Saturday, July 2, 2011

Story: Lyrical Musings

[Random][Shipping]

Author: Grif
Description: Lyra, unknown to her friends, is obsessed with Twilight Sparkle. So much so that she is willing to do anything to win her love. Originally inspired by the madness of pony threads.
Lyrical Musings

Additional Tags: You don't want to know

49 comments:

Flatterscheu said...

Interesting additional tags.

kwj said...

additional tags you don't want to know??

MihailK said...

Ahhh.
This.
Ponibooru you trolls.

Grif said...

Disclaimer in advance.

I DONT KNOW WHAT WAS I THINKING WHEN I WROTE THIS. HONEST.

Okay, maybe not. But it was still a fit of insanity. Now be off with ye.

Homfrog said...

Too weird! Loved it but it was very creepy.

Flatterscheu said...

Just read it.
Oh my god.
That is hilarious xD

@Grif
How the heck did you got the idea for THAT?
xD

Conner Cogwork said...

Aww DAMMIT, and here I was hoping to eventually get the monopoly on this ship! Oh well. I'll wait a bit before I unleash my own creation upon EqD.

kamikaze-drake said...

Very creepy and weird, but in a good way. Liked it a lot, good work.

Anonymous said...

@Grif This is fine, nothing you should be ashamed of. You've done well in portraying Lyra's mind. Easy to follow and nothing too hard to get a grasp of.

I thoroughly enjoyed it. Even so, others might have issues with it but take it with a grain of salt eh.

Also I'm glad you changed your mind about posting it here hehe ;)

MihailK said...

Needs 6 alternate endings.
NAO.

Anonymous said...

The HELL did I just read....

oh well screw it.... 5 stars! lol

CoffeeGrunt said...

Where the hell have you been Grif? Do you know how sparse Lyra content is in fanfics? :P

Reading now...

Anonymous said...

Really strange,but...good.

supervanman64 said...

That has to be one of the more...interesting fics I've read so far XD

Anonymous said...

Woah. What did I just read? It was so...weird. Well written, mind you...but really freaking weird.

EsperDerek said...

Just for the record, I approve of this rampant insanity! (Or is that ponysanity?)

Anonymous said...

...What did I just read?

CoffeeGrunt said...

I shat brix at the ending, and beginning...and middle.

Also I love the references to Out in the Cold. :P

ToonNinja said...

What. The. F*ck. I'm really not sure how to feel about this right now.

Dima said...

She did move to Ponyville with Twilight Sparkle after all, so I guess it makes sense.

Some Anon said...

When the ship hits the fan...

Nice work, I dare say.

Petal Blossom said...

I'm strangely okay with this.

Lyra needs to be shipped with more than just Bon Bon.

Asgard314 said...

Okay, this is my fourth try at writing a comment describing how amazing this is, but I just can't find the words beyond well-written, easy to follow while still being bat-s*** crazy, and Inception ain't got nothing on this when it comes to complexity. 5 stars.

Melodia said...

We finally get a story focusing on Lyra (and mostly with Bon-Bon)....and it's this.

Poor darling Lyra :-(

Anonymous said...

Wow. Just wow. That's all I can say. And I've been lurking on giantitp for ages so I understood ALL the references XD

For those of you wondering, Lyra's imaginary friends are all avatars of posters on another forum :P

Anonymous said...

Well that's... uh... I don't exactly know what that is...

Grif said...

So... many comments! Thank ye for all your kind responses. Seriously. You bronies warm my insane heart.

@Conner Cogworks
And I would read that! Fandom needs more Lyra nao.

@Flatterscheu
Two words. Pony threads.

@EsperDerek
Yesssshhhhhhhhh! Ponysanity!

@Coffee Grunt
Have an internet cookie for spotting that.

@Anon11:36
I have a feeling we chatted before on DA. :p

@Anon1:01
Hohoho. We have a spy! Ha, I challenge ye to spot all the references I crammed in. I dare ya!

Anonymous said...

Oh my God, what did I just read?
That was horribly scary, I don't even know what happened.
IT'S BLACK OPS ALL OVER AGAIN.

CoffeeGrunt said...

Black Ops sucked. Just sayin'.

@Grif

Internet cookies? Boy those ethereal, digital, inedible ones are the best kind!

nemryn said...

Party of Lyra?

Muffinsforever said...

...the hell is this.

Really though that was crazy.

Anonymous said...

This is completely bat-shit insane.
And I loved it.

Anonymous said...

Ah, the insanity of the GITP pony threads. This story is like all of that madness distilled into poor Lyra.

Skay said...

By far one of the creepiest fanfics I've ever seen.

Part of me wishes the torture scene was a tad longer. (no, I don't take pleasure in reading that)

I can't get the thoughts of a possible sequel out of my head. Twilight Sparkle, after noting Lyra's disillusion state, tries what she can to help Lyra out. Only thing is, Twilight has no idea about the nature of Lyra's hallucinations.

BlankFlankBrony said...

That was the good sort of creepy.

Anonymous said...

Heh, pretty funny stuff there. Kind of puts Lyra's separation from Bon Bon in later episodes in perspective.

Nice job on making out of character Lyra... believable. Although I wasn't expecting this as written, especially with the cute little picture of Lyra prancing happily.

Miyajima said...

Now, if you replace "Twlight Sparkle" with "Lyra", and "Lyra" with "Phoe"...

Present Perfect said...

Oh no, not Lyra cheating on Bon-Bon again! Also, Bon's not a unicorn...

This has a lot of tense issues, which keep pulling me out of the story. You should read up on how to use the subjunctive aspect. Lyra's headponies are an interesting touch, at least. Making her a complete nutter? You certainly went the extra mile.

Wait, who is this Shimmer? Real or not?

Umm, well, the twist ending made me like this more, it explained all the bizarre things that didn't make much sense. I think the very ending was a little vaguely 'gotcha', though. If this had been an honest sendup of the entire concept of shipping, it would have really gone somewhere. I dunno, it was all right.

Bunnylisk said...

Weird and awesome.

Anonymous said...

@Grif

Anon 1:01 here. Yeeeeah okay, maybe not ALL the references. Looking over it again there were a few I didn't get (i.e, I'm sure "Lone Star from Magic School" is a ref to something) and probably a few more I missed. Oh well. CHALLENGE DENIED

Anonymous said...

This story... Was insane to say the least

Anonymous said...

I guess you could say

(Puts on glasses)

Her train went swimming in the piano.

YYEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAHHH!!!!

Shimmer said...

@Grif where did you get the name "shimmer" for the tied up pony... dammit that's been my ponyname for 6 months now XP

LoganBrony said...

I kind of want a sequel to this. I don't know why though. I'm a bit confused but I think I quite enjoyed this.

Grif said...

@Shimmer
It's based on a fellow forumer ponytar. So any similarities are purely coincidental. :p

@Anon 1:03
Well, there were some very obscure references I threw it for the fun which only I could understand. "Lone Star" was one of them. Heh.

Grif said...

@Present Perfect
Darnit, forgot about this.

Fixed the Bon-Bon is a unicorn bit. Thanks for the catch.

Ace12541 said...

Throughout this whole story all i could think was "Whut?", it made me feel weird because Lyra is one of my favorite ponies. Good story no doubt, just weird lol.

P.S. I also wanted to thank you for a drawing idea, Kaiser Wearing Monocle'd Falcon, i lawl'd

Anonymous said...

I've always enjoyed the stories where the main character is at odds with their surroundings and yet try to justify their actions. It is a very delicious kind of stubborness.
Reminds me of one of the first fics I read on this site, "The Disease", which was an enjoyable read.

Nitpick:
//“Gentleponies!” a blue stallion called in a distinctly French voice.//
Can you describe a voice as french? Wouldn't it be a french accent?

My only dissappointment was the dream-ending. It was well done but I've never been fond of 'em.

Bladecutter said...

Hurr, Lyra, you so crazy.

HELL IS THAT NOISE.

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