[Adventure] So much Celestia and Luna! I really hope they have a presence in season two!
Author: Daetrin
Description: The mistakes of the past cast long shadows. As the mistakes of a thousand years past threaten Equestria once again, Princess Luna joins Twilight Sparkle and her friends to close that chapter in history once and for all.The Sun Doth Not Shine, The Moon Doth Not Glow
Additional Tags: Short, Danger, Magic, Speed, Physics
19 comments:
i enjoyed this
It went a little too fast but other than that it was good.
A bit on the short side, but I'd rather short and sweet than long and bitter any day. Well done.
Shoooortt~~!
But so very good.
Short and fast-paced maybe, but I definitely enjoyed it.
I felt that the pacing helped the story-it gave everything a sense of urgency, compelling the reader to take in every word.
One minor gripe-the word "everybody" makes an appearance quite often in dialogue.
I liked it but am I the only one who instantly thought of the Killers Dustland Fairytale when reading the title?
I'd love to see this animated as an episode! It goes very well with the personalities of the ponies. 5 Stars from me!
@B. Darn. Catching linguistic references is apparently not something I'm good at. I'll have to fix that.
@Anyonymous It's actually a reference to a Tenacious D. Song
Re: it being short. Yeah, I only had a few ideas, and I'm not being paid by word so why pad it? >.>
A bit *too* fast-paced for my liking. It pretty much went:
"What's wrong?"
"The End Is Nigh!"
"Well then we have to save the world!"
>Everyone shows off their special talent while saving the world in what feels like five minutes
"The World is Saved!"
That being said, the ending was awesome.
Just like Rainbow Dash.
Read it, liked it, faved it.
A little fast-paced, but well done.
A little too short for my taste, but good none-the-less.
My only real complaint is that nothing gets mentioned about Twilight's cracked horn. Apparently it gets cracked from the extreme magic used, but no side effects or negative effects are stated. This makes it seem like a pointless detail that adds nothing to the story when it could've been a fascinating addition to the ending.
@Anonymous
Good point there. Nothing springs to mind immediately but I'll ponder on it and try and finagle the denouement around to include it if I figure out something interesting.
@Anonymous I read it as crackles of energy like sparks still dancing along her horns edge and striking the mangled grass below her.
Wait, wait, wait. Did Rainbow Dash hit relativistic blueshift speeds?!
So. Awesome.
@Nintyuk
It's both. I added in a short segment that hopefully eases the issue.
@nemryn
Yes :) And there's also a very special thing associated with getting near lightspeed that I was trying to invoke.
Surely Twilight's horn will heal in due time... maybe it will be years for a full recovery... but there's no doubt it will be.
Unicorns' horn is basicly like a bone, part of their skull... and if treated properly the bone will mend, better than before.
Especially considering that those were ''small-tiny'' cracks(stress fractures) (many, yes, a lot maybe, but still small in size)
This is definitely an official sequel to your previous fic. Regardless of its length, this is a fantastic story! Quality> quantity
Wait. So did Dash get a second cutie mark or something?
Post a Comment