Friday, May 13, 2011

Story: Spitfire (Update: Chapter 2+ 3 Side Stories!)

[Normal] Holy side stories Rainbow Dash.


Author: Sithicus
Description: After the disastrous events of the Grand Galloping Gala, Rainbow Dash is met with a certain unexpected guest the following morning.
Spitfire
Spitfire Part 2 (New!)


Additional Tags: Character Based Friendship Piece Cute

Side Stories after the Break!  (3 New!)


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Author: Sithicus
Description: When Rarity comes home all she wants to do is clean up and forget about the horrible night she's spent, but her sister has other plans.
Sweetie Belle

Additional Tags: Rarity, Sweetie Belle, Prince Blueblood Cameo, Special Guest Pony Cameo, More Cute Character Based Fun

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Author: Sithicus
Description: Pinkie's home from the Grand Galloping Gala and suffering from total dissapointment in the Party Preperations and Style chosen. Who can cheer her up? Why Pinkamina can, can.
Pinkamina

Additional Tags: Utterly Insane Pinkie Cheering Up, Pinkie Pie, Pinkamina Diane Pie

[Random]

Author: Sithicus
Description:  Applejack returns home from the Grand Galloping Gala to report her failings. Granny Smith and Big Mac are waiting to give her a bit of encouragement, but will the younger mare understand the lesson she is being taught?
The Apple Family

Additional Tags: Family Bonds Tested and Strengthened, Applejack, Granny Smith, Big Macintosh

[Shipping]

Author: Sithicus
Description:  Twilight Sparkle is exhausted after a night at the Grand Galloping Gala, but when she arrives home to get some rest she discovers somepony has been waiting for her. Will she get teh chance to explain why?
Lunar Repose

Additional Tags: Twilight Sparkle, Spike, Guest Pony, Potentially Ship-Tastic Hints Ahoy!

[Shipping]

Author: Sithicus
Description: After the Gala Celestia prepares herself for a bit of harmless fun with a few little ponies.
Princess Celestia (New!)

Additional Tags: Equestria's Ruler Plots Sexual Encounter, Equestria's Ruler Plots Sexual Encounter

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Author: Sithicus
Description: Angel Bunny discoveres Fluttershy after the events of the Grand Galloping Gala, the sight is less than pretty.
Angel (New!)

Additional Tags: Angel Bunny, Fluttershy, Flutterage Has Consequences Emotionally Unstable

[Sad]

Author: Sithicus
Description: What does Ditsy Doo do when she comes home from her very own Best Night Ever? And who will be there to greet her.
Gala Muffins (New!)

Additional Tags: Ditsy Doo aka Derpy Hooves, Cheerilee, Dinky Doo, Revealing Character Piece, Dinky's Parentage Explained



64 comments:

Anonymous said...

That was a good read, it not being shipping is always a plus (nothing against shipping, except that there is too much of it)

Anonymous said...

Not a shipping fic?

Damn shame.

Anonymous said...

Future will pass on to the past and become present.

Anonymous said...

In the pic: Did somebody photoshop her out of her uniform, or was she like that...?

Anonymous said...

I love such simple and small storys that are like some kind of addition to the show, rather than their own tale.

Anonymous said...

It was nice

Anonymous said...

D: am I like to only one who can't stand how Fanfiction.net lays their stories out? which makes me sad because I know it's prevents me from reading great fics.

Saxton Hale said...

>See's pic

Dat Wingboner. Dat MEGA Wingboner. I don't care if this was taken right after she saved that pie. Its still a hellofva Wingboner.

Anonymous said...

>Dashfire
>And it's not even shipping!


Uhwuahhhhh?!

Anonymous said...

I kinda want to see a fic were Dash hangs out with the wonderbolts, only to find out they do drugs and shit, then twilight has to step in and call an intervention or something after Dash ends up stoned on the library steps or something.

krypqe said...

Cute, man.
I d'awwwwwww'd/

There's a couple of grammatical errors, but the story was good, I enjoyed it.

the (fallen) Princess Luna said...

@Anonymous Yes, someone shopped her. In the episode, her ear is actually a slightly different shade than the rest of her head and wings.
Also, the strap for her goggles disappeared.

ToonNinja said...

Wwwwwwwwwwwingboner! Oh, Dash. You're too predictable.
Interesting story. I'm surprised the author avoided shipping, although that 'gal-pal' thing had a subtle hint of Pinkie-Dash to it.

Anonymous said...

THEY CALL ME SPITFIRE

9Nine9 said...

I'm fucking glad it's not shipping

I have to make sure I get to it first.

Kujiiro said...

@Anonymous

Yeah, I could've sworn she was in full uniform at the Gala.

Anonymous said...

@9Nine9

I'll be waiting for you upstairs...

Rockabore said...

I haven't actually shipped on anypony before, but I must admit I'd totally love to see some shipping for Dashie and Spitfire. But this fic was great! I enjoyed their conversation.

Anonymous said...

@ toonninja:

Author Sithicus here, I avoided shipping simply because I wasn't aiming for a ship fic, trust me when I make a ship fic you're going to know.

Glad everypony is enjoying this one, it's the first story of mine to get this much positive feedback. Despite what few grammatical errors are apparently there. Hmmm, I wonder where I messed up on that end. Grammar and I... Don't seem to want to get along.

Anonymous said...

I enjoyed it, was wondering when we were gonna get Spitfire fics.

As for people wondering about the picture, yes its Photoshopped, she's in uniform the whole time in the episode. Makes me wonder what her cutie mark is though...

Narwhals' Bend said...

@9Nine9
NOOOOOO! I WILL GET A DASHFIRE SHIPPING SUBMITTED FIRST!

Anonymous said...

Unicorn Magic did have its uses.
Hmm? I didn't get what this was referring to.

Overall, ok. Kinda plain.

Anonymous said...

I will repost this ending in "an then they fucked". Thus, I will have the honor of first DashFire ship fic.

JK. I'm so glad there was shipping in sight here.

Hipster_Brony said...

Rainbow Dash story without shipping? Impossible!

Stormy Brave said...

This was nice, except...

Isn't the Sonic Rainboom considered a legend/old mare's tale? Dash was able to master it, but is it right to claim it as 'her' trick?

tootaloo said...

@Anonymous

That was me. It's awesome to see something I did (even if it was just a screen cap edit) show up on ED!

Anonymous said...

Small, nice, and well written. Loved it.

Bazil said...

All i could think when those two were talking was they would be awesome in a shipping story. The gold one gave dash this very particular look :P

Rohit Eligeti said...

I see Spitfire and the wonderbolts is one of those new characters for season2, they get to talk...

Anonymous said...

Sorry to believers in Pinkiedash or Flutterdash - Dashfire is the ultimate couple. The combination of awesome and hot is almost too much.

I'm not usually a shipping fan but I'm looking forward to somepony doing it justice.

Anonymous said...

The story was nice in its own way. I always like people incorporating the original designs (Firefly, Surprise, ect) as a nod.

Dashfire interests me just because it seemed like Spitfire (aside from looking neat as hell) seems to have a personality that would mesh well with Dash's.

I also want to see some stuff about Soaren being a bro.

ItsTheWhinyGuys said...

D'aww, that was sweet. Also good to see that Dash wasn't instantly shipped with her first thing (not that I have a problem with ship fics; heck, I love 'em!).

Kayosiv said...

I didn't particularly like it. The story seemed to have little substance.

Anonymous said...

@ Kayosiv:

Author Sithicus here. Ummm, but that's the entire point of this story, to be a fluffy character driven piece that offers up a brief companion scene to the events surrounding The Best Night Ever.

How much more substance does it need? I didn't want it to go on and on when it told what I wanted it to and did it's job well apparently.

I suppose there could have been more narrative perhaps with more emotional drive or something, but quite frankly I wasn't trying to make people cry or show anger towards Spitfire, I just wanted to show that not everything is always as it seems.

These types of stories generally suffer when you try and drag them on too long. I should know I've made really corny and bad decisions in past stories when I started piling on the sentiment. Of course that could not be what your referring to on substance, it's a rather generic and vague word to use when describing why you felt this story was lacking.

Dawnlight !SP5BRo9IC2 said...

Critique:
Rainbow's lines need more work.
Rainbow's personality needs to be balanced a little better - she's acting excited filly one moment and snarky neigh sayer the next.
Descriptions involving senses other than sight required - what does the place sound like, what does it /smell/ like?

Overall, I like the premise a lot, and the plot is solid. Have a "B" for your work =]

Anonymous said...

You underestimate the true POWAH of the FlutterFire side of the ship!

Miyajima said...

Hah. I laughed at the reference to "Hell Hath No Fury" in the second story. Fluttershy playing with fire, indeed.

cameronstalker said...

Heh the Firefly reference was awesome. Also seemed the "wall eyed pegasus" joke was a Derpy ref

Breakfast said...

I enjoyed all three stories, and I've already reviewed the first one, but I'll wait until the other two are on Fanfiction.net. I'm able to give a better review there.

Anonymous said...

@Anonymous
If her name's Spitfire, her cutie mark has to be an RAF roundel. (And I'm not even British.)

ultra8 said...

Liked all of them, they make good companion pieces to the prior events of the Gala.

Spitfire- Makes alot of sense since they did try to hang out with Dash, but the power of fame doesn't always allow you to do what "you" want.
Firefly being her senior was a fun touch.

Sweetiebelle- Loved seeing Rarity's attempt to spin a tale that wouldn't crush her kid sister's dreams of finding her own fairytale bliss. And of course the following nightmares it caused for Trixie and Prince Doucheb***.

Pinkamina- I honestly can see that whole event happening in the show just because this is Pinkie we're talking about.

Bravo! I Can't wait for your takes on the other's post Gala stories.

Anonymous said...

The background details seem way over written. The dialogue seems bland by comparison. RD seems to much of an emotional flip flop, excited one moment, cocky the next.

zalonza said...

i cannot still belive that RD is actually filly :) why she cannot be manly pony she even voice sound like man

Anonymous said...

So since RD's got her own story regarding the following morning... Fluttershy's the only one remaining from Sithicus' set?

Kill me, I'm a PONY said...

1. Read Applejack's story
2. Get to Big Macintosh saying nope
3. ????
4. Read the rest of his lines in the Engy's voice

Anonymous said...

these seem rather hit and miss. also, granny smith is kind of a bitch.

Anonymous said...

>Read the rest of his lines in the Engy's voice


Why in Celestia's name did I read the comments before that story? ( _ _)

Anonymous said...

Holy crap, Pinkamena as an actual separate character, minus the loony? WANT.

Hipster_Brony said...

New character introduced in the series? MUST BE SHIPPED WITH RAINBOW DASH IMMEDIATELY!

Anonymous said...

Wait... so is Pinkie's split personality now physically manifesting as a separate being or is she still talking to herself?

Anonymous said...

@ Anonymous:

Author Sithicus here, to answer your question Pinkie and Pinkamina are two seperate entities, at least in these stories. That way we can have Pinkie x Pinkamina x Dash, it's fun for the whole Brony community. ;)

ivan2294 said...

@Sithicus

Wut?

ultra8 said...

Applejack- Granny Smith must have an excellant poker face and alot of experiances with prior gallas. Wonder how much destruction she caused durring her 1st one so long ago.

Angel- Poor Fluttershy. Good thing Angel's there to keep her grounded. I thought that was very in-character for both of them. Sad but sweet.

Luna- Honestly I'm going to have to re-read that one since I'm drawing a blank at the moment. But it was a fun Twi/Luna moment.

Spitfire 2: Dash side- I guess I'm one of the minority that wasn't bothered by Rainbow's nature in the 1st one. Not that I didn't enjoy this one either. Cool idea about making Firefly her granmother plus extra random Pinkie fun.

Kill me, I'm a PONY said...

@Anonymous

Uh, because Celestia = TROLLestia?

Therefore, she made you do it.

Speaking of Celestia... the f*ck did I just read?

supervanman64 said...

Celestia-That one was a bit too...out there for my tastes. Especially since I prefer much subtle shipping.

Angel-D'aaaw X3

Ditsy-That's probably the most heart-warming of them all. :3

Anonymous said...

I was starting to read the Ditzy Do one and then BAM! Malware attack...

I'm starting to not like DeviantArt...

Rexco33 said...

Digging the photo edit!

Anonymous said...

Rainbow Dash seemed to hold more of a grudge than she really would. I mean, she was basically fighting with herself over whether or not she should be angry at the Wonderbolts, only it wasn't really done that well.

It was like /you/ had a personal grudge about the Wonderbolts "ignoring" Rainbow Dash, but you wanted her to stay in character, and it ended up clashing and making her painfully indecisive with her feelings.

Most of the time she was taking EVERYTHING Spitfire said the wrong way and getting offended and beefed at it, but at the same time she was fangirling over the fact that she was even there.

I appreciate that the first Dashfire fiction wasn't a slash fic, but there was a serious lack of consistency for such a short story is all I'm saying.

Tarvoc said...

The Princess Celestia one was interesting. To be honest, I liked it. For some strange reason, I could even see Celestia doing such things. The whole story plays with the mind of the reader much like the princess plays with the minds of her "beloved subjects".

I also liked the Apple Family one and, to a lesser extent, the Pinkamina one. The Angel one was good too, but with not enough Angel if you ask me. The Sweetie Belle one was also nice. I'm not sure why, but for some reason, I'd like to see more Trixie/Blueblood shipping.

Kujiiro said...

Read them all, loved them all =D

McGack said...

The Celestia one reminded me of a dream I had, only it was Nightmare Moon, and I (as my persony) had failed to defeat her even using the Biometals from MMZX, also, she prefered mares for some reason and used her magic to *fix* that problem....yeah

I have weird dreams sometimes and uh that was one heck of a doosy of a dream, I dunno if it really means anything =/ maybe the pics and fanfic are getting to me. anyPony else have odd dreams they cant explain?

Anonymous said...

*sigh*

At last .....
No shipping ^v^ ...YAY!

Searching for this ones are like searching for a hidden treasure,because I have enough of shipping..

At least when season 2 finish in december that will be the end of shipping of once and foa ll...

As for your stories and the 2 chap of Spitfire / Dash Friendship without *bluag* shipping is a excellent reward for read :)

Doc Steedly said...

I cant read more than half of these because its requiring a DA account. . . . I do not want to sign up for DA. . . this is a little messed up. Is there a possibility to get them somewhere else? *pleading pinkie eyes*

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