[Crossover][Grimdark] Sounds like even the Pre-readers that have never played Silent Hill really liked this one.
Author: Jake Heritagu
Description: Pinkie Pie is being tormented by horrific nightmares. Unable to deal with it by herself anymore she seeks out Twilight's help, but will it have been the best decision when she finds herself alone in an abandoned, fog filled Ponyville?
All Chapters/Side Stories After The Break!
Silent Ponyville Entire Remastered Edition
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Silent Ponyville Part 1
Silent Ponyville Part 2
Silent Ponyville Part 3
Silent Ponyville Part 4
Silent Ponyville Part 5
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Silent Ponyville Part 1
Silent Ponyville Part 2
Silent Ponyville Part 3
Silent Ponyville Part 4
Silent Ponyville Part 5
Multiple Endings (Read after chapter 5!)
Game Over
It's Time to Get Baking
It's a Twist
UFO
The Truth
Sam
A Party for Two Sisters
More than Two Sisters
Additional Tags: Horror, Silent Hill, Monsters, Psychological, Thriller
Description: Ever wonder what became of The Colt from Silent Ponyville? A short look into the mind of a Sociopath in his jail cell and why he's still alive.Google Documents
I Met a God Today
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I Met a God Today
Additional Tags: Psychology, The Colt, Look into the mind, Drawings, Alone
[Crossover][Grimdark][Shipping] Story #2!
Description: It's been a month since Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash started dating. Everything was going fine until Fluttershy started experiencing horrific nightmares that started keeping her up at night. Looking for answers, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie seek out Twilight. But when the three mares find themselves within the world of Silent Ponyville, will things turn out for the better? Or will things end in tragedy?Google Documents
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 1
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 2
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 3
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 4
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 5
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 6
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 7
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Silent Ponyville 2 Part 1
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 2
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 3
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 4
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 5
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 6
Silent Ponyville 2 Part 7
Ending 1: Game Over
Ending 2: Something's Not Right Here
Ending 3: That's Just How It Is
Ending 4: Was it Inevitable?
Expansion Ending 4: Was It Inevitable +?
Ending 5: UFO
Ending 6: Face Your Fears
Ending 7: And Tjat's When the Meteor Hit
Additional Tags: Horror, Silent Hill, Monsters, Psychological, Suspense, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Twilight Sparkle
[Crossover][Grimdark]
Author: Brony17
Description: When Lance Strongshy's career is endangered due to relentless nightmares depriving him of sleep, his daughter Fluttershy once again overlooks the horrible past she suffered at his hoovess and enlists the help of her friends to cure him. But will the only fast enough solution actually save him, or destroy him?Silent Ponyville: Reunion (New Part 32)
Additional Tags: Nightmare, Suppression, Memories, Tension, Surreal
[Normal] (Takes place right after Silent Ponyville 2)
Author: JakeHeritagu
Description: Twilight Sparkle has been frustrated with her inability to figure out the inner working of a spell she discovered called the Mind Delve. When her annual evaluation suddenly springs up she finds an opportunity to travel to Canterlot to study this spell. But will she find all the answers she's looking for, and more importantly, will she like them?Study of the Mind Delve
Study of the Mind Delve Part 2
Study of the Mind Delve Part 3
Additional Tags: History Behind a New Spell
[Crossover][Grimdark]
Author: Jake Heritagu
Description: When Celestia leaves a cryptic message to Twilight about something being wrong with the town, Twilight is understandbly disturbed. However, trusting her teacher to handle the problem, she goes to sleep that night assured she can handle it. But when Twilight wakes up to a fog filled Ponyville with strange creatures out for her blood, will she be able to find her teacher and reverse the effect, or will Ponyville be doomed to be shrouded by this monster filled fog?Silent Ponyville 3 Prologue
Silent Ponyville 3 Part 1
Silent Ponyville 3 Part 2
Silent Ponyville 3 Part 3
Silent Ponyville 3 Part 4
Silent Ponyville 3 Part 5
Silent Ponyville 3 Part 6
Silent Ponyville 3 Part 7 (New!)
Additional Tags: Silent Ponyville strikes once more
[Crossover][Grimdark]
Description: Demitri Macabre, a serial killer who targets murders exclusively, finds himself in Ponyville after his last victim revealed that there may be a cannibal lurking in the quaint little town. However, when a visit to the library goes awry, he finds himself fighting for his life in a twisted version of the town shrouded in fog alongside the resident librarian, Twilight Sparkle. (An Alternate Universe taking place after Silent Ponyville 2)Silent Ponyville: Blood Chronicles (All Links)
Additional Tags: Twilight, Pinkie Pie, OCs (Demitri, The Colt, Lance Strongshy, various minor characters) Complete Silent Ponyville torments a vigilante
[Crossover][Grimdark][Sad]
Author: CodyMau
Description: Twilight's friends have been enduring nightmare related trauma's that she was able to cure with a spell, the only problem is no one will tell her what that spell did to help them. Curiosity always a driving force, she seeks to uncover the mystery. (Alternate Universe, takes place after Silent Ponyville 2)Silence of Ponyville
Additional Tags: Silent Hill Mystery Loss Past
[Crossover][Grimdark]
Author: Laegreffon
Description: Scootaloo is up to mischief as usual, alongside Apple Bloom and Sweetie Bell in finding new ways to get their Cutie Marks. However, a chance encounter with a strange Pegasus causes strange things to occur. When she crashes her scooter and finds herself stuck in a fog filled Ponyville with this strange Pegasus, will Scootaloo be able to find her way home, or will her journey end in tragedy? (Takes place after Study of the Mind Delve)Silent Ponyville: Darkness Scoots
Additional Tags: Scootaloo goes to Silent Ponyville
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It appears we may have come to the third page. Lemme tell you something, Jake. I hate reading fanfic (they almost always suck). I used to just pass over all the Story pages on EqD. I eventually found a couple stories that I may find fun to read, even for a fanfic-hating guy such as myself. You can read the rest of my view on fanfics at the bottom of the Junior Speedsters Forever page.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, this was the first fanfic I put on my "to read" list. This and CRISIS: Equestria. I've never played Silent Hill, but I know a lot about it. I haven't read any Grimdarks yet, but I thought I'd find them more interesting than a [Normal] fic.
Boy, was I wrong. I'm not insulting your story at all. I think it was amazingly well-written. It deserves the 5 stars I'm giving it. I guess I wasn't prepared for the torture porn involved in this story. Now I know why everyone complains about grimdark. The memories part at the end tore me up inside, but it fit so well with the Silent Hill feel. You also did very well with the monsters, and how they personify Pinkie's past. This is the first grimdark story I read on this site, and it probably will be the last. I don't think pretty ponies go well with skinning, butchering, and rotting. Once again, this was a really good story to read, and the descriptions of the monsters were VERY detailed. One good point I'd like to make is the frequent reminders of how badly the environment smelled. That's usually a thing to easily forget when playing or reading.
I guess Grimdark is not for me. Thanks for the damn good story. I enjoyed reading it.
Dammit! After sleeping on it (about 18 hours later), I want to read Part 2! I'm not a fan of Grimdarks, but damn! Part 1 was really well written! Still take my ^previous post^ seriously, though. It is true, I haven't read any fanfics (and enjoyed them) until this Pony fandom. This one was one of the few in which I had interest before I read my first.
ReplyDeleteGood writing, Jake. You write very descriptively. Few writers take the time to constantly remind us of how horrible the situation is (few writers can do it without annoying the reader). Keep up the good work!
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteI would recommend you read Silent Ponyville 2 for sure. I think it's the best story produced by the fandom. However, there is a story set between SP1 and SP2 called "Too Shy for a Rainbow" that acts as a prequel to Silent Ponyville 2 that you should read first. It really adds a lot to SP2.
@Ace2401
ReplyDeleteOh, how I hate shipping stories (the main reason why I didn't read fanfic until the pony fandom). I was wondering about that description: After Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash started dating....
I guess I'll read that beforehand. I won't let my opinions of shipping ruin it, though. Should only take a day, anyway.
That reminds me...
I read through the comments. You promised an explanation to the monsters in SP1. Really, I'm only curious about the Groaners. I've gotten all the others. In SH1, they were simply a manifestation of Alessa's fear of dogs. The Groaners here were rotting 3-legged ponies. I couldn't pinpoint the meaning behind them. That and Abstract Daddy's appearance (if you were going for that).
Also, I wanted to comment on the great use of foreshadowing. After finishing SP1, I went back to read the 1st chapter to better appreciate the dream sequence.
One last thing that has been eating at me every time I see it. It may be nitpicking, but I thought it would be worth mentioning. I'm sure you know this already, but colts are male horses BELOW the age of 4. Every mention of the Slender Pony called him a colt.
The problem: the word "Stallion" just does not flow well with most sentences. The word sounds too regal, and it certainly would not sound right being used on that particular character. If this is why you chose not to use it, well, good thinking.
Once again. Nice writing.
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteHere's the link to the explanation of the monsters: http://jake-heritagu.deviantart.com/art/Silent-Ponyville-Bestiary-215677102?q=gallery%3Ajake-heritagu%2F31046154&qo=11
As for the shipping, I wasn't particularly fond of them myself before I read Too Shy+Silent Ponyville 2. Trust me, Jake does the whole shipping thing in a very unique and totally in-character (for both ponies)manner that makes it so worth it. Even if you're unsure about it at first, trust me, it all comes together by the end.
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteHaha, I'm surprised I called you back with my writing, I wasn't expecting you to want to read Silent Ponyville 2 ^_^
Too Shy for a Rainbow isn't a required read, but it adds a lot to Silent Ponyville 2. I also wrote with Silent Ponyville 2 specifically in mind. I'm not a fan of shipping either, I do not do shipping unless I have a reason to do shipping. Silent Ponyville 2 gave me a reason to do it and explained the shipping in Too Shy for a Rainbow further. I also tried to at least be a bit unique in my shipping.
I'm not likely to write a shipping story beyond FlutterDash shipping. Unless I have a need to or a sudden inspiration. Or a very amusing joke. So yea, if you do read the future stories I await your reactions in anticipation <3
More stories? But I'm just about to go to work... ;.;
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ReplyDeleteLol Flutterbitch
ReplyDeleteI don't think that the real Princess Celestia at the end of 'Comprehension'
ReplyDeleteStudy of the Mind Delve seems like it's going to be a full-on Silent Ponyville (Silent Canterlot...ville?) story, but it's not labeled Silent Ponyville 3. Is that just because it doesn't seem to be taking place in Ponyville, or is it going to be a shorter story, like an intermission or something?
ReplyDeleteI'm really liking how Celestia seems to be involved in this one, too. I hope Zephyrion doesn't turn out to be right, even though that would have interesting implications on that plot, because I'd love to see what the Mind Delve brings to the plate from Celestia's subconscious.
@Cedric Bale
ReplyDeleteWell, you'll know when I update with Silent Ponyville 3 as that'll be the title of it. This is a tie-in story for it though, so it's setting up plot elements for it ^_^
I made a Facebook page about Sulent Ponyville recently. A tribute to Jake, as he's now my favorite author Of fanfiction.
ReplyDeleteMeant Silent Ponyville... Damn iPod. Look it up please. Has 3 likes :3
ReplyDeleteSo long as there are no pirate ponies with bed room eyes, I will read this by Nightmare Night! All of it!
ReplyDelete@Jake Heritagu
ReplyDeleteTo hear Silent Ponyville 3 being confirmed straight from the horse's mouth couldn't have made me happier(maybe it's been confirmed before but this is the first time I hear of it). Yet for the time being I will enjoy Study of the Mind Delve, instead.
@Jake Heritagu
ReplyDelete*Kisses Jake full on the mouth with tongue*
OK, now that THAT'S out of the way, I'd like to express my appreciation for your stories and in your decision to write more of them.
*high five*
Know what? I said this on fanfiction, but I'll say it again. In regards to The Silence of Ponyville by Codymau:
ReplyDelete...Fuck you, brony. Fuck you. I am a man. I am 20 years old, 225 lbs. and 6'3". I'm a security guard. I've been hit with rocks and bottles at work. I have a scar over my right eye from a drunk with a broken glass bottle. Someone tried to stab me three weeks ago, so I broke his face with my knee. In short, I am manly as fuck.
HOW THE EVER LOVING FUCK DID YOU MAKE ME CRY WITH A STORY ABOUT MY LITTLE PONY?
@Rex Ivan
ReplyDelete*attempts to picture Jake's reaction to that*
...
...BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
@La Barata ...now look what you did, Cody! You went and made an IRL Stryker cry! You should be ASHAMED!
ReplyDelete*wags finger at Cody*
@NotAGoodUsername360
ReplyDeleteOh you XD
@La Barata... I lol'd.
ReplyDeleteI just noticed Study of the Mind Delve isn't tagged [Grimdark] or any variation thereof. Hm. Still, very interested in seeing where this goes, and finding out more about this spell. About why Twilight couldn't follow her friends into their subconscious...es?, about who this Magus Darkarts guy might've been, and about how nobody's commented on the fact that the author's name is freakin' MAGE OF DARK ARTS. Really curious what that V stands for.
Also, I'm hoping your Luna lightens up a bit on the shy talk. I can only handle so many ellipses.
Also(2), awesome update speed! Are multiple chapters already written out, or did you just churn chapter two out that fast?
Oh no, just began The Study of the Mind Delve. You'd think that after talking about a spell that lets one face their nightmares, and how the caster has no control, that the correct course would be to NOT experiment on Twilight. Christ, I hope Twilight has a happy past... and I have a funny feeling that Celestia is just a projection of Twilight's mind, like a defense mechanism, and not the actual Princess.
ReplyDeleteWell, onto the next chapter.
*Fingers crossed*.
Well, chapter two of Mind Delve complete. My predictions where 'slightly' off. Poor Luna and Twilight, they don't know the severity of the road they're walking down. Maybe Twilight is still in her mind? Maybe not!?
ReplyDeleteI need chapter three.
Damn it, Jake. You and your stories!
Oooookk... I big amount of side-stories just popped up ? I don't think I will be able to read 'Blood Chronicles' any time soon, with all the stories I already have in my backlog... The others side-stories, maybe one day...
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Mind Delve, part 1 :
>and then Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash want to talk to me about some personal spell they need.
-*whisper* ~yay~
>“Owlowiscious will be there too if I need any help.
-*surprised* ''AH! Owlicious ! Where have you been ?''
...but, seriously, this Owl is in almost no story, for some odd reasons. Almost every author apparently forgot or just don't include him ?
>the name of the author. >“Magus V. Darkarts.”
-Well, if we just add even barely a small touch of 'obvious', his name would become ''Yevil Sorcererus''... a bit like with Alucard or Count Draclau(from Final Fantasy Tactic). ;)
>“I found it because my friends were having troubles with nightmares…and they were some serious nightmares.
-!!GASP!! ...Twilight is actually gonna talk to Celestia about those very strange nightmares that seem to especially target the Bearers of the Elements of Harmony !
I was waiting for this, since the first story, honestly.
(later : Hum, well... not exactly what I though would happen, it I guess it's good too... for now.)
>I think she took the lesson and used it to strengthen her resolve in life, rather than let it keep her down.”
-The best way to go with that sort of things, really.
>“I’d like to see what this spell does for myself. Would you grant me permission to cast it upon you?”
-*cough* ... Uh-oh, Spaghettios!
(later : Ah ? Well, false alarm. Good, I suppose ?)
>“P-Princess! How did we get here!?”
-You know... it's a good thing that the author didn't try to throw some random excuses, to prevent Celestia (the mighty Princess-Goddess) from being in and able to go through the 'spell'.
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Mind Delve, part 2 :
>nestled on a pillow surrounded by a fort made out of books. >“The munsters can’t get me while I read now!”
-Awww... Bookfort filly-Twilight. :)
A fortress of knowledge and equal cuteness. :D
>“Ooooh…curse my mind…this is so embarrassing.” Twilight groaned at Celestia’s laughing.
-And funny too :) ...let me guess ? This is gonna change soon, isn't it ?
>They’re so poorly written!” Twilight said letting loose her inner critic
-Is this the author making a joke about (new) fan-fiction authors ?
> “…You’d like me as your study partner?” Luna perked up
-Study partner, Go ! ...and after that : Bookfort, V2.0 ! :D
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Well, so far it's pretty interesting. It's 'different' than the previous stories, to say the least, but it's in no way a bad thing, really.
I suppose that the story, though being labeled 'Normal', will still have some bits of slightly dark stuff ? The bits of 'Comedy' are well received so far, at least ;).
@Nova25
ReplyDeleteThat's fine- it's a LONG AU continuity, and one based off of a short story I wrote a long time ago that turned out to be the first in a long line of Silent Ponyville fanon stories.
I was writing spinoffs before it was cool. *hipster glasses pull*
This is perfect a cross of my two favorite things silent hill and my little ponies friendship is magic. God how can this get any better?
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ReplyDeleteA Facebook page!
I absolutely positively super fudge-coatingly love these stories!
ReplyDeleteKeep writing them or I'll have to send some explosive chocolate sundaes your wayyyy.
@Pinkamena Pie
ReplyDeleteNot sure if want. :/
@Muffinsforever
ReplyDeleteMuffinsforever said...
Pinkie eh? This is gonna be double insanity with her involved.
Omg what hasn't ponies been crossed with?
Wait, nevermind, thought of it... (It better not ever happen >.< )
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American porn dvds.
i'mmunna go cry now,
ReplyDeletethat was f***ing beautiful
Question: Now that Twilight Sparkle has shown on the show that she has a few bolts missing too (Lesson Zero), is that grounds for her being featured in her very own Silent Ponyville treatment?
ReplyDeleteThe implications of how her childhood went (had no friends, terrified of 'magic kindergarten', imagining all the little filly foals laughing at her)seems to suggest she had something traumatic that happened to her as a foal.
And that she doesn't know what the spell does makes me wonder...
I would give my money to see this continued in that vein. :>
I've not played 'Silent Hill' (or seen the film), but I enjoyed these (read the 1st two so far).
ReplyDeleteWell, I say 'enjoyed' - horrified fascination would be a better description. I had no trouble with the Pinkie one, but #2...I'm having trouble getting some of the scenes out of my head (the bathtub and 'no flying in the house'). I'm mainlining comedy shipfics at the moment, which helps a little.
Well done (you bastard!).
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I remember on another thread you said you welcomed constructive comments about potential typos etc...
[CH4] It opened its mouth as it was going to bore its fangs down on her one last time. [not sure why but this sentence feels mangled to me]
[CH4] ...as if the siren had called it forth, than [then] summoned it back.
[CH4] They weren't' [weren't] like bird wings...
[CH5] The first sound that came to her ears was panting. Loud, exasperated [doesn't seem the right word, you mean as in 'angry'?] panting.
[CH5] She adjusted [how do you adjust your own eyes - do you mean like squinting?] her eyes as best she could, as she looked up at the mirror.
[CH5] The older mare's head seemed almost to snap [snap how - up, round or what?], as if...
[CH6] ...as the other doors she'd seen, or of rustic [rusty?] metal or...
[Ending 2] It's [Its] mouth white opened [mouth opened wide?] as it brought its mouth to tear into her. [also seems a bit mangled]
[Ending 2] -And knowledge of how to back [bake] cakes, and the...
...appologies if the above seems excessively picky (one of the [dis]advantages of using an ebook reader with an annotate function it it's easy to tag everything as I go along). No disrespect intended.
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Resetting the wing scene: not sure I buy being able to reset a broken bone by yourself - dislocated yes, but not broken - especially with only one foreleg working. Hmm, you could probably manage it if you tied your wing to something and stretched (makes me shiver just to think about it!)...
Final comment: even the 'best' ending (not including the comedy ones) leaves me feeling a bit empty - in my mind it seems unlikely that RD would forgive Lance as easily as Fluttershy did, so I live in hope she'll catch up with him one dark and stormy night...
@Jake Heritagu
ReplyDeleteGuess what! I'm back! I've done a lot of fanfic reading after a month, and I think I'm ready for Silent Ponyville 2. I've just finished Too Shy, and I intend to start SP2 tomorrow. I'm reviewing Too Shy here because it is a part of the SP series.
Now to get the criticism out of the way: This fic didn't (but sort of did at the same time) avoid what makes me hate shipfics. That thing is where the character has a crush on the other character right from the start. The reason why I don't like this is because I don't see it as canon. I could see it happening if those two characters were put together, they would develop feelings over time as long as their characters were played right.
On the other hand, you sort of did just that. You gave a reason why Fluttershy would have feelings for Dash with the flashbacks. I had to disagree a bit with how they developed their feelings, but I can also see it at the same time. Fluttershy's timid nature contrasts very well with Dash's boisterousness. They fit well together. The red colt who had a crush on Dash confirmed my guess that the letter was not from Dash. I doubt he is important enough to appear in SP2, but I don't know that yet, do I?
Other thoughts, hmm. I guess my overall thought on this story was confused. Not at the story, at myself. Normally I would bash the average shipfic as I have since my reading of early fanfiction (which ruined fanfiction for me until ponies). It could be the fandom: I could be so accepting of a fic like this just because I like this fandom and the ponies so much. It could also be the need for me to get through this, so I can read SP2.
I can't really tell which, but my guess is the former. I think it's the fandom that has kept me from hating MLP shipfics. Anyway, here's to Silent Ponyville 2. I loved the story, the use of foreshadowing, and descriptive scenery of the first, even if the amount of torture porn caught me off my guard. I've been wondering when I'd get around to reading the sequel. I only hope it has just as much, if not more, descriptive scenery as the first.
Wish me luck, and expect to hear from me within the week with my thoughts!
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteWhen I first read Too Shy, I was more or less of the same opionion as you. That said, all I have to say about your review of Too Shy is that after you read SP2 you'll be all like "I c wut u did thar Jake!" And I of course mean that in the best way possible. Seriously, you'll read SP2 and your enjoyment of Too Shy will at least double. You may even be compelled to read it again after reading SP2. I know I was.
@Ace2401
ReplyDelete"you'll read SP2 and your enjoyment of Too Shy will at least double."
This is already what I was expecting. It's why I bothered reading Too Shy. When wanting to get more from the same universe, I don't skip over optional stuff. It makes the end experience not as fulfilling. If it's a part of the story, I will read it. I think reading SP2 without Too Shy would leave me not feeling like I've gotten the whole experience.
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteYeah, everything about SP2 will make perfect sense and you'll see so much more in that story after you read SP2.
@Ace2401
ReplyDeletelol derp replace the first "SP2" with "Too Shy" in the above comment.
Needs...update...been...month...
ReplyDelete@pubert
ReplyDeletePatience, man. SP3 is on its way.
In the meantime, just enjoy the fan stories! XD
Well then. I finished SP2 this evening. Over the course of the week, I was contemplating what I'd write as a review. I'm in the middle of a Silent Hill binge. I finished SH2 a week ago, and I'm almost done with SH3 now. After reading this, I thought "Oh boy, somebody likes Silent Hill 2!" I like how you drew a lot from SH2; that one is my favorite. It's much more depressing than the other games.
ReplyDeleteThis post may seem like I'm bashing the fic, or I didn't get the subtext. Just keep reading. My opinion and understanding of the fic changed as I kept reading, so I want my post to mirror that feeling.
There are SPOILERS for SP2 in this post.
Firstly, the opening: Powerful scene. When the music box started hissing, I was thinking to myself "Uh oh." Later, as Pinkie is getting Twilight to put her in the dream as well, I was reminded of a question I like to ask my friends regarding Silent Hill. I'll ask it in another post after this. In this same scene, Twilight would see Fluttershy's dreams. I would say they weren't as scary as Pinkie's. I know each pony has their own problems, so that didn't bother me. What I did think was the repetition of the word "pain." It seemed to annoy me a bit. The repetition made it less of a powerful entity, and more like a simple word with little meaning. "Pain. Pain. Pain. Pain. Pain. Pain. Pain. Pain." Yeah, so what? That was my train of thought at the time. I was thinking "Show, don't tell."
Now then. After the first few chapters, I felt a little bit of disappointment with the lack of grim and dark imagery that was present in SP1. This had mostly deserted hallways, junk in disrepair, and broken objects. Not to mention the dragon. A dragon. Is it undead? Nope. Wow, scary. I didn't think much of the dragon until the end. At the time, I was asking: Where's the hellish rooms, the hanging bodies, the random blood smears? I thought to myself about my favorite scene in SP1: "Run." (You know) The amount of horror in that scene was amazing. The description of the room put me on edge (of my seat). You created a perfect build up to where you read that single word, and right then, you know you have to f-king run. I eat up scary stuff like that. I settled on the reason being: Pinkie's memories involve death and dismemberment while Fluttershy's memories were a bit more tame. Back to SP2. When Fluttershy was running through the sewers (or what I thought were sewers), I was wondering about the symbolism. At the time, I was at a loss. Now that I've finished, I know the water played a part, but I still don't get how she had to go left or right. The left-right choices: Was that some symbolism there?
Now, the dark pony, and the endless stairs. Once I saw the use of water, and how the dark pony's presence made the air "feel as if there was immense pressure, and hard to breath," I took a good guess that her dad tried to drown her somehow. The rest of the symbolic imagery was a little harder to guess. I could tell the nurse pony had something to do with the dark pony. The necklace of black flame meaning the nurse is under it's influence. The nurse's face bandaged up left me confused though. Even after I've finished the fic, I can't really tell what the symbolism was there until I read the beastiary. Back to the endless staircase. Another powerful scene to keep the reader on the edge. The whole flying underwater thing seemed a little odd, but it's good to reference back to ShyDash memories because that's what drives Fluttershy through the whole story.
Now for the more powerful scene. Fluttershy is sneaking past the nurse, who alerts the monsters of her presence. Another scene that kept me on edge. All the monsters were coming out of the woodwork, and Fluttershy could only run. Fluttershy being broken twice by the dark pony, and kicked by the nurse kept the scene exciting (don't take that the wrong way).
Later, more memories. The nurse beating filly Fluttershy made my guess the next scene. I was correct when just as Fluttershy left: "Oh doctor..." I thought to myself "Eyep. I knew it." Later, Fluttershy meets with Pinkie. I almost thought Pinkie was another part of the world until she spoke. I assumed Pinkie Pie has gone back to being guilty to dragging her friends to their deaths (or near-deaths). She is in an endless battle with her own guilt throughout this ordeal. That's heavy. Later, encountering Dash in the Otherworld: I grimaced, and thought "Oh geeze, I hope he has a good explanation for using THIS scene." When I read how Dash always burned her bridges behind her, I wore a content look, and thought, "Good job."
ReplyDeleteGetting near the end, the memories really shed some light (as they should). My guess was correct about her dad attempting to drown her, but Fluttershy killing her mother threw me off. I didn't anticipate that part at all. If there were any hints to that in the story, I missed them (except the opening). What left me guessing was the intent of the dark pony. Yes, it is her father; I know that. I was just wondering if you intended him to also function like Pyramid Head (PH was a manifestation of James' need to be punished for what he did to his sick wife. SP2 and SH2 have similar back stories). I was wondering if the dark pony was also there because Fluttershy believed she still needed to be punished for what she did (as she is still guilty of her misdeed, and accepting of her punishments after her trip through SP)
What I did like a lot near the end was Fluttershy's newfound motherly assertiveness. She is the right character to develop this way. Another powerful part is how she not only accepts her father's actions as a part of her life, but embraces them. She forgives her father for his actions, and reassures him that without them, she wouldn't have the friends she had now.
I started reading the endings. At first I was confused about "Meeting Pinkie and Dash in the Otherworld." I was thinking this meant saving them in the end. I corrected myself after the 3rd ending. The best ending was obviously my favorite. It ended the only way it really could. Her father is touched by her forgiving him, but they could never meet again. I was hoping she wouldn't suddenly become buddy-buddy with dad. It would be nearly impossible after what happened. It's also hard to hate her dad as the audience. The story tells of his great feats, and saving lives. Fluttershy makes the right choice not to smear his name, but to simply reconcile with her father. One thing left me wondering here: What is Twilight up to during all of this. One ending says she can see a few images. I wondered if she is standing in her library watching this. Another ending has her in some alternate reality with her book while she watches her friends. What is the time frame for her? Minutes? Real time? Probably not.
I'm running out of steam here, so I think I'm all done for now. SP2 was a great story. The ending was just right. You can't hate her father, but at the same time, you do. He's a good man, but a horrible father. Fluttershy sort of deserved it, but at the same time, she didn't. Stories that get you thinking like that have a longer lasting impression on the audience than if the author chooses for them. I'm looking forward to the other stories. I'm going to read Too Shy 2 then maybe Blood Chronicles or Mind Delve. I'd like to read them in order, so could you fill me in on all of the related stories and their order? Good luck on completing Mind Delve, and eventually starting SP3.
Wow, I didn't think I'd type that much. Actually I anticipated I'd do a lot. I should really just do reviews at ponychan. I'm sure potential authors would cream their pants at how much I type. Anyway, onto that question I mentioned earlier. I ask my friends this (as well as the gentlemen at various imageboards), and I try to get a well thought-out answer. Think long and hard about it, and answer truthfully because only you know what you would do.
ReplyDelete1. Assume the Silent Hill Series never existed. If you were thrust into a foggy town. How would you do? Would you survive to escape? What ending do you think you would get? The good--everything has been solved, and you accept your past--ending, or the bad--You learned nothing, and although you have escaped, it is likely to repeat--ending. Think hard.
2. You have played, and beaten every Silent Hill game with all endings. You are somehow thrust into a foggy world that you instantly recognize as a Silent Hill-esque town. You don't know exactly what horrors you must face, but you know that they will be manifestations of your past. You don't know what happened in your past, but you do know it had to be something horrible. With this knowledge of impending hell, and overlooking any detail may lead to your death, how will you survive? Will you be Pinkie Pie (in that one scene, she was a damn trooper who would not overlook any detail)? Don't forget, after Pinkie was separated, she had to fight with her guilt persona, and was ready to give up. Would fear overtake you before the story even starts? Would you be a damn trooper, dodge every monster, and have perfect headshots?
I'll give my answer to these questions sometime in the near future after a few people have given theirs. Be sure to answer truthfully. Don't be afraid to admit you would be overtaken with fear, or admit you'd be too weak to fight monsters. Remember that the town is created for you (or someone close). If you ran through blazing guns (say you are in the US Marines), wouldn't the town take precautions to pacify your strength depending on your past? Think about it! Don't be afraid to admit the truth!
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteAlright, first, I'll get the easy stuff out off the way. After SP2, you have Study of the Mind Delve (which is finished), and then you have A Rainbow's Surprise, which is also finished. Jake will also likely get the first chapter of SP3 out within a week (I know this because I'm his pre-reader). Blood Chronicles is AU but takes place sometime after SP2. You should read it. In fact, there's a number of good fan stories worth reading, and one has even been declared canon. Go here for everything: Silent Ponyville DA Group
Now about Fluttershy's father: You must not have read the story on DA. Lance is oh so very easy to hate with a passion. A bigger hatedom popped up around him (with me at the helm, no less) than around the Colt fro SP1. In fact, I am well known for hating the ever loving crap out of him. I've pretended to kill him in the comments more than once. In short, I think "total douchebag" is an understatement when it comes to him, and he is most definitely not a good man by any reasonable standard. He's a terrible man. Abusing your child kinda makes that a given. That said, he is not quite irredeemable, but still. He's extremely easy to hate. I just needed to say that.
AND ZOMG FLUTTERSHY DESERVED ABSOLUTELY NONE OF IT DESPITE WHAT SHE SAID SHE REALLY HAD NO IDEA WHAT SHE WAS DOING. FLUTTERSHY WAS THE VICTIM IN THAT SCENE WITH HER MOTHER. THAT WAS TRAUMATIC ENOUGH WITHOUT HER FATHER FLIPPING OUT. I MEAN, SERIOUSLY. *ahem* Sorry about that, but don't say bad things about Fluttershy. It makes me go into Hulk mode. XD
As for the endings, how did you like the one I wrote? (Mine was ending 4+ btw)
And Dash's scene really messed with me because it was an homage to that scene from SP2. In fact, it even inspired me to write something, which everyone will see and read eventually. XD
And now for your question:
Scenario 1: I think I would get the "best ending" so to speak. I'm sure I would stay sharp throughout the experience, and I would definitely learn my lesson. XD
Scenario 2: Sure I would be afraid, but I would work through that. I'm a trooper, as you say. As for the town catering to me, that would actually make it somewhat less of a physical ordeal. The puzzles would probably be much harder and gruesome to make up for that though. XD
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteI've actually been thinking about that ever since the fall weather has been making every morning dark, grim, and foggy as hell... just in case the reality bleeding ever reaches a climax. XD
1. Hmmmm... If SH never existed, or I'd never heard of it? I would probably survive... my worst fear, above all else, is isolation and being utterly lost and alone, so the town would probably keep the monsters to an absolute minimum to torment me. There wouldn't be any humans, or if there were, they would all be complete and total jerks that would turn on me at the drop of a hat. So... yeah, it'd be depressing, but not fatal. I got more than enough misery to entertain the town.
As for which ending I'd get? Hmm... probably the UFO Ending. XD
2. Like I said, I DO know all too well what the horrors of my past are... Though I may have repressed some of the more vividly horrid details that the town might use against me. I have moderate combat knowledge, and growing up in the forest has made me used to wielding weapons such as axes, chainsaws, and machetes, allowing me to use some pretty epic melee weapons... also, I love scoped weapons, meaning that it should be possible for me to go to a high spot and snipe monsters from a distance in outdoor areas. I'd also go looking for easter eggs and continuously break the fourth wall, like cursing the inventory system whenever I can't hold anymore or something. Oh, and get addicted to Health Drinks.
Man, I would make a fun SH game! XD
@NotAGoodUsername360
ReplyDeleteYeah, you would! They should stop making Downpour and just make that instead. XD
Wow, I want to type a string of expletives here, but I'll stifle it. I was almost done with another near-page length post. Lets just say I started a new paragraph, pressed TAB (it's natural), and pressed delete because I didn't want an indent.
ReplyDeleteTake a guess what happens when you do that.
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteCan you not use ctrl+z to undo that mass deletion?
@Ace2401 No, tabbing out of the textbox and pressing backspace is like pressing "Back" on your browser. Ctrl+z doesn't work and, if your browser didn't save the text when you ckick "Forward", you're... well... you're screwed.
ReplyDeleteIt's very frustrating. Especially with long comments or forum posts.
@FamusJamus
ReplyDeleteOh, right. I should have known that.
I was going to clarify my earlier post with what I meant in my review, but I lost all of that. Usually when I long-post, I pre-make it in open office to avoid just that, but I didn't expect the post to be so long. I am SO discouraged from retyping it, but I know I will soon, just not right now. I had a really nice thing going about how there is potential for moral and philosophical debate regarding the ending, and I explain why. I was on my last paragraph when I lost it all. I really don't want to retype it right now, so I'll get that post in sometime this evening or tomorrow. Maybe.
ReplyDelete@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteThe reason SP2 is much more sad and depressing than gore-filled or horror is because the inspiration for it was what I got from my playthrough of Silent Hill 2. And well...Silent Hill 2 is a sad story, its depressing, everything is falling apart and you're alone in this town filled with monsters...but horror to me it was not. Silent Hill 1 was horror, Silent Hill 3 was horror, but Silent Hill 2 was just sad and depressing XD
So yea, thats why Silent Ponyville 2 is what it is. As for why there isn't much symbolism for the death of her mother, her father was basically her punisher for it. Subconsciously she knows she doesn't have to feel guilty for her sin because she has her punisher. As long as she already paid for her sin, she didn't have to again in the town. Plus she still has happy memories of her mother. It's only that one scene that twists her mother's thought for her, and again, the punisher made things okay.
Silent Ponyville 3 is promising to be a great story. And I thank you for the in-depth review. I always love to read long reviews like this X3
@Jake Heritagu
ReplyDeleteSilent Hill 2 is best horror! The others weren't even scary!
*trollface*
SH3 did have awesome otherworld design though. Just not that scary XD
I just ran past most of the monsters, and sometimes killed the more annoying ones. XD
TROLLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL
@Ace2401
ReplyDeleteNow see, THAT'S how SH2 was for me.
"Oh hey look, a monster I can very easily avoid, very easily kill, and poses absolutely no threat to me whatsoever in my progress of the game :D"
Where as with SH3 I was like
"OHCRAP THE BULLETS AREN'T WORKING GUT THEM WITH THE SWORD CASUE THEY'RE IN MY PATH"
XD
And no we're not getting into another why SH2 is better discussion, I'm just explaining why the influence for SP2 was more lackluster than SP1's was to me. Having a different opinion won't change anything XD
@Jake Heritagu
ReplyDeleteAt this point I'm just trolling. XD
SP2 was way better than SP1 anyway, so TROLLOLOLOLOLOLOL. Seriously though, SP2 is the best fic in the entire fandom BAR NONE.
Literally nothing has gotten to me on such an emotional level. Except SH2. XD
Though SP2 was ten times worse with the sad because it was Fluttershy you tormented you F#$%ING MONSTER.
So yeah.
SH2 translates into better stories than SH1.
*trollface*
@Ace2401
ReplyDeleteBut Downpour actually looks promising... D:
@NotAGoodUsername360
ReplyDeleteTrue... XD
@Jake Heritagu
ReplyDeleteAnd for someone who doesn't scare easy and is instead more drawn towards interesting storylines (like me), SH2 was the ultimate deconstruction of the human psyche's reaction to depression and the horror of finding yourself to be your own worst enemy... Essentially, to have the suicidal self-destruct mechanism of the mind come to life to try and fulfill your darkest wish... AGAINST your will... plus the feeling that the environment is alive and wants to kill you in the most traumatizing and humiliating way possible.
Whereas SH1 was about an evil cult kidnapping a guy's daughter to try to birth their god that was so weak it could be easily killed by bullets, and SH3 was essentially just a teenage girl running away from a big, scary evil entity for the first half then running TOWARDS said entity for the latter half after it kills her father offscreen.
In other words, approximately as deep and horrifying as the average fairy tale. :/
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ReplyDelete@NotAGoodUsername360
ReplyDeleteI agree, and that's the reason Silent Hill 2 is my favorite in the series.
@Jake Heritagu
ReplyDeleteOh! I didn't even see your post; I would have gotten to an answer sooner. Here's reposting what I said earlier: After reading this, I thought "Oh boy, somebody likes Silent Hill 2!" I like how you drew a lot from SH2; that one is my favorite. It's much more depressing than the other games.
Yes, I could tell much of this story was from SH2. That's what I eventually decided when I saw how few horror elements were in this story. I mentioned in my review post how I wrote my posts. I wrote it in my opinion at the time I read the scene described. Earlier in the story, I was not liking it as much because it didn't live up to SP1 at the time. Eventually I started to compare it to Silent Hill 2 (I had just finished it a week before), and the story seemed much more enjoyable. You also confirmed my guess that the Dark Pony was there because Fluttershy believed she needed to be punished. I'm also glad you like to read long reviews because I like to write them. With stories like this, it's hard to sum up one's opinion in just a few sentences. By the way, I haven't done much with Silent Hill 3 since my review post, so I need to get on that. I'm about 3/4 of the way through.
Here's another repost of a question I still would like to be answered: When Fluttershy was running through the sewers (or what I thought were sewers), I was wondering about the symbolism. At the time, I was at a loss. Now that I've finished, I know the water played a part, but I still don't get how she had to go left or right. The left-right choices, the sewer: Was that some symbolism there? What would have been down the wrong paths other than a monster?
Oh, and one more thing. Fluttershy suddenly gets her motherly assertiveness once she confronts the Dark Pony. It's not fresh in my mind, but I think I missed the connection from where she gets that. She just learned how her mother was sick, and insane in her final days. I just remember that I didn't get how she gets the assertiveness used to scare away evil Pinkie Pie, and later wants a foal. Does she just grow up from her experience? Is her knowledge of her father make her want to give a foal the childhood she never had to make up for her mother? I'm sure it's in there, but I may have missed it.
@Ace2401
ReplyDeleteNow you.
I want to re-clarify my review post. This time it will be much shorter (hah, me typing short posts). I can't remember everything I typed, so I'll just do a little bit, and leave it at that. First thing:
No I didn't read it on dA. I don't have a dA account, nor do I see it useful getting one. I can access age-restricted content my own way on dA without an account, and I'm no artist, so I have no need for an account. I did keep a bookmark on the dA group though. I'm using to keep up to date on the SP fics. I didn't even know Mind Delve was finished until I went there. I finished it Friday, and I'll put a review up tonight.
This is getting long. Now for Fluttershy's dad. What I said was "he's a good man, but a horrible father." What I meant here was Lance is both a good person, and a horrible person (pony). He's saved hundreds of lives, but he has ruined one (Has he? More on this soon). This is somewhat of a moral-ethical argument. It's hard to find a right or wrong. The utilitarian wouldn't bat an eye knowing Lance needs to abuse his daughter to stay sane enough to save lives. The Kantian would never allow him to abuse his daughter, and would say his good deeds don't even come into the argument (I think; Ethics class was a while ago). My opinion: I think he is a horrible pony, and should be punished for his actions, but his helpfulness to ponykind should not be forgotten.
Now for Fluttershy's punishment. She both deserved it, and didn't deserve it at the same time. She KILLED her mother even though she knew it was wrong in her mind. On the other hand, her mother was insane. She sort of manipulated Fluttershy to kill her by threat of punishment, and threatening with her love. My opinion again: I don't think her punishment was deserving, despite what she said. Her mother manipulated Fluttershy into killing her.
One more thing about her punishment. I do love how Fluttershy embraces her punishment. Even though I don't believe she deserved it, it's great she embraces it as a part of her life. She shows how without the punishment, she would've been completely different. She would've never met her friends, and would've never accomplished FlutterDash. Maybe without her abuse, she would've had a better life. We'll never know. We only know she wouldn't be the Fluttershy we know and love.
About your 4+ ending. Let's see, it's not fresh in my mind. At first I was a little annoyed that someone made a good ending out of what is supposed to be a sad ending. Fluttershy makes peace with her father as the best ending because he's the one who caused her pain. In the Ending 4, she feels she has not been punished enough for her actions (If I remember correctly). The purpose of Ending 4+ is so Rainbow Dash can reassure her that she is not at fault. By the time I was done reading it, I liked the ending. Like the best ending, Fluttershy is convinced (maybe) that she is not at fault for her mother's death. Unlike the best ending, she doesn't make peace with her father (which is important to the best ending), and she doesn't acquire the independence and motherly assertiveness essential to her closure. In the best ending, she grows a little while in this ending, everything simply goes back to normal. So in short, SP2 needed a good ending because there were several bad endings and one best ending. At least one alternate good ending is necessary.
Ah, now that SP2 is done, I promised I would answer my own scenarios.
ReplyDelete1. If I were suddenly thrust into a strange world that is my subconscious, I think I would do well. I would at first explore a lot, and look for any clues. Any monsters I would come across, I would run and hide. Only until I know their limitations, I would avoid them at all costs. I have an attention to detail, so I think I wouldn't pass over any clues to my subconscious, allowing me to get the best ending. Without knowledge of SH, I would probably live to learn my lesson.
2. If I had been put into a world I instantly recognized as Silent Hill, I would panic a lot. First I would do whatever I could to wake my self up from this dream until I started bleeding (bang my head on a wall or something). Once I accept the truth, I would do my best to be a "trooper." I would use whatever I could use as a weapon, and like most FPS games, I would try to kill everything in my path to be sure nothing surprises me. The problem is, SH is formed around your subconscious, and will probably do what it can to weaken you. You can be really good with guns, and know kung-fu; that doesn't mean you'll be able to use those skills as well as you could in real life. I bet if I tried to kill everything, they would get stronger, or there would be more of them, and I would be overtaken by exhaustion. No doubt, I would be looking for anything out of the ordinary, and I would get far. I just don't think I would get past the hardest bosses due to the reason above. My active resistance to the world would get me killed. I would try too hard to finish the story, and learn the truth. Every Silent Hill has the character acting normal as themselves, and surviving through the world how they were supposed to.
Oh geeze, I'm still not done. NOW onto Mind Delve. Not much of a review here, actually. Not much to say. To me, this story is more like an intermission. Good story. Short and sweet. It's good to know Twilight has no messed up memories. My biggest point here: Filly Twilight is adorable. I love how you wrote her. She reminded me of this comic:
ReplyDeletehttp://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/09/comic-book-clones.html
Not the saucy aspect of it, just the face I imagined while she read in her fort was the one in this comic.
About Luna: Did you rewrite her after Nightmare Night came out? What kind of changes did you make other than her speech pattern? I'm also throwing out a warning for writing her. She stops using plural pronouns (we/us) halfway through the episode. Anytime before that is fair game. After, she acts quite normal. The warning is just so writers don't overuse and overplay her speech pattern (which has already run rampant). It's not a bad thing to use it, it's just risky.
Anyway, now that Mind Delve is over, I await Silent Ponyville 3. I'll be reading some other fiction until then. I might be reading the other Silent Ponyville stories. We'll see.
NOW TO COPY AND PASTE ALL OF THIS!
A day later. I guess you're all still reading my mega-post. Well, news: I'm almost done with SH3. Once I'm done, I'll read a new story that ISN'T MLP fanfiction (my god; is it possible anymore?).
ReplyDelete♫Guess what I found last night♪ (sing-song voice; Alt + 13&14)
http://otakunoeiyaku.blogspot.com/2011/02/silent-hill-2-chapter-1.html
Ducky has finally finished the final chapter of her Silent Hill 2 novel translation! She even took the time to include screenshots in each chapter to help the reader visualize the scene. For a long time, the novel was only in Japanese.
What's best about the novel is the descriptions and how short it is. Most video game novels expand the story with lots of detail. This does the same, but not as much. There are only 6 rather short chapters (with pictures). I've skimmed through the story, and it doesn't skip any important parts. It holds the important (and even the less important) scenes, and trims out all of the running and gathering. Spoilers: The novel ends with the "In Water" ending. I sort of wish it ended with the best ending, but this is still the second best.
Is Wither and Spring of CodyMau's Silence of Ponyville supposed to be Jake and Brad, respectively?
ReplyDelete@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteResponding a day late lol.
I would kinda recommend a DA so you could join discussion of the SP fics there, as we have quite the community, but that's your choice. The reason I brought it up though was because if you'd have read it on DA you probably wouldn't have said that it's hard to hate Lance. SO MANY OF US HATE HIS GUTS and it shows in the comments. XD
Really, as far as Lance goes, he's committed one of the most terrible acts anyone could do (the act in question being child abuse) and he did it to a much beloved character with no real remorse. That's what makes him terrible in most everyone's eyes. Again, more people hate him with a passion than people hate the Colt from SP1 with a passion.
At the risk of sounding like a broken record, I have to say that Fluttershy deserved no punishment for her actions. She was the victim of her mother's death. She was too young to really understand what she was doing. I know you don't mean that she deserved what happened to her, but it hurts my soul to read she deserved anything other than love and kindness after what happened with her mother. That said, I too love how Fluttershy accepts what has happened to her and makes the best of herself, even if I disagree with her saying she deserved any of it. Fluttershy is best pony.
>At first I was a little annoyed that someone made a good ending out of what is supposed to be a sad ending.
Sorry, but I have to say this in response to that: TROLLOLOLOLOLOLOL XD
In any case, I wrote it because ending 4 was so dang heartbreaking for me, and I wanted to feel better. I could of course only accept a result that was realistic and tied everything up nicely, and yet did not try to turn the worst ending into the best ending. I showed it to Jake, he liked it, and told me to post it as an official alternate ending. I was happy about that. XD
Ah, finally finished Silent Hill 3. I guess I'm taking a long hiatus from fanfiction because I'm moving onto the Silent Hill 2 Novel (actually it's short). Once I'm done with that, I might read something else, or I may start Silent Hill 4.
ReplyDelete@Equinenox
I have a bit more on my scenarios. This regards #2. In the case that killing each and every monster doesn't make it harder for me, and I do make it to the end, I think my active focus on anything strange would get me a bad ending. In the 1st scenario, I said I have a strong attention to detail. I can spot things out of the ordinary. In the 2nd scenario, I would examine everything, even the unimportant, just to make sure I didn't miss anything.
Check out Shattered Memories, for example: If you stop to examine each and every object -- beer, pinball tables, or cigarettes -- when you should be looking for clues, you get a bad ending. Check 'em out.
Another possibility for the 2nd scenario is I would think of the world more like a dream that can be ignored or forgotten once beaten. In the 1st scenario, I would take everything seriously. Once I learn my lesson, I fully understand what I must do. Back to the 2nd: Once I learn my lesson, I would take it as another step closer to finishing this "game." We all say we'd be a trooper. We know there is something to be learned, and we would do whatever we could to get to the end. Once we reach it, have we learned anything? We know about Silent Hill, and how it works. We know there is something we need to learn when we enter it. Since we know about the world, we treat it more as a game to be beaten, and we get more of a disconnection from the truth when it happens. That is why I think previous knowledge of Silent Hill can be one's downfall.
Try to mull that over with your own scenario. Do you really think you would be an unstoppable, puzzle-solving, badass?
@Ace2401
Now you again. I won't spend much time on debate. Look at my previous post again, as it describes my feelings. Each paragraph regarding Fluttershy's punishment and Lance's fate are in this format:
Side 1, Side 2, My opinion.
Calm down; I never said Lance deserves a second chance, or something like that. I said he should face his own punishment for his daughter. Abuse like that (nice job with it, Jake) makes him a terrible person (pony).
Regarding Fluttershy. Same story; read my post again. Side 1, side 2, my opinion. I'm merely stating 2 possible arguments, and then my own opinion. I'm not going to repeat anything, just re-read it.
Finally about ending 4+.
>At first
I'm pointing to this because it usually means it was my opinion "at first." That means my opinion changed. Read my post again. What I didn't say in my post was entirely why I was annoyed. I think this sad ending wrapped it up nicely. Every Silent Hill needs a sad ending. What I did say was how every ending was a bad ending except the best ending and silly endings. There is no "good-ish" ending. This is why I praised your ending. It provides the reader with not the best ending, but something we can still see happening.
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteBlogger has eaten my comment twice now. D:<
I'll get back to you in a little while.
OK, finished reading Too Shy #2. You'll be disappointed if you expected another mega-review, from me. I don't think much for Shipping stories, but I do have one thing to say about it:
ReplyDeleteD'awwwww
Other than that, my train of thought in the story was this: "Rainbow Dash, how can you be so cruel? Oh wait, what was the name of the story? OK, I know what is going to happen." Then it played out how I expected. Dash was raising money, as I expected. I momentarily came to Fluttershy's conclusion once she came out of Lyra and BonBon's. I then thought "Oh, she's probably moving stuff for them."
In short, the story played out the way I expected. The wedding was still pretty D'awwww, though.
New topic: Nice to see more stories popping up on EqD. I need to make a new folder for these side stories (hah, foalder). Congrats, Silent Hill and your stories have kept my attention for longer than I expected. I thought I'd read the Silent Hill 2 novel, but damn, I've already started playing Silent Hill 4: The Room.
I have no idea why people say Silent Hill 2 is the scariest game ever (sans Amnesia: The Dark Descent). SH2 is just depressing, and SH3 is mostly plot for the SH story arc. Silent Hill 4 is scary as shit (don't mind the language; I'm serious). Zombies (ghosts) climb out of the walls, and float at you. You can't kill them, and their mere presence causes damage to you. By far, SH4 is the scariest in the series (so far).
One last thing. Sooner or later, you'll read my review post for SP2. Once you get this far, I have a question. Do you need another spelling/grammar checker? I don't mean to insult you or your editors, but I see a lot of mistakes reading your work (and other's). I see the occasional sentence that can be reworded to not confuse the reader, and I see missing commas all of the time. I also see sentences ending in prepositions, but I don't correct them because the correction IS the confusing version (except one example in Too Shy #2 that I vaguely remember; I reread it 4 times to understand it). I focus on who/whom often, but the problem I see everywhere (about 12 instances in Too Shy 2) is further/farther.
I hope this doesn't sound insulting. I'm offering to go over a couple of your stories with a fine-grammar comb (as fine as I can get it). If you want to see what I can do first, I can start with Too Shy #2, and send you a doc file with my corrections. Once you give me the OK here, I can go about my work, and show you what I've got.
Awesome, I finally catch up in all but Blood Chronicles and more content. WHAT IS UP WITH THIS FANDOM?!
ReplyDeleteBoy it's quiet in here. I think I'm done Playing Silent Hill for a long while. I actually finished Silent Hill 4 LAST NIGHT. Yep, I spent all day Friday and Saturday playing it nonstop. I take back Silent Hill 4 being the scariest. The ghosts are scary as hell for the first couple levels, but then they lose their scary. All of the other monsters suck; they're just ugly, and they make funny sounds. It was hard, but I got the best ending.
ReplyDelete@Jake Heritagu
Jake, you're going to need to catch up to these questions I'm throwing out. Start reading from your previous post; I only hope people don't skim through my mega-posts because I do put a lot of detail in my typing. Some things are easy to miss.
By the way, if you haven't read my other mega-posts recently, there is a Silent Hill 2 novel! The last chapter was translated a couple weeks ago. Read it! It doesn't have the best ending, but it sort of is the most canon. (James Sunderland disappears when he goes to SH2, so the "Leave" ending isn't entirely canon.)
I DO watch the dA page for updates every now and then, so don't worry about me missing anything. I'm practicing my drawing, so I may soon get a dA page, and join the #SP group.
Now I know how much you folks hate Lance, and how you hate seeing Fluttershy get abused. Well, I can't believe I missed it, but Jake was using an important plot device. I'm one of those guys who has spent over 1000 hours on TVTropes.org, and I see you have a SP page for it. Be sure to add "The Woobie" to the page.
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TheWoobie
Fluttershy is a good example of the Woobie. She is pushed through all of these hardships, abuse, and killing her mother. Up until Silent Ponyville, she is timid and weak (and adorable). After her realization, she is much stronger-willed. You all know the rest.
@Haimerej
ReplyDeleteI think I'm going to start a drinking game for these comments:
Every time someone states that they haven't read Blood Chronicles, take a shot!
Better stock up on brandy...
Jake I have an idea dfor silent ponyville 3
ReplyDeleteThe small filly sobbed as a mix of pain and fear overwelmed her. "I-I tried my best p-please don't hurt me!" she said fearfully to the strange shining pony, who she saw was holding a sewing needle. As she saw it walk closer through her tears she muffled her words. "p-please d-dd-don't hurt me!" but to no avail the pony came closer and then plunged the needle into the filly's leg.
Rarity awoke with a horrified scream. That was the last straw she thought, the nightmares had to stop.
@Ace2041
ReplyDeleteI know that Jake is a horrible monster and all but I bet you laughed your @$$ off when Fluttershy told off Cupcakes Pinkie Pie
You are a horrible monster whose soul has been crushed, burned, and compressed to nothingness......... AND I LOVE IT!!!!! Teach me your ways! X3
Jake, you are a horrible monster whose soul has been crushed, burned, and compresed to nothingness.......... AND I LOVE IT!!!! Teach me your writing ways!
Ugh. Horrible comment error that whole second part was for Jake XP
ReplyDelete@Not A Good Username 360
ReplyDeleteSorry, it wasn't that I chose not to read it, I just put others in the SP fandom higher in priority, and they KEEP GETTING RELEASED. I cannot keep up with this stuff.
@Haimerej
ReplyDeleteI understand. XD
Epic series thus far, this made me pick up the Silent Hill games, not the other way around! :-D
ReplyDeleteOH MY GOD REALLY?! TWILIGHT SPARKLE?!...you sir...you have a billiant mind
ReplyDeleteI really want to read number 2, but I disown all Rainbow Dash shipping. This is gonna take sometime for me to think.
ReplyDeleteAmazing, another story of Silent Ponyville!!!
ReplyDeleteThe dark entity of the Silent Underworld has prepared another hellish puzzle world full of dark grief and past guilt, this time for everypony favorite egghead, Twilight Sparkle. Defeating your inner demons in the Silent Underworld has always been a epic task, but could Twilight, whit the help of her number one assistant Spike, defeat the hidden darkness of the wise and benevolent ruler of Equestria for the last thousand years, her most beloved teacher, the Sun Goddess, Princes Celestia? The sadness, grief, guilt and hate of more than one millennial left festering await for us in this part of JakeHeritagu graet saga: Silent Ponyville.
Great just when I finished Homecoming, Silent Ponyville 3 gets released. I wonder if I can find my copy of Silent Hill.
ReplyDeleteSP3! Awwww yeaaaaa. SP1 was the story that got me into fics in the first place.
ReplyDelete@Travis Smith
ReplyDeleteDo yourself a favor and read it. Although it's not quite as good if you don't read the set-up fic, but I don't think you would want to read that one just yet.
I REALLY think this story needs to have it's page fixed a bit.
ReplyDeleteIt's all a bit of a mishmash, and it's increasingly difficult to identify which story is by the original author.
@shadefox
ReplyDeleteYeah, it does need a bit of a fix up, and NotAGoodUsername360 isn't credited for his story. :/
Still, every story posted here is worth reading, so yeah.
@Ace2401
ReplyDelete@Ace2401
So, did you ever want to continue that debate/conversation we had? I have the page subscribed, but it sure has been quiet. I'd like to know Jake's opinion on my posts since his last post earlier in the month. I just don't want to keep mega-posting in fear that he will skim over it.
You folks new to the thread. Answer the questions in this post: @Equinenox. I want more opinions. Get a little bit more detail with my opinion on scenario 2 here: @Equinenox.
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteYeah, sorry. Stuff happened and I disappeared for a while, actually. Basically all I said though is that I wasn't really trying to argue, I was just pointing the opinions of the vast majority of the SP fanbase.
As an addendum to that, if you haven't started reading SP: Reunion yet, do that now. It's pure amazingness.
This story should almost have its own page for side-stories, at this point...
ReplyDeleteSeriously, I'm ''almost'' having trouble finding Story 3 in the page.
...might be a suggestion for Setisto, no ?
This is quickly turning into the new Fallout Equestria. I'm glad I don't read both.
ReplyDeleteDon't get me wrong, I've been a massive fan of Silent Ponyville from the start. Our beloved monster, Jake, has demonstrated a command of the Silent Hill universe and concepts that rivals that of the design teams that worked on the later games and movies.
ReplyDeleteThat said, I notice a huge leap in quality and audience discomfort in the latest episode of the mane storyline. Far as I'm concerned, this is a very good quality for a Silent Hill type thing! The mark of the games and the movie has been that, regardless of lore-marring, the audience was far from cozy and safe-feeling in their seats. This was exemplified, for instance, in the "letter" received, spying the pattern hidden therein... or the entire fight with the... uh... whatever it was that tried to eat Twi in the latest chapter.
Once again, I am reading well past my bedtime this morning. I will have unsettling dreams. And it will all have been worth it.
I have to say, these stories make me want to play Silent Hill, and that scares the shit out of me
ReplyDeleteI like these stories.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite moment? Either Flutterage telling off Cupcakes Pinkie, Cupcakes Pinkie getting killed, or Story of the Mind Delve;
FFOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRREEEEEVVVVVVVVVVVEEEEEEEERRRRR!
I loled at that. It was just too funny.
SILENT PONYVILLE THREEEEEE! I am SO PSYCHED.
ReplyDelete@Forte Canter
I read both, and I'm a happier person for it.
Finished reading the first story and loved it. The chapters were overflowing with action. Pinkie faced danger after danger after danger. It looks as if a whole lot of ideas have been condensed into the span of a few chapters. There was no shortage of description here. The extent of the gore and horror was very clear. It’s pretty easy to imagine what monsters(or zombies?) must have looked like.
ReplyDeleteInitially, i found the events to be rather random and it didnt seem like there was any buildup of the plot at all. Like.. just seemingly random events happening. But i was glad to be proven wrong when i reached chapter 5. The linkup there was amazing. Its spectacular how that string of bizarre events can actually turn out to make sense, and monsters were manifestations linked to actual memories. The conclusion made me go like 'ooohh... i get it...' It also ended off with a slightly sad tone that sort of made the story touching. Overall, i think this is one of the more memorable fics i've read.
"They are watching."
ReplyDeleteMommy.
silent ponyville 3!!!!! i love this so much thank you jake heritgru (sorry i forgot how to spell your name!)
ReplyDeleteI have felling about a way to end SP3.
ReplyDeleteTrollestia will strike again....... XD
Silent Hill (Remastered) is the greatest story i've read, and the ending brought a tear to my eye, keep it up! :D
ReplyDeleteThis is the best fanfic series I have ever read, brings back some memories.
ReplyDeleteSP2 made me shed some tears... poor Fluttershy.
Amnesia refrence?
ReplyDelete...
Ah, well, sleep is overrated anyway.
I've been here since SP1 (never posted though xd) and I never expected that the story could become so deep. Can't wait for the game to release. It'll be awesome!
ReplyDeleteIs there a way to find the rest of SP3 if it is out there?
ReplyDelete@gaston
ReplyDeleteSP3 is in progress and this page is up-to-date, though another chapter should be coming out this week. However, I suggest following both Jake and the SP group on DA.
Woah, what an assassins creed reference in silent ponyville?
ReplyDeletethis is getting to be some assassins creed bullshit
ReplyDeleteanyway nice chapter as usual
Assassin's Creed? What? Where? I didn't see any AC references...
ReplyDeleteAnyways, I'm glad Twilight found somewhere (questionably, I don't trust Mr. Darkarts) safe to leave Spike, hopefully the pace will pick up a bit without her worrying about his safety. Also, you kept writing Spike in this chapter as being a bit too... I don't want to say too intelligent, Spike is a pretty smart cookie. But he was definitely being a bit, wordy I guess? A lot of his dialogue I thought Twilight was speaking at first, just because of the way it was written. It was a bit jarring.
Still, it was a fantastic chapter. Celestia's obviously invoked something different from what Twilight did via Mind Delves, what with meeting other ponies. Even if it is still following 'video game' rules, which I'm very glad Twilight caught onto, that's totally something she'd notice. Since Celestia seems to have brought Silent Ponyville to reality, as opposed to ponies going there via dreams, does that mean that that crucified pony was actually dead, and not just something pulled from Twilight's mind to unnerve her? D:
I'm also hoping that Dragon Merlin turned into an earth pony has some role in all of this. That idea is just plain interesting. Maybe Darkarts is a descendant? And speaking of Merlin, that scene with him speaking to Twilight gave OOOH I JUST GOT WHAT THE ASSASSIN'S CREED REFERENCE OTHERS WERE MENTIONING WAS. God I'm such a derp. Anyways, yeah, that scene gave me shivers.
Please, Jake Heritagu! The word you're looking for is 'scraping', not 'scrapping'!
ReplyDeleteOK! I think I figured most of the monsters out!
ReplyDeleteMay contain spoilers, read at own risk.
PINKIE:
-The white fillies are a representation of her sister's body after The Colt was finished with her.
-The groaners... I honestly have no idea. Same applies to the giant pink monster.
-The Slender Pony (or Slender Mare) represents The Colt.
FLUTTERSHY:
-Manequins... No idea what so ever.
- The nurses are a manifestation of her father's head nurse.
-The dark creature is a representation of her father.
-The dragon represents her fear of dragons.
Tried my best to not spoil the story for anyone.
Hello again, folks.
ReplyDeleteI don't have much to say, actually. I'm liking the story so far.
When I started reading I thought "Oh god, he's doing The Room!" Twilight then opens the door, and I breath a sigh of relief. I'm guessing this all comes from Celestia's mind, so I can actually take a few guesses about what monsters are what.
I was bothered how Twilight can tell there are "rules" she must follow. I prefer when crossovers aren't so "blatantly obvious." I thought about it for a while, though. I thought back to the first two stories, and tried to find any "rules" that were obvious. I can't think about it right now. Anyway, I'm seeing it less and less of a bad thing. Twilight is quick-witted, and I shouldn't be surprised when she spots things like that. Oh, and that's a clever in-universe way of justifying hammerspace.
Something good: The depressing scene of the crucified pony was very well described. I could very well see what was happening, and I felt Twilight's pain. I guess the pony was clever enough to get out of her house, and thought she was more clever than the "rules."
Last thing: Are you sure you don't need someone to check your grammar? I see so many missing commas that would go unnoticed anyway, but I feel I must fix them!
any one can please send a link to the side story b4 silent ponyville 3 rainbows surprise, i cant freaking find it :/
ReplyDelete@ghandilow Too Shy for a Rainbow/Rainbow's Surprise
ReplyDeleteDrat, I still haven't started SP3 yet. *sadface*
I have a very, VERY bad feeling that Twilight is going to deeply regret her decision to leave Spike with Darkarts...
ReplyDeleteWell, only one way to find out.
I'm wondering why didn't Twilight connect The Fog with Pinkie and Fluttershy's mind delving yet. Lets just wait and see what happens.
ReplyDelete@NOFURR
ReplyDelete@Jacen Caedus
@Cedric Bale
Hah! I actually asked Jake about that... No, the reference wasn't intentional, I had to show him a YouTube upload of the AC2 ending. XD
@AwesomeCabageOVER9000
ReplyDeleteHis DA account has a bestiary that has author's illustrations of all the monsters and their symbolism. XD
@NotAGoodUsername360
ReplyDeleteInteresting, knowing that the reference wasn't intentional.
@NotAGoodUsername360
ReplyDeleteReally? How did I not know this? Thanks anyway x)
This was awesome!! I love the way the elements of harmony wound in. I must say I like Fluttershy's story better, if felt like so many more little elements fit together in the end. It seemed like with Pinkies the author was trying to throw in too many other references. Both needed to be proofread a little more, and got repetitive with the wording, but the concept made me not care while I was reading. Excellent my friend :)
ReplyDeletei have a long list of fucked up gory shit i can put up with and other fucked things but one i cant stand at all is child abuse witch god damn chapter 5 of silentponyville had a lot of. the whole fluttershys past thing is probably the only thing in the series that made me cringe the most. i like the series you have come out with and most of all looking foreword to game coming out. don't stop what you'r doing because it's great.
ReplyDeletecan wait for silent ponyville: 3 part 5 since Silent Ponyville: Reunion is in Deviant and won't let me read it. Would love google doc version of it soon
ReplyDeleteTwilight! Rarity! NO!
ReplyDeleteHoly shit. Holy shit! This chapter! THIS CHAPTER, MAN! You have no fucking idea how badly I want to read the next chapter asap.
ReplyDeleteCliffhangers like that should be illegal.
Around the end of this chapter (5), I was all like: TWILIGHT, Y U NO DRINK MAGIC POTION THINGY?
ReplyDeleteand at the end I was like: The potions thingy is trolling you Twi...
Anyways, this was EPIC. Keep 'em coming!
Someone needs to do Silent hill: Orphan MLP crossover
ReplyDeleteHmm...
ReplyDelete-Two mortally injured Ponies
-One Health Potion
-One is Viewpoint Character
-The other is Element of Generosity
Working under the assumption that you cannot split a health potion, the question is not "What will happen", but "How it will happen". I have yet to be turned away by your grimdark scenario becouse so far, you have treated the aspect death with grace and weight. Even a pony we never knew is given her own Eulagy. But it remains to be scene how you will treat the death of a Main Charactor.
Oh Celestia... Poor Sparkler...
ReplyDeleteSilent Ponyville: Reunion updated on Deviantart! I assume they haven't been through Eq Daily editiing yet.
ReplyDeleteI was wondering if you were going to finish Silent Ponyville 3
ReplyDelete@Derp
ReplyDeleteHe is, it's just that his life seems to be getting in the way of his creativity again.
*shrug*
There's always the fan stories in the meantime, though.
@Jake Heritagu darn you, now I must play the series and then re-read this...I didn't need sleep anyway O_o
ReplyDelete4 words. More Silent Ponyville three.
ReplyDeleteyo jake are you dead ???
ReplyDeletehttp://www.fimfiction.net/story/16687/Silent-Ponyville-3
ReplyDelete"On Hiatus"
Chill, and enjoy one of the many extended stories for Silent Ponyville. They are available here, FimFiction, and most importantly, the Silent Ponyville Group on DeviantArt. In that group, Jake comments on what side-stories are canon to his own.
You all are quite welcome for the new chapter. It was a pleasure to write, and a pleasure to work with Jake on his story. I have done my best and I hope you all enjoy the next installment of the story; it will be out shortly~
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@Mindblower
ReplyDeletethank you ... ive waited soooo long for this
Wow, you have a lot of parts, i will bw busy for quite some time, good work ♥
ReplyDeleteWhen does this get updated again? SP3 already has chapter 9 out.
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