers letters, and an offer for a horn extension kit.”
ReplyDelete“They do those?!”
... XD Oh GOSH! *Trevor's face turns beat red as he cracks up so badly he almost passes out from lack of air*
Awww, that's it?! They're friends now? *Slams front hooves onto the table* OBJECTION!
CoffeeGrunt: "OVERRULED! It's magic/a fanfic! I ain't gotta explain shit!"
... F*!
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
p.s. PLEASE keep this up! XD Trevor LOVES this story!
OI SETH! THIS FIC IS SIX STAR... WHAI U NO SIX-STAR TAG THIS?!?! Trevor is VERY disappoint!
ReplyDelete~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
On the one hoof, New chapter! And it's as adorable and hilarious as I've come to expect.
ReplyDeleteOn the other hoof, six pages? Really? I wait for this since... whenever the previous chapter was, and it's over in less than ten minutes?
@BonsaiFriend
Seriously? Your principles demand that you stop reading if someone uses a different name for an instrument? For the record, the producer of the show referred to it as "probably a cello" in interview. And the standards for pose while playing are based off adult humans; Octavia is not only significantly smaller, using a different pose by necessity due to lack of fingers, and it's a bloody plot point that she plays in an unconventional manner. It's a custom piece anyway; she can call it whatever she pleases on her own, and needs to refer to it as a cello when looking for work or participating in an orchestra because the sound is all that actually matters, and it sounds like a cello.
THIS.
ReplyDeleteChapter 12 is the epitome of the story thus far.
Take all of my stars. Seriously.
As SOON as I read "grey magic" my brain screamed "CAUGHT" XD They're so cute together, hehe.
ReplyDelete@BonsaiFriend
Octavia has referred to it multiple times throughout the story as a custom-piece, a cello with bass-like elements (she told it to Scratch and to Zimmer).
“But not forgotten. Besides, a lesbian calling out another lesbian would hardly make headlines, would it? There’s Equestrian Warming for everypony to worry about instead. Besides, you two remind me too much of Bonbon and I. Hay, you have some good times ahead.”
ReplyDelete*Bonbon and ME. Cavalier effort, but I thought I would point this out. Also, watch out for the repetition of 'besides'.
Ah, don't mind me; you've still earned your six stars in my view.
How is it that I NEVER know when this updates!?!?! Argh!!!!!
ReplyDelete*sees use of lyra's canon name*
ReplyDeleteheh, clever. good idea making her full name "Lyra Heartstrings". I remember that being on a comic of bonbon freaking out about everyone's names changing XD
I love how Octovia finally sees the real real truth about her feelings about Vinyl.
ReplyDeleteI need to make a habit of reading the stories everyone in the story updates demands to update. They yield pleasant surprises, at least in this case.
ReplyDeleteThe story is treated as an actual relationship, not a shipping fantasy (and the lampooning of that topic made the story all the more entertaining). Octavia and Vinyl are both genuine in their characters and actually make a believable couple. The relationship is built up rather than instant and time is taken to make me not only care, but sympathize with how deeply rooted in classical belief Octavia is, and thus her taboo relationship.
Even when love is involved, they are passionate, yet it is not the focus of the story or any chapter, which is refreshing and again makes me believe the story is about the expounding and exploration of the relationship of the two rather than simply a story about the couple's love.
My only complaint that I can seem to muster after mulling it over is that there were not enough horse puns.
I have a new favorite fan-fic. Please, keep updating. This is simply beautiful. I had to have read every chapter so far at least 7 times.
ReplyDelete"After reading chapter 1 in _Allegrezza_, I believe this is interesting enough to continue reading. Noticing RAINBOWDASH and PINKIE PIE dancing together in the "club" as a couple caught me by surprise. It gave me a "raise of ears" expression, I quite found it humorous, coming from the circumstances OCTAVIA put herself in. I look forward to reading on. I shall give further word on my next Critic after I complete reading Chapter 2."
ReplyDelete-FoxMane
Just finished 13....
ReplyDeleteHNNNNNGH *heart stops*
*heart restarts* You MUST keep going!
Chapter 13...Made me D'aaaaaaw! :3
ReplyDeleteJust...Yeah, this has to keep going, I love this fic so goddamn much right now - it's a bright gem amongst all the other shipfics, and a joy to see more amazing moments come to fruition.
So. Much. Awesome! <3
I think this may be my favorite shipfic. It's well written, romantic, AND hilarious. Cant wait until the next update.
ReplyDeleteExcellent work as always, good sir! Jolly good!
ReplyDelete~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
That was unexpected =P I thought we were going to walk in and find Vinyl learning a string instrument for Octavia XD So... who was this "other musician" the receptionist mentioned? Or was he referring to Vinyl herself?
ReplyDelete@Scherzando
ReplyDeleteFairly sure it was Octy who was recognised as the other musician.
Chapter 13 bothers me; Vinyl's plot seems rushed. Octavia suspected something amiss and got a full story from Vinyl in about 3 pages.
ReplyDeleteBah, after several Octy chapters, I just want more Vinyl centered chapters. Feels like you squandered an opportunity to flush her out more
@Pontius_Possum , I couldn't have put it better myself. Honestly, even if you spread it out to two chapters, I would have been happier.
ReplyDeleteI felt things were a little bit rushed, and didn't really fit right.
Also, I want that old fic image back. The old one was SO D'AWWWWW, and people won't get the reference the the picture that says "art" in the (sixth?) chapter.
/stupidrant
Started reading this today, eagerly blazed through all 13 chapters like a schoolfilly. It's easily the only story that can compete with Transcendence for my favorite fanfic. Really well written, and the characterization is superb.
ReplyDelete5/5
Oh. My. Word. WHY HAVENT I READ THIS EARLIER.
ReplyDeleteJust caught up and man does it make me warm and fuzzy.
Love it 5 stars.
And the end of Part 13 actually made me tear up.
ReplyDeleteYou rock. Really. This is awesome.
Ok, story's awesome but...
ReplyDeleteWHY THE HELL THESE ARTS LOOKS SO BAD?
Anyway, write more and have a good fun doing it.
- Kurisu Fuyuumi, author from For Glorious Equestria
I think Im going to cry... in a Manly way!
ReplyDelete@Vinyl Scratch
ReplyDeleteYou were playing for children, though! CHILDREN!!! Not FOALS!!! :O Did you know Lyra can see humans too?
;D
Excellent shipping story. I'm really enjoying it!
ReplyDeleteWow! I just sat down and read this whole gem in about an hour and a half. Brillaint story so far...I'm eager to see how it continues from here. :)
ReplyDeleteA few good points:
1) The Rainbow Dash/Pinkie Pie scene in the gay bar in Chapter 1 was so adorable. PinkieDash is my OTP, so a little nod was entertaining. Pinkie *would* drag Dash to a club, hehe.
2) I love the vocabulary in this story, and the varied length and flow of sentences. You truly have a way with words, my good sir. :)
3) The climax of this story (Chapter Nine) was breathtakingly beautiful. Each second was filled with palpable, pulsating emotion. I can't say I've come across such emotion in a fic since "The Party Hasn't Ended" (and even that was spread across several chapters in bits and pieces rather than one rocket to the heart like here!). The shipping didn't feel rushed or forced at all. It felt very natural, inevitable, and passionate. Loved it.
4) Buttersc0tch Sundae reference and plot device was a hilarious, if embarassing for the pair, inclusion. Her stories are among my favorites and it's good to see a nod her way! :)
5) I'm a bit surprised gay marriage wasn't already legal in Equestria; not very loving or tolerant, are we? But if it's a "New Lunar" (New Year i.e. next year) law, looks like Celestia's getting with the times. I wouldn't be surprised if Luna had something to do with that. ;)
6) Listening to Skillet's "Whispers in the Dark" and "Comatose" made for some good reading also, especially for Chapter Nine. Just a suggestion!
Waiting eagerly on the next chapter! :)
Part 14.
ReplyDeleteI read it, now I have diabetes. Thanks.
Loved it.
Ch. 14: Full of Hnnnnggghhhs and Dawwwwwws, but didn't really progress the story.
ReplyDeleteCh. 14
ReplyDelete"Deal with it", "Brony", AND a title drop? A bit much if I might say, but otherwise awesome as usual.
D'aww, end of 14, so much...D'aww...
ReplyDeleteThe ending of Chapter 14... Something bads about to happen.
ReplyDeleteVinyl saying "My little pony" seems a bit out of character, at least the fanon you've designed around her. Other then that, chapter 14 was a huge success and my respect for your work has never been higher.
ReplyDeleteI absolutely love this story to bits. So much. I remember back when it was first getting published, and there were only 3 chapters. Someone started doing a comic version, I believe. Those were different times. I hadn't read any TaviScratch back then, unless you count the first few chapters here, which were only almost shipping at the time. I read the first couple chapters, then ignored it for a while. Then someone recommended the Vinyl Scratch Tapes, and I needed more, then I rediscovered this story, and I've been a lot happier ever since, actually. It's kinda cheesy to say that, but this story can be heartwarming in a lot of ways. Thanks! You are way up there on my list of favorite pony fic right now.
ReplyDelete"She tried to hum a song to look even busier, but humming dubstep is difficult until one developed a subwoofer in one’s voicebox."
ReplyDeleteThis line made my night! Vinyl *would* try something like that...although, you can kinda hum dubstep songs, although it's more like simple beatboxing than humming. I hum Skrillex's "Rock And Roll" all the time, mostly because it's the only dubstep I know...
Oh god, someone stop me from giggling at this. Ch. 14 was just MADE OF "D'aww" in the most amazing way possible.
ReplyDeleteAlso, someone drew art partially inspired by this story: http://foxofwar.deviantart.com/#/d4h6wrk
Okay. I have to tell you another highly specific thing I like about this story, that I realized while reading chapter 14.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE the way Octavia talks!
I know what it's like to have a vocabulary that's too large for my own good (although it's helpful for being a writer). I'm one of those people who says stuff in real life, and has the listener look at me for a second and go "In English, please..." Then I dumb the sentence down and repeat it.
And some of the stuff Octavia says in this chapter literally had me laughing out loud, not because of the meaning of the sentence, but because of the way it was phrased using wonderfully unnecessary vocabulary!
I mean which sounds better:
"Always switching between good and bad"
Or your phrase: "Always oscillating between the idiotic and the saintly."
I mean, it just doesn't get any better than that.
Ok, weird compliment over. Keep up this story, I love it.
STILL... Love'n This Story!!!!
ReplyDeleteThis story just makes me happy :) You truly deserve those six stars
ReplyDeleteI just have one problemm... "pockets"?
ReplyDeleteAwesome! Should be six-star. :)
ReplyDelete@The_Dragon27
ReplyDeletePsssht, nah - not just 6 stars...it deserves a whole constellation, a planet, and perhaps a couple of black holes for good measure! :D
This is a great fic through out. I really hope you continue it!
ReplyDelete@RainbowDat
ReplyDeleteThis fact doesn't surprise me. I'm a pretty bad person.
I know it has only been a little over a week since 14, but the wait is killing me!
ReplyDeleteAnd TBH, I wasn't going to post anything annoying like this, but then I took an arrow to the knee.
(Sorry had to do it.)
I used to be a fanfic writer like you, but then I took an arrow to the knee.(@author)
ReplyDeleteIn all seriousness, I eagerly await your next update. This story nearly skips around the pitfall that most shopping fics don't, which is rushing into the relationship. Vinyl and Octavia's relationship develops naturally and at a pace that makes sense. I appreciate that.
Having been a writer, I know how hard writing convincing, compelling relationships can be. Let me tell you, you make it look easy.
13 and 15 are flip flops
ReplyDeleteWhat the fuck is an "aristocratic prairie dog"?
ReplyDeleteGreat chapter update! Can't wait for the next!
ReplyDeleteSETH! Y U NO ALLOW US TO RATE A STORY 7 STARS?!
ReplyDelete@Supreme Commander of Brony Mountain
ReplyDeleteBecause... um...
...hey, yeah, why ISN'T this 7 stars?
is it just me or is it starting to get a little steamy in here :P
ReplyDeleteStill great story, but damn this has gotten a whole lot more saucy. Keep it up ! :)
ReplyDeleteI cried after chapter 9, Its just so beautiful. I think I love you for writing this.
ReplyDeleteI WANT MORE!!! this is the most amazing story I've ever read. Keep it up!!!
ReplyDeleteMegusta this fanfic! You're doing great :P
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ReplyDeleteIn before huge influx of fans saying "YAY ALLEGREZZA UPDATED!"
ReplyDeleteThen again, the fans going crazy is completely justified. This might be one of the best shipping fics I've ever had the pleasure of reading. In my opinion, it's because this has what very few shipfics have: pacing. Vinyl's and Octavia's relationship feels very natural and doesn't rush right to the big, passionate kiss (or in some fiction's case, the clop scenes)
What's the criteria for getting a Legendary tag anyway? Sad to say I haven't read any of Fallout:Equestria, so I'm curious.
Is the next one really the finale? D:
ReplyDeleteSo the next one is the finale? Then I'm guessing that you might do an epilogue or two after that?
ReplyDeleteYou'll see...
ReplyDeleteNot to self promote or anything, but shouldn't my guitar pro tab arrangement video be linked here? That way people can play that song that was on the original cover for the story.
ReplyDelete...Finale?
ReplyDeleteNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! /spike
Yes! 16 is out :D I've been waiting for this x3 Allegrezza is my favorite fan fiction =) Please, keep writing!
ReplyDeleteFINALE?! Damn. I really hoped this would go to infinite, but writers have to end their stories somewhere.
ReplyDeleteKudos to you, CoffeeGrunt.
YES!! UPDATE!! XD
ReplyDeleteYes! Update!
ReplyDeleteNooo! Finally! :-(
*sigh* Still love it
@Omnes just saw that the next chapter was the finale.... at the gala i see. I'm sad that this is ending :'(
ReplyDeleteOh, a Finale coming up? This was bound to occur, stories must end, after all. All I have to say is that is has been an amazing ride, and I look forward to whatever else you write, CoffeeGrunt, for I know your skills at literature are matched by few other individuals.
ReplyDeleteHmmmmm so the next chapter will be the Finale huh? Probably at the Gala. Can't wait to see what will happen :D
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written, I can't wait for the next chapter! Somepony better get onto drawing up pictures of their fabulous new dresses soon!
ReplyDeleteI am waaaaaaaaay too drunk to read part 16, but from what I have read through hiccups and jittering eyes, I must say, continue. I like the direction that their relationship is taking.
ReplyDeleteFinale next, eh? Well, at least it's been a fantastic story.
ReplyDeleteOn a side note, am I the only one who can picture some romantic dancing scene at the Gala if it's in the finale?
*raises eyebrow* Finale? Well well... I'm sure it'll be a sold out attendance, to be certain! Time for the final piece to the set.
ReplyDeleteART! This last chapter screams for art! I want to see their dresses :3
ReplyDeleteEvery time I see the term "foetal position" it irks me. A pony begins as a fetus like any other mammal, and foals aren't exactly prone to taking positions of that type. The ponification here seems both unnecessary and probably incorrect. Just one minor quibble with an otherwise fine story though.
ReplyDelete"favors"
oh, my...
Finale? It's drawing to a close then? And Fallout: Equestria ended just last month... It feels like we're coming to the end of the first generation of the best pony fiction. Here's hoping that next year's batch is even better!
Finale?
ReplyDeleteWhy must all good things come to an end?
The finale is almost upon us? Oh well, I guess all good things must come to a close. Vinyl's answer to Octavia's question was really well done. It portrays a true relationship: we don't know where this is going to go, and in the end all we can do is enjoy our time together. It's thoughtful, it's exciting, and it avoids the cliche of "happily ever after" while still offering a very hopeful ending. I'm definitely looking forward to how this most wonderful of stories wraps up!
ReplyDeleteVery sad that this story won't continue on, it is one of my most favorite fanfic of all. I really hope we can see more from you soon :)
ReplyDeleteThe feels! THE FEELS! It is way too bad it has to come to an end. Ah well. The finale better put your other chapters to shame, length-wise.
ReplyDeleteHey CoffeeGrunt. Dunno if you're interested, but I made you some fan music.
ReplyDeletehttp://soundcloud.com/ottermatt/allegrezza
Let me know what you think, plz!
Haha this fic is amazing! Can't wait for the end.
ReplyDeleteI'm looking forward to the finale! Although it seems to be coming a bit soon. I hope it's longer then the previous chapters. MUCH longer.
ReplyDeleteThis fanfic is best Vinyl fanfic. >:3
ReplyDeleteSo, the next chapter is gonna be the last one?
ReplyDeleteMy face, it is made of sadness.
Best fic ever! i cant wait for the next chapter. Any possible news when the next one is coming out?
ReplyDelete"I enjoyed chapter two o ALLEGREZZA. VINYL SCTRATCH and OCTAVIA at a constant battle of witts made this fic that much more enthusiasticly comical. I will enjoy reading on in this "high class" witty fan-fiction. I will give further word on my next critic after chapter 3."
ReplyDelete-FoxMane
just read the whole thing in one sitting. wonderfully cute and charming. can't wait for the final chapter!
ReplyDeleteYAY! Final chapter is out! gonna have to read this when i get home
ReplyDeleteif I remember correctly I stopped at around... 14? I will be finishing this up once I clear up some time tonight if able. Grats Coffee on a great run! =3
ReplyDeleteCan someone photoshop Octavia walking away at the end of Breakfast Club with her cello held over her head?
ReplyDeleteThat'd be great.
adasdaas FIIINALL CHAPPTTERRRRRR EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK
ReplyDeleteWell, crap, it's finished. This better be good...
ReplyDeleteOMG THANK YOU FOR FINAAAAALLLLLYYYYYYYY UPDATING THIS!! HERE'S 999 999 999 999 999 999 999 999 999 999 999 999 999 internets!!!
ReplyDeletejust finished. i shed several hundred manly tears at the end. :') one of the best stories ever!!
ReplyDeleteI loved Allegrezza, brilliant little story.
ReplyDeleteIt was cute without being sickly sweet, and it was just ridiculously fun to read. Ridiculously fun, and as a reader you can't ask for much more than that.
I think the finale ended perfectly, and just about on the right day too.
Allegrezza is one of my favourite fan-fics, and I'm looking forward to whatever CoffeGrunt comes up with next.
What an ending. And to think this grew out of a little side-project back in August. Fantastic work, and I look forward to seeing what you bring out next.
ReplyDeleteGotta say, this one is my definitive head fanon. I think it's the best octy/vinyl ship out there.
ReplyDeleteGreat fic, one of the better I'v read. Have recommended to multiple Brony friends and they enjoyed it as well. Thank you CoffeeGrunt.
ReplyDelete(Please make more!)
Im only following a few good fanfics, and this is one of them. My only complaint is that its over. great job
ReplyDeleteIm only following a few good fanfics, and this is one of them. My only complaint is that its over. great job
ReplyDeleteA beautiful ending to the story that got me into fanfic.
ReplyDeleteI already read it, and it had the best ending EVAR! Been waiting since new years... ;P
ReplyDeleteI loved Allegrezza and everything about it. Sadly, all good things must come to an end.
ReplyDeleteI seriously cryed at the end of this fic..... Good sir, you shall go down in brony history.
ReplyDeleteWell, I knew this was coming. Doesn't make it any less sad.
ReplyDeleteThis is an awesome fic that will always be one of my favorites. You've done a great job with this.
Sweet Celestia what a good ending...now we just have to wait for Heartstings and Gumdrops to start being released elsewhere...
ReplyDeleteIt's... over? i_i
ReplyDeleteWell sir, it's been fun. Best of luck in your future endeavors, and while I doubt even you know what you're writing next, I eagerly await it.
ReplyDeleteAmazing ending to an amazing story. 10+ stars.
ReplyDeleteFantastic.
ReplyDeleteIf there was a rating higher than 6 stars, you would surely have achieved it, because you an I both have 6-star fics that hold the "shipping" tag on this website, but the quality of my story doesn't even begin to compare to this magnificent thing. If I have 6 stars, you need 7 or 8.
Loved the entirety of the story, the ending was beautiful, don't even know what higher praise I can give this.
Good stuff, man. It's going to be kind of odd, you know? Allegrezza's been one of those omnipresent things for me for quite a while. Knowing that it's officially over is a touch bittersweet.
ReplyDeleteIn any case, kudos. You've done a good job, regardless of the flaws you've picked out.
Great, now all we need is for Through the Eyes of Another Pony to update
ReplyDeleteSo, so adorable. Allegrezza made my heart smile many times, and the ending is pitch-perfect. I don't read fic often (except in the case of Fallout Equestria and its better spin-offs), but you can rest assured I'll be looking out for your work, CoffeeGrunt.
ReplyDeleteMany thanks to you CoffeeGrunt you have made one of my all time favorite fics ever may you produce many more
ReplyDelete:')
ReplyDeleteNever have I been so deeply invested in a fic as I was with this story. From beginning to end I found it enjoyable and never once bored of the character who's relationships I so adored watching blossom. I eagerly await any future work from you and give you my best wishes in all your endeavours.
ReplyDeleteBravo sir, bravo
I've spent all day reading this little fanfic and I must say, that a more phenomenal, heartwarming Saturday I cannot recall.
ReplyDeleteAll of my stars, and a tip of my hat to you.
Amazing !!!!! thank you so much for this! I hope to read more of your work in the future :) favourite shipping fic of all time, my friend.
ReplyDeletehave fun writing more great stuff
love is a grait felling. It keep us human togetter.
ReplyDeleteI almost cried at the end. I don't want it to go ;_;
ReplyDeleteI love this fic so much.
ReplyDeleteTake my money! Just...just take it! One of the best fanfics out there, imho. I c
ReplyDeleteManly tears hath been shed. That was one of my favorite stories and could not end better. Bravo sir, Bravo
ReplyDeleteChampagne Supernova and Morning Glory
ReplyDeleteIs that just a coincidence or did you porpously name them after two songs by Oasis that are connected (at least on the album stop the clocks)
Either way I loved the story. I was wary to read it at first but you captured me in the story, I was hooked after chapter 1
I would like to say that this is one of the best Fan Fictions I have ever read.
ReplyDeletethis story is beautiful. it captures elements of comedy, seriousness, and story all in one. my favorite of the two main ponys would be Vinyl as I am pretty much the human version of her, except i'm a guy =/. i love the end where we finally leave the two to have a happy and memorable life, hopefully as friends with Lyra and Bonbon. I just wish we could have seen more of Bonbon and Vinyl's prank at the gala (spoiler alert). Overall, this a great shipping fic that is not like most and that allows us grow with the characters and see how it all comes down. i give it a 9/10
ReplyDeleteI still find it hilarious that a fic with the tags "Don't take this seriously, bronies" ends up being one of the most loved fics in the community. :D
ReplyDeleteOmigoshomigoshomigoshomigosh! THAT WAS AWESOME! Why can't we have nice things like this all the time?! ;_;
ReplyDeleteOmigoshomigoshomigoshomigosh! THAT WAS AWESOME! Why can't we have nice things like this all the time?! ;_;
ReplyDeleteI absolutely loved this story in every possible aspect, and I do not say things like that lightly. It is an amazing story with great comedy, a solid plot, and some of the most heartwarming scenes I've ever had the pleasure of reading. I know they say all good things must come to an end, but why can't this be the exception?
ReplyDelete...wait, so what did the horn relaxant actually DO?
ReplyDeleteI'm sad that this had to end.
ReplyDeleteEasily one of my favorite pony fanfics ever.
I almost didn't finish this fanfic, because I didn't want to see it end. Just as I expected, the last lines of the finale was a buck to the chest not being able to see how the story continues to develop.
ReplyDeleteEasily one of my favorite readings, thanks Coffeegrunt for your hard work for making the most legendary shipfic!
Epic, deserves everyone one of its 6 stars.
ReplyDeleteI waited to start reading it until it was complete as I don't like being left in the middle of an incomplete story, and it may have been a relatively long fic, but it seemed to end with me still wanting more, a testament to your good work.
So, I finally got around to reading this. Chapter 10 was awesome, 11 was... fine, but the next two actually made me angry. I hated chapter 12 and 13.
ReplyDeleteChapter 12:
Octy and Lyra are both being so ridiculously unprofessional here that I'm shocked Zimmer puts up with it at all. Honestly, have neither of these ponies ever played with someone they personally disliked? Do they have no idea at all how to put that aside when there's a job to be done?
On the other side of the curtain, Bonbon is the rudest, most intrusive pony I think I've ever seen. If Vinyl and Octy haven't decided to come out yet, what the hell business is it of hers? She should understand their concerns better than most! I don't understand why she can't take "drop it" for an answer.
There's a weird bit when they're all in Time-Out. Octy seems to get outed three different times, but only the last one apparently counts. The wrap-up really bugged me, too... "Turns out we're both lesbians! Truce?" Uhh, how in Celestia's name does that solve the interpersonal conflict here? ...not that we ever learned the basis of their conflict, anyway. They seem to have some kind of history, but it's never explained, which makes them seem really childish. There should have been a lot more apologizing before everything was smoothed over.
Chapter 13:
RAAAAGE. Okay... Bonbon is an unmitigated bitch. Not only does she make some pretty awful assumptions about Vinyl based on her job, but she causes Octy to worry just because Vinyl didn't happen to mention her next task to a passing acquaintence! I could understand this scene if Octy expressed curiosity over Vinyl's vagueness and Bonbon replied that she hadn't mentioned anything to her. I wouldn't even mind if Bonny brought up the possibility, if she did it in a more circumspect manner. But even so, as protective as Octy is, I'd have expected her to slap Bonbon for daring to suggest such a thing rather than start tailing Vinyl. Vinyl has done exactly nothing to date that would give Octy any reason to doubt her faithfulness. This whole conflict seems very contrived.
Octy is a massive idiot for the rest of the chapter, too. Vinyl goes into a large, professional-looking building with a receptionist. That just screams "affair", right? Especially when the receptionist refers to Octy as "another musician", thus implying that Vinyl is currently performing. Which is what she said she was going to go do. So she was telling the truth. Octy should be ashamed that she ever doubted.
Oh, and the middle of a performance in front of a couple dozen children is TOTALLY the best time to confront her, right? As opposed to chilling out until Vinyl finishes her act and talking to her later? I don't object to Octy joining the show at all, mind you. It just seems really crappy of her to interrupt a performance for this.
Then 14 is back to cute. *shrug* Maybe it needed another chapter or so in between, there, for Octy's concerns to build up and for her and Lyra to come to terms, and maybe slip up in front of L&B enough to make their relationship obvious without Bonbon prying like that.
Annd done. I enjoyed the dressmaking bit a lot, and the last chapter was great... for the most part.
ReplyDeleteWas I the only one who thought Octy winning an award felt really hollow? For one thing, it seemed strange for her nomination to not indicate a specific work they were nominating her for. If she'd been involved in making an album with her group the whole time, or if a record company approached her to make a single from her audition performance, it'd make sense. But this was just completely out of the blue, lacking any buildup or reader investment.
Moreover, I didn't think it was necessary. If you cut those paragraphs and just had Octy and Vinyl slipping out before Luna got into the tainted cupcakes, the ending would not have felt any less triumphant.
I honestly thought Vinyl was hanging around to see what would happen when Blueblood's horn relaxant finally kicked in. So was I. That would have made a suitable climax for the chapter. As it was, I found myself disappointed by a mere verbal report of his allegedly hilarious antics.
Still, those bruises aside, it was a sweet ending.
Overall criticism:
You seem to be writing a little bit above your normal vocabulary. You're occasionally using the wrong word or one with the wrong connotation, and it's coming off (to me at least) as a little pretentious at times. You could easily tone down the vocabulary without losing anything at all.
You'd do well to play your cameos and memes a more gently. I felt like you were beating me over the head with the Butterscotch scene. If the reader is going to recognize the cameo, they'll get it. If not, describing the characters in excruciating detail won't make them catch on. The socks thing was better, but I still got the distinct impression that you were waggling your eyebrows at me to make sure I caught the reference.
Your last two chapters slipped into a strange "Hitchhiker's Guide" sort of narrative style at several points. Talking to the audience is usually considered bad form because it knocks the reader out of your story and reminds them that they're reading. The HHGttG pulls it off as self-aware comedy, but if you're not deliberately writing that kind of story, it's painfully out of place. The note about not discussing Vinyl and Octy's glance due to fillies and colts who might be reading was particularly obnoxious. If you're not going to write something, just... don't write it, don't write why you didn't write it.
You really could have ended the story with chapter 9. In fact, you kinda did. This is really two separate dramatic arcs pasted together into one story. You needed a fresh Inciting Incident in chapter 10 to set up the new conflicts working against the relationship for the latter half of the story, and it didn't happen. It felt like you were spinning your wheels for a long time after chapter 9, and as cute as the hospice stuff was, it only really got back into gear when Octy asked, "where are we going with this?" But it was very late and the plot arc was an anemic little thing that paled in comparison to the first half of the story. You should pay more attention to the dramatic structure of your story; a climax needs to be followed by further plot twists that increase the tension again.
I have to agree a fair bit with silentcarto on the above summary. The "talking to the audience" stuff always seemed irritatingly out of place to me, they REALLY broke the flow of the story (I remember frowning terribly after the whole dust mite thing when Octavia fell in Vinyl's apartment, trying to figure out of there was some inside joke that I had missed - the "banning communication" thing at the Gala elicited a similar reaction).
ReplyDeleteI also agree with the ending at chapter 9 thing - it really felt like a second story just sprung out of the first, but more disjointedly written. Scenes flashed past abruptly and it seemed to have lost a lot of its zenith - it felt more like writing for the sake of writing. It rather felt needlessly lengthened, like what my spam mail seems to think I need (hue - and yes, I stole that joke from elsewhere).
I spend six months of my life trying to write something unique and fun, to keep people entertained for narry a penny towards myself.
ReplyDeleteMy reward? "You're shit, Coffee."
Well, this is why I don't consider Equestria Daily to be my main release center anymore. Half of you are just pretentious cunts fat on getting too much quality for free. Pundits who contribute nothing but artless insults dressed as opinion.
SilentCarto, would you happily go insert a rake up you arse sideways, and ignore the fic if it really is that bad?
@CoffeeGrunt
ReplyDeleteWow, I sure am glad I spent over an hour writing out a detailed and well-reasoned criticism for you. My mistake.
I'd like you to point out where, exactly, I said I didn't like Allegrezza. It won't take long, because I never did. I liked it. Four stars. I never insulted either you or your work.
But, I guess your problem is that I didn't tell you it was perfect. Maybe next time you write something, you should check your ego at the door.
ALL the drama!
ReplyDeleteFor what it's worth coming from a random pony on the internet, I thought that was a pretty stellar critique, and well worth the hour it apparently took you to write it.
ReplyDeleteCarto, I made peace with the fact that it's not perfect at the door. It's the reason I've quit writing.
ReplyDeleteThe fact that a mediocre side project is now my defining feature, that it's an irremovable label on me, has made it impossible for me to care about writing anymore.
I knew Allegrezza was pretentious from the start. I never once claimed it was good, because I never believed it was. I'm sorry about that rant, you caught me just after a nine-hour shift on my first day. Needless to say, I wasn't feeling too snappy.
But yeah, if it makes you feel better, there'll be no more pretentiously mediocre writing from this brony. I hope that brings you peace, because it's brought me a lot.
So, I like the way CoffeeGrunt just completely ignored the lavish praise the vast majority of commenters are giving it. In my opinion, it was a fantastic read...a little spacey and Hitchhiker's Guide-ish in a few places, but who ever said that was a bad thing?
ReplyDeleteDeserves all its stars.
Please CoffeeGrunt don't give up writing I loved Allegrezza it was so beautiful I'll give it 20/10 stars I mean you made simple hug so elegant i aws about to shed a tear And I been hear reguest from at least 1 person including me wants a epilogue so the point is please write again and make a segual and don't listen to any rude remarks becuase whatever anyone you write the best stuff I could have imagened
ReplyDeleteWith fixed erores: Please CoffeeGrunt don't give up writing I loved Allegrezza it was so beautiful I'll give it 20/10 stars I mean you made simple hug so elegant i Was about to shed a tear and I'v been hearing reguest from at least 1 person including me wants a epilogue so the point is please write again and make a segual and don't listen to any rude remarks becuase whatever anyone you says you write the best stuff I could have imagined
ReplyDelete@Robert "Bear" Gullickson
ReplyDeleteThere's an unofficial sequel on FiMFiction called Two's Company, Three's a Crowd. I suggest you check it out, it's pretty decent. Regrettably, the author's barely updated recently (they did post a new chapter when A Canterlot Wedding came out, but there was a good month's gap between that and the chapter before, and the same again for the chapter before that).
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