Make sure to hit up the previous episodes, including Fluttershy: Origins, Pinkie Pie: Schism, Rainbow Dash: Dependence, and Applejack: Exposure.
Author: Saddlesoap Opera
Description: Rarity's generosity is well-known, but her need to please others may end up costing her everything.Rarity: Loss
Additional Tags: Emotional, Psychological, Guilt, Desperation, Conflict
155 comments:
yay a new rarity story
QSA: Of course it comes out right when I'm watching that Brony live-viewing of the Holy Grail... Saving it for tomorrow.
The next episode better explain somethings...
If you don't get Twilight out in a week I'll go all Celestia on you!
The suspense in the last three paragraphs was amazing. Seriously, I need to see what happens!
I love your work
My god... that ending was rather odd.
I just hope you... RESOLVE everything next chapter. Every character still has shittons of issues to work out.
Oh, I CANT WAIT TO READ!!!
Holy shit I can't wait until the final chapter. I never read sad-labelled stories but these have just been incredible.
Wait . . . wat?
uuuuuuuuuuhhh..... hmm....
?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
That was awesome.
I can figure what happened to the others, even Twilight, but yet, why the hell IS it happening?
So... you are going to resolve all of THAT with one chapter for the best pony ever?
It'll be worth it once you get the next part out.
>Seth assumes instant 5-star story
>inb4 1-star vote flood
>all from IP-jumping Cereal
Well. That was interesting...
Celestia really seems out of character. And it wasn't just from that last line.
Lucy, you got some explaining to do!
Whee, it's a bridge chapter.
Well, THAT ending sure as heck came out of frikkin nowhere. o.o
Definitely still as awesome as the others, though I feel like the ending sort of drifted too far away from Rarity's issue. It should have had some sort of...I don't know, solution, or temporary solution to her problem. It sort of transformed into an extremely long transition from Rarity's story to Twilight's story. Good cliffhanger, but I just feel like it needed to focus more on Rarity.
wowowowowowowoowowo
HOLY ****
I....
But...
How could....
With all this build-up, you're going to need either some hardcore catharsis or utter devastation to finish this up right.
Very well done, but the final chapter is what will make or break this saga.
@Anonymous
This is probably intentional; just like how on Applejack: Exposure, the deformed FS cutie mark is never fixed or mentioned again.
Rarity's problem is given and shown and explained, and then when she went to TS, shit just happened to hit the fan. Honestly, despite the fact that her friends were fighting and she CONTINUED to plead with Twilight, I think is a pretty scary implication.
I can safely say that i didn't see that coming. This last chapter will defiantly be an important one, so no pressure.
>That ending.
nope.jpg
...
Ok, I'll just wait for the final chapter to see if this is going to make any sense.
Excellent read, just like the others. Too bad Rarity's financial issues brought this video to mind: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dmTRRHEPhs8. What should've been sad made me chuckle and I couldn't stop thinking about it.
Still, that's my problem. I enjoyed it nevertheless.
HOLY ****. O_O
I
What do I say!?
I assume that its a hallucination at this point, otherwise the story jumped the shark.
The ending--what is to be achieved by doing that?
WHAT A TWIST!
Oh.
Mein.
Gott.
OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG.
Even with it written right there in my face, I totally forgot that Fluttershy: Origins was part of this series... HER CUTIE MARK'S CHANGING!
*weeps*
This is NOT Ok in my books. NOT OK.
Yay, I've been getting impatient waiting for the continuation of this series. But that cliffhanger... damn
Ok, I can tolerate Nightmare Moon scaring her, and that bitch Gilda yelling at her, but NOPONY HURTS MY FLUTTERSHY!
*Prepares for OPERATION: BUCKED UP*
But she just was....
And then there was...
...out of freaking nowhere...
WHAT?!?!
Luna shall come and save us all. How? I have no flipping clue.
Who else wants revenge on Applejack for hurting Fluttershy? I'll bring muffins!
Shit just got so damn real right now.
@Torrential Rains
>Applejack was just dropped who knows how high from the sky, intending to hurt AJ to a near lethal point
You'll get no sympathy from me????
So I was all like "hey, this is pretty cool" and "hey, that's a cool alternate interpretation for Dog and a Pony Show."
Then they were fighting and I was like "hey, this is kinda extreme, but perfectly in line as an escalation of the previous chapters, especially Fluttershy's" and "I think it is interesting how Rarity is reacting to this fight."
And then the ending happened and I was like "Holy Shit!"
At the very least, I have to read the last chapter to see how this craziness is sorted out.
@NinesTempest
None of these ponies deserve sympathy.
That's why this series is so incredible. The author has managed to take those happy-go-lucky ponies we all love and drive wedges between each and every one of them... but they're not out of character.
(Well, maybe Celestia, but we don't actually know anything about her motives ATM)
@NinesTempest
Dude. Muffins.
Consider it.
Dude, what?
Also, Favors and Assets.
~Scratch
Shit got real.
Well, whether any of you intend to help or not, I'm going to go assassinate Applejack now. Oh, and don't try to tell anypony it was me, because I've got some favors I could easily call in...
Point of the story: Attempt to Spark the first major My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Civil War!:
Everypony ends up taking sides on which pony is to be blamed for causing harm to another. Flame Wars and everything. Then, resolve all conflicts, Fictional and Real, in an epic finale of epicly epic proportions!
BEST. SOCIAL EXPERIMENT. EVAR!
...okay, so only the fictional part will actually happen. SHUT UP!
The ending made no sense.
But, it was interesting up until that point though.
Lets see now...
~Cart Bomb - Check
~Undetectable Poison - Check
~A Detailed Dossier About Applejack - Check
~Silenced Sniper Rifle - Check
~Non-Cartoon Anvils - Check
~Cables and Wenches - Check
~A Disposable Partner - Check
Eeyup, all ready!
@Torrential Rains
WE MUST POOSH LEETLE KART!
HELL.
Nopony is what they should be. Everypony is fucked up and at each other's throats. What the fuck is going on?!
I'm not even sure I can rate these stories without seeing how Twilight's chapter pulls them all together.
@Kill me, I'm a PONY
I meant like a car bomb...
Aw, whatever, I could always use another disposable partner! I always run out of those pretty quickly...
HEAVY WEAPONS GUY KAN RESPAWN SO NO WORRY ABOUT LOSING SOON.
AND I HAVE SASHA TO KEEL LEETLE BABY PONIES >:D
Good to see a partner with enthusiasm for once! Usually when I tell them they're probably going to die, they start freaking out! After that, they usually die, because I kill them!
What? They make too much noise!
I not so good with killing quiet. Too much like Baby BLU Spy. But I will do best to bring glory to Motherland.
Oh, you don't have to be quiet, you just have to kill the little orange pony.
I kan have leetle pony's Apple Pies when done, yes?
NOT THE YELLOW ONE, THE ORANGE ONE
Yes, many pies will be had. There will also be cake.
I am ready to keel leetle orange engineer pony when leetle RED pony is ready.
@Jetfire
Same here. I didn't have problems rating the other stories, but this one depends so much on the last chapter that I have to hold off.
Be careful, the little orange pony has quite a kick...
@Kill me, I've been hacked by the RED Heavy
What are ya, crazy? 'Ey moron, orange means she's on our team! Orange is like half red!
You go on ahead, I'll be somewhere close by, somewhere that no one can see me from...
Actually, blue engineers have orange helmets...
@RED Scout
Leetle RED pony says she is to be killed
@Kill me, I've been hacked by the RED Heavy
If the Announcer didn't say it, then ya probably shouldn't believe it! He's prob'ly a BLU Spy!
How do I keep getting myself into these messes?
Hmmm... Leetle Scout may be right. I will ask leetle pony for pie. If she no gives me pie, I kee- *gets blown up*
@Kill me, I- DAMMIT I DIDN'T MEAN IT
Ach, that musta felt reeal good when I planted that thar sticky on ya!
@Twilight Sparkle Because trouble LOVES to find you.
*respawns*
I WILL KEEL LEETLE DEMO- *blown up as soon as he leaves spawn*
@Kill me, I- DAMMIT I DIDN'T MEAN IT
That'll learn ya t' stop threatenin' me ponies!
@Twilight Sparkle
Y'mean there's not going to be a "Derpy: Muffins" chapter?
Holy fuck. I just read every part to of this story today, and I gotta say that its been one hell of a trip. Its just one of the most craziest story I ever read.
The waulity in these stories are amazing. I mean like, I was going all like "oh snap!" at one part, then go "Holy shit!" at another part, then I go "Whoaaaaa" at another.
Seriously, and in this story, the ending was among the most intense things I ever read. I must see another part. WHAT HAPPENS TO TWILIGHT?
ಠ_à²
*Insert Anti-Friendship Propoganda*
@Torrential Rains
And as fer YEW, ya bleeding li'l pansy! I oughta shove a stick o' dynamite where C'lestia's sun don' shine!
@Twilight Sparkle
Oh its quite simple. If love everybody a bit too much, and it just so happens that everybody you love is crazy. So therefore, you must be crazy too.
Its time to wake up Twilight, because everything is a lie
You crazy pony
Hey BLU team, you ever wonder how the demoman got his eyepatch? I can tell you...
@Anonymous
Can't argue with you there.
@Torrential Rains
I'm listening....
@Torrential Rains
If ya bothered t' read the character bios, you'da known by now! *fires grenades*
@Torrential Rains
OH OH I LOVE GUESSING GAMES!
@Naxts
Then...I did lose it during the parasprite infestation?
@Twilight Sparkle
Oh no. That's the thing, You didn't lose it at the invasion.
Truth is.
You never had it.
I warned you about them books.
@Naxts
Oh.I get it now.
A loss of sanity due to an information overload.
SADDLESOAP OPERA Y U ALWAYS END IN CLIFFHANGERS!?
@Twilight Sparkle
Exactly. Since you probably 95% of your life reading books (5% being your time in ponyvile), You're personality became whatever those books told ya. You're a walking book hun.
In other words.
You're easy to read.
Thus predictable.
And everybody knows that trouble loves predictable ponies.
...You know how to sing, I'll give ya that.
I... I don't even know what to say now. Just like Naxts, I started all of these today. The entire series had me from the start, and now I want more. The only downside to this is that I'll only get one more episode. D:
@Torrential Rains
Ohh, I see how it is! Ya thought yew could jus' waltz right in an' make me a fool with yer li'l made-up story about how I lost me eye. Now that I've called yew on it, yer just clammin' up like a *BLAM*
Well, that was easy.
@Fillyshy
Who said there was only going to be one more? =0
i really truly hope twilight kicks the mother fucking shit out of celestia im so sick of her >.> kill her twilight.
WHAT.
@Thesyn
But...but she's the princess.And immortal.
I don't want to die but I also don't want to hurt her.
Ohhh.What do I do?
@Twilight Sparkle
pfffft immortal my ass we all know you're more powerful >.>
@Thesyn
What are you basing that on?
@Twilight Sparkle
well celestia did say twilight had the most raw power she'd ever seen...and considering how long shes lived...thats saying something...and i kinda think twilight may be the ruler after her mostly just my own opinion but thats what i think
@Twilight Sparkle
I can't be certain, but I assume misplaced confidence. My own personal advice is if you have to shoot, aim for the guards. If that's not a choice, aim for the teacup. But the best choice really boils down to a) ask what's going on and b) run.
Possible ending: Twilight is revealed that she was just an advanced golem created for the sole prupose of of serving as a vessel or container of Luna's soul, but when she/it use the elements of harmony she practically change the plans, thus outliving it's orignal reason of being created in the first place....
.... and once aware and acnologed the true reason of it's existence and it's real origins....THE CREATION TURNS AGAINST IT'S CREATOR, NOW AWARE OF THE REAL EXTENT OF IT'S TRUE INFINITE POWER IN A BATTLE THAT WOULD REDEFINE THE FUTURE OF PONYKIND WITH THE POWER OF A THOUSTAND SUNS!!!
@Thesyn
Power that I can barely keep under control.I loose it I risk destroying Equestria,or at least Canterlot.
I'm not sure I liked this one as much as the others... it sort of took the focus off Rarity at the end there, and didn't give her predicament any real resolution. I thought Celestia was way out of character too. It just didn't fit her usually benevolent and instructive nature.
I have yet another important thing to add to this discussion.
If celestia was tyrant, then who was phone???
TYRANT CELESTIAL! LUNA WILL SAVE YOU ALL! LONG LIVE THE LUNAR REPUBLIC!
Clearly the author really likes Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash. Consider that Fluttershy's piece was first, and is so far the only one to actually be *only* about the pony it's supposed to be about. When Pinkie Pie's was posted, it was half about Rainbow Dash. When Rainbow Dash's turn came, it was all about Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy. And Applejack's was still half about Rainbow Dash.
I started off liking this story, but I'm kind of annoyed with it now. Some of it is how I find Fluttershy to be pretty boring, and consequently don't like Flutterdash and how much time is spent on Fluttershy and the Flutterdash pairing in these pieces, but some of it is also how some of these ponies are wildly out of character, and a lot of these issues aren't really explained well or resolved. Surprise surprise, the only two that were both explained well and resolved were Fluttershy's and Rainbow Dash's.
I'm also starting to dislike Fluttershy even more due to this story. She's totally crazy, and she's pretty out of character in this particular chapter. Her position is also to me, not sympathetic. It's not a reasonable response to demand a friend tell you a secret in this case. It doesn't matter than RD was obviously hurt, she doesn't want Fluttershy to know what happened, and it was only the one time. Fluttershy has no information to work with, and if it's only the one time there are so many possibilities the only reasonable option is to trust your friend that everything is under control and accept it's none of your business. Which it wasn't. I consider Fluttershy's actions in this piece to be pretty disgusting and completely unsympathetic.
I'm pretty unenthused with the finale. I'm not sure the author is capable of tying up these pieces in any satisfying way. But we'll see.
LONG LIVE THE LUNAR REPUBLIC!
VIVA LA REVOLUNATION!
Need... conclusion...
SSO, you magnificent cliffhanger-generating bastard...
Wait... did I just read this out of order? Aw, dammit.
I can't believe how upset this story is making me. So much hate. It feels like everything I love is being taken away as I read this. Very impressive! I must read them all now =P
The craziness continues.
LONG LIVE LUNA, THE ONE TRUE PRINCESS
DOWN WITH TYRANNY!
DOWN WITH OPPRESSION!
DOWN WITH CELESTIA!
My goodness...this is more comments than I *ever* would have expected! Also, more TF2 references!
Thank you all for your praise, AND your critiques. As I have often said, Bronies are just the best fandom ever.
I do notice the varying prominence each character has gotten, but then Dash has always been a catalyst; she got them their CM's, after all.
As for the cliffhanger and this story's ending, I have a plan, and the next installment will come as soon as possible. Worry not!
Apologies to Rarity fans for pinching her tale a bit, but as with Pinkie Pie, it just felt like less ground work needed to be laid.
Celestia *may* seem off-model, but she never does anything for no reason. Trust in her, and avoid banishm- ... I mean, prosper! : D
I'm loving it so far! this looks really well made. The final chapter should be good.
Really disappointed in this one. it barely scratched Rarity's story, then whiplashed into all the other pony's stories, leaving Rarity hanging, her story barely told.
The ending was serious WTF though.
This is it! It's going to happen! All hell is loose! Ohmygosh Ohmygosh Ohmygosh. What happens next?! I must know! I MUST KNOW!
OMG another pony psychology story! These are my favorite fanfictions of anything ever. The rainbow dash one was so amazing! I've read it like 5 times!
This is just... Just...
I want to cry after reading from the first one...
WTF!! "kill her" for something petty as brawling?
Love these stories. Twilight obviously need to be executed for practicing necromancy.
"kill her" "WHAT WHY" "LOL JK I TROLL U"
Whhhhhhat!!?
OOooo please finish the next one soon!
Not so much manly tears for this one as much as fffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffff...
Okay, so Rarity does in fact choose to continuously splurge on luxuries rather than feed herself. and somehow, that has been made believable. No problem here. After all, I've already swallowed Aj inexplicably blabbing out everything in her head.
Let me guess–Trollestia is just showing Twilight some tough love to force the bearers of the EoH to work together again. And some more black magic becomes involved. And much drama shall be had.
...ffffffffuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu...
@Saddlesoap She's already banished me (and everyone else here) once, a second time won't make much difference.
Honestly, I really enjoyed several of the earlier installments of this fic, but this latest one...not so much. It's mostly the ending, as I simply cannot see Celestia ordering Twilight's death for anything short of "she just went Horus on my ass". Hell, the one time someone did go Horus on her, she just banished her to the moon! About the only way you can save this (for me, anyway) is if Celestia is pulling a Batman gambit like in the pilot - and even then, it's really going to be touch and go.
trollestia! i du not kill U
Y U kill me? ç_ç
there MUST be a reason for this... for sure, now you have my full attention aaaand.... since it's the first time i comemnt on this collection of stories, nice work, liked them very much
@mimezinga
aaargh syntax error! must fix it!
Trollestia I not kill U!
Y U kill me? lol
ok, feel better now
>She set down the cup, turned toward the guards, opened her eyes, and softly said two words:
>“Kill her.”
*cough* ... ''Boot to the head'', ''Horseshoe to the head'', *slap-slap-kick in the groin*...
*cough*
...*continue kicking while on the ground*
I gotta say, I don't get the Applejack hate in the feedback on this chapter. What was she supposed to do, just let Fluttershy pound her? She didn't start that fight!
For that matter, Fluttershy's probably the *least* sympathetic character in this sequence! She gets Rainbow addicted to Heroin Berries, *date rapes her*, then tries to kill Applejack? O_o
I feel seriously sorry for RD in these. She nearly dies from her wings locking up, winds up addicted to heroin, gets raped, (yeah, if someone is unable give consent due to impaired judgement, that is indeed regarded as rape!) nearly dies *again* from an overdose, and gets her ass kicked by Applejack! Give her a break, man!
"Kill her."
Woah woah woah. KILL HER?!?
I've been with the series since Fluttershy's part, and I never expected ANYTHING like this situation. I've said it before and I'll say it again--I have NO IDEA how this will all get resolved happily, if at all.
Hmmm, everyone is assuming "Kill her" is for Twilight. I wonder if there is something else deeper in here.
@Anonymous
Not really much Applejack hate. It's just the same guy posting the same things over and over and over.
On a slightly different note, I went ahead and reread this fic again, and I'm starting to think this is almost all Fluttershy's fault, Fluttershy's crazy, and Fluttershy deserves to be blown up in a demonstrative fireball by Celestia for all the stuff she's caused and for just generally being an ungrateful disgusting pony. I totally hope that happens in the next one.
@AFistfulofApples
Whoa whoa whoa, how is this Fluttershy's fault? Sure, she's not blameless, but it's not her fault Pinkie's a total mental wreck, nor is it her fault Dash pushed herself so hard that she needed help in the way she did. Applejack's loose tongue has nothing to do with Fluttershy either.
And I forgot to mention Rarity's financial troubles. Not Fluttershy's fault that Rarity is too much of a wussy to make people pay for stuff.
@Naxts
NEXT AND FINAL EPISODE:
TWILIGHT SPARKLE: SPELLBOUND
There. D:
@Crimson Valor
I did say "almost" and you know, Pinkie's and Applejack's main problems were completely unexplained and unresolved.
But the main issues in this story are Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash, and their relationship. The majority of our time is spent reading about those two, and the biggest problems are caused by them, directly or indirectly. As far as Fluttershy goes, as somebody pointed out, she basically raped Rainbow Dash. She's also the one who almost killed Rainbow Dash due to incompetency (although it's a real mistake, mind), and is the one who outright attempted to kill Applejack because she's too stupid to listen or believe anyone and to mind her own damn business. Rarity also did not get any advice and was left to wallow in her problems, because of Fluttershy. It didn't help that Fluttershy practically assaulted Rarity to tell a secret.
So just take a look at the scene before Twilight is teleported away, when everyone is together and everything is going badly. Fluttershy and Applejack are fighting, directly because of Fluttershy. Rarity is freaking out because she needs advice and she hasn't gotten any, because of Fluttershy. Pinkie Pie is freaking out because this is the second time she's had to see her friends fight, and the ultimate reason is because of Fluttershy and her relationship with RD. And RD is trying to reason with Fluttershy, who's not hearing any of it because she's crazy.
Jeez what a cliffhanger.
I will be awaiting the next (and final) installment in agitated anticipation.
Wright faster you foal!!!!!
The suspense is killing me!!!
@Anonymous
I'm writing as fast as I can...!
After such high ratings (and expectations), I want to be sure that Twilight's story and the series' resolution are up to snuff!
You all deserve it! : D
All i can say is....im REALLY glad all this is fiction T_T
I was wondering, how do you call this cycle of Stories? I'm a fanfiction collector (2569 strong up to now including you little saga) But it has been bothering me that I don't have a name for the collection, just the name for the different character stories.
I would be glad if you could give me your name for them and also give me permission to commission a piece of artwork for the whole thing if you don't mind.
@Anonymous
Well, I've been generally referring to it as the Pony Psychology series, though if anypony has a snappier idea, I am open to suggestions.
As for commissioning a Drawfriend interpretation...
Yes.
I am extremely cool with this idea.
Seeing art inspired by this series in a Drawfriend post or replacing the header images on each story's entry would be WAY more than 20% cooler than not seeing it.
Though you *might* want to wait until TS: Spellbound is out, to get a feel for the whole thing...
Agreed then, I would have to pony up the cash (if someone mentions it I shall gouge their eyes) to commission all 7 pieces but for all it's worth I shall keep them recorded and eventually post them or give them to you.
This is a wonderful thing and yes, rather than renaming it now I think I shall wait. Thank you and please continue to write.
I feel the need to go watch a video that has a large explosion in it to make up for all this conflict you have going on. I liked the Rainbow Dash one, but it even still felt a bit jarring, not to mention the rest. I expect some major Deus Ex Machina to be going on in the final chapter. That, or you're going to have to pull out the greatest work of conflict-resolution ever written.
Still, looking forward to the final chapter.
WHAT THE SHIT IS GOING ON
D:
This entire thing is very well written, in my opinion. I anticipate the final chapter greatly.
And AJ doesn't deserve all the hate. FS is just bat**** insane.
So far I love this series, and I can't for the life of me figure out how you're going to end it all. Do I dare speculate... Super Twilight? I just hope we all don't get trolled with the last chapter. If you don't make it super duper good, I'll turn you into cupcakes!
Have enjoyed this series quite a bit, and cannot wait for the next chapter. I need my pony fix.
This series got hit with the google docs ban.
Author here...I will be replacing these with FF.net links soon.
And also adding the final chapter!
@Saddlesoap
Ohhh, how soon is "soon"? Is it reaaaaally soon, or just soon?
@Anonymous
My FF.net n00b lockout expires today, in about two hours. I will then format and upload the six stories, and send in the links to E.D. by this evening.
Once the admins post them, we're back in business.
Again, thanks for waiting, everypony! These will NOT be my only stories, I assure you.
Updated with a new link!
Also, check out the final chapter - it's up as well!
That final chapter was so nice!
Great stories. These are all sad, heart wrenching and in a way that makes sense only with soap operas fun. I felt so bad for Rarity in this one, and she never got a chance to hear Twilight's solution.
That Ending. WTF. Mind = Blown.
Eagerly about to start reading the final chapter.
All the ponies in this town are CRAZY!!!
Oh my, this DOES get better and better.
Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat?!
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