Author: La Barata
Description: Driven away from home by jealousy and loneliness, Spike finds himself in the cave of a rather large dragon. However, instead of attacking, the great beast takes him under his wing, teaching him to become a proper, vicious dragon, filling the emptiness left by his friends with rage. But, when Spike's small size and immaturity take him to the brink of frustration, the magical alternative his new "friend" proposes could change the course of his life forever.
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Irreplaceable Prologue
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Irreplaceable Chapter 15
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187 comments:
I'll keep an eye on this... Not sure where it's going. There's a LOT of ambiguity in the early chapters.
spike reminds me of spyro the dragon
Story's okay, writing needs polish.
Why didn't they send word to Princess Celestia to send a "fax" to Spike and ask him where he is?
I SUMMON. TIME WIZARD!
I always expected to see the dragon take Spike under his wing, not try to kill him.
This is great! The writing could be a little better, but I love the plot.
Not a bad start. The only issue I have is that it seems out of character for the ponies to give up searching after only a few days. In the real world such searches sometimes go on for weeks, with rotating teams of searchers working while others help by doing the work that's not being done by the people searching. Even if work was piling up it seems like everyone just goes "Oh well, dragon gone now." too quickly.
They need some compelling reason to think that he's unrecoverable, possibly the dragon doing something to make them think Spike is dead?
Also, where's the Owl in all of this? He was the one who found Spike in the episode, so why did things diverge here? Maybe tie things together by linking the disappearance of the owl to why they think spike is gone for good?
Sorry for the strong criticism, I'm something of an alternate history buff, so when I see something like this I'm compelled to try to make it work better.
i like the idea of this story keep up the good work!
@Anonymous they need spike to send the message or take the trip to canterlot.
@ToonNinja That's the intent ;)
@Anonymous
In regards to your one issue, that's assuming they think he's dead or lost. If he doesn't WANT to be found, however, then they're practical enough to realize that they won't be able to find him.
As for Owlysius, don't worry. He'll be back. I PROMISE *evil grin*
I really appreciate your thoughts on the matter, though
I will wait on my last breath for new parts to this story.
@Anonymous
That is possibly the best thing an author can possibly hear. Thank you.
You have my attention.
Like others have said, excellent plot, but there is room for improvement in the writing.
Of course, the only way to improve is to keep writing. Onward.
@shmoogy
lol now that you mention it yea he does XD
OH NO YOU DIDN'T JUST END ON CHAPTER 2, GODDAMMIT.
@Dave
I'm working on chapter 3 right now, promise!
@La Barata
Well hurry up man XD this is really good so far!
@Thesyn
It's almost done. I'll email the google doc link to Sethisto the moment it's done.
@La Barata
I look forward to it!
@Thesyn
Congratulations! I was able to reach the required blood alcohol level to finish Chapter 3. It's being sent to Sethisto as we speak.
@La Barata
Good job! Ill read it as soon as its out
Dammit, Chapter 3 ended all too quickly.
MOAR!
@Dave
I'm writing chapter 4 now. My hope is to put out a chapter a day. However, I'm running out of booze and pirate metal, so w'll see how it goes
As in PotC theme played like an 80's speed metal song? Also, Super Mash Bros. (sweet mashup DJs with free albums on their website) and some Disaronno. Godspeed, comrade.
@Dave
As in Alestorm. Seriously, look them up on youtube, they're awesome. But yeah, Everything I've posted I wrote while piss drunk, and I'm running low on rum. Hopefully, it'll be finished and sent off tonight.
You, my good sir, are a man among men.
And holy shit, I need these guys on my iPod. Keelhauled is amazing. They're like an angrier Flogging Molly.
@Dave
Leviathan and Wenches and Mead are two of my favourites. I still find it amusing that while I'm drunk enough to argue with people on here and accuse them of being hallucinations (it happened the night I finished chapter 2), my writing doesn't go entirely to shit
I'm a sucker for alternate/"what if" endings. I'm really loving this fanfic. My only problem is that they're too short because I want to read more of it. Still keep up the good work.
Come onnnnnn happy ending.
@La Barata
The fact I can call back to the fact I got into Alestorm from My Little Pony is nothing short of astonishing (And yes, Leviathan and Wenches and Mead are amazing). Now I got friends on facebook getting me into Dreadnoughts, lol.
This is a good night.
No Grimdark tag, no Sad tag, just a Normal tag... Yeah, happy ending, most likely. Spike's probably healed by the magical friendship rainbow of death as a last-ditch effort, or Twilight will hug him into submission.
Also, Alestorm? Kick ASS!
@Anonymous
My exact words on submitting this were "Possible grimdark tag, I haven't decided the ending yet".
And to everyone saying they're too short, it's basically a race between finishing it and passing out xD.
@La Barata
That changes things a bit. Now my smug 'confirmation' of a happy ending is going to drive you to the grimdark path, isn't it? Wouldn't be the first time I've done that.
that was AWESOME. MOAR PLEASE!
This is getting good...
I'm liking this. Good little story so far. Curious what will happen with it.
@Anonymous
Nope, I'm still trying to decide which ending I like best. Also, I didn't finish a chapter last night, I passed out before I could finish, but I'm working on it now!
La Barata, where/what era are you from?
Canada, why? And what do you mean by era?
La Barata, The Drunken Pony Pirate, Lord of the Equestrian Seas, The Scourge of Caneighda. All tremble at his approach! He writes his tales of glory and adventure on the poop deck of a 16th century brigantine crewed by the pony damned while wearing full captain's regalia and listening to Pirate Metal. I pledge myself to your service, sir!
@Anonymous
.....I think I love you.
Avast, shipmate, Welcome Aboard! I be proud ta have ye on me crew!
Chapter 4 is complete and sent off to Sethisto!
This chapter needs some major proofreading. Also, I think you're putting far too much emphasis on Applejack's accent.
i find myself going through the chapters to fast but youre doin a real good job man keep up the good work :)
On the day the episode aired, I called it. And your story has so much promise! Eagerly wait for the next part.
@Anonymous
So did I, actually xD. I also called bullshit on how the owl somehow tracked ketchup footprints THROUGH A RAINSTORM. But yeah, I try to have one done every night, but sometimes there are complications (i.e. I pass out drunk or, like last night, rogers turns off my internet ["maitenance"])
...Rainbow Dash?
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Rainbow Dash, wake up! Rainbow Dash! RAINBOW DAAAAAAAAAAAASH!
I wish these chapters were longer!
@Anonymous
The way I write is basically Valve's episodic model, except not shit.
Shorter chapters more often.
Also, a general note, I've been talking with Sethisto over whether or not this needs sad or grimdark tags added. I am pulling NO punches here.
^You got a point there.
@Anonymous
With the exception of two nights (where I passed out after too much rum) I've written a chapter every night since this was posted on ED
^ Rum?
I didn't know Jack Sparrow was a brony!
@Anonymous
Dude, look at the earlier comments, particularly the most recent conversation between me and another anon xD.
Oh boy. Crap's starting to get real.
I say with no compunction that I've always been worried about this story, being a well-written and interesting story that scares the ever-loving shit out of me because I realize just how easy it would be to turn it into a GrimDark.
i hope spike gets some sense back and has an epic battle with that dragon >.>
Chapter 5 is currently underway
I'm liking this, keep it comin!
It kinda bothers me sometimes that Dash is nearly always the first character to die in stories like this one. I mean, I understand why, and if I was to write one the same thing would almost certainly happen; she's kind of reckless, and if there's a situation involving genuine danger, she'd likely be either badly hurt or killed, but it still kind of bothers me, since she's one of my two favorite characters on the show.
Good story, regardless.
UPDATE: While I do my absolute best to write a chapter a night, Sethisto says that because of this, the story's being bumped way too often. As a result, he'll only post two chapters at a time now. This is gonna mean a longer wait in between chapters. Sorry, but it's entirely out of my hands.
Also, I'm making a fanfiction account in google docs banhammer paranoia. The new chapters'll probably be up there before Sethisto posts the google docs link, too, so take a look if I get banhammered/whatever.
AAA! I just got bitch-slapped by a giant paragraph! It was huge, monstrous even! I...
Oh. That's just Chapter 6. Carry on.
That was some screwy filler you wrote there.
It's a bit curious reading as the chapter is written...
@Anonymous
I AM THE RETCON FAIRY!
(That, and I left out a joke I promised a friend I'd put in. I'm nothing if not a pirate of my word)
@La Barata
"A pirate of your word"?
...Shall I take your word for it? XD
@La Barata
I wonder if you'd have the energy to write both endings and let readers pick the one they like best? Granted, it's harder to write a happy ending without making it hammy and cliche. Hmm, if you go with the grimdark ending, I have one small request: Have Twilight write a really sad letter to Celestia. The contents of it are up to you; I just wanna see a stark contrast to her usual letters on what she's learned.
The concept is fantastic.
The story itself is great.
The writing is bad, borderline intolerable.
@anonymous I think the writing is just fine, the whole thing is rather awesome I think
@Anonymous
Haters gonna Hate
Longer time between chapters? Nnnnooooo~
"Pain. Agony. My hatred burns through the Everfree Forest. Ponyville heaves with my torment. Its wretched ponies quake beneath my rage. But at last, the whole of Equestria will break! And all will burn beneath the shadow of my wings!"
^ Cheers for anyone else who gets that reference.
@Anonymous
God DAMNIT anon. WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO PROVE?! THIS FANBASE IS ALREADY FUCKING AWESOME!
@Anonymous
Quoting Deathwing. World of Warcraft.
(\'3'/) spike is making a heart with his claws in the picture
This story really has been growing since it began. At first I read it more for the sheer reason of having nothing else to read, but after this chapter I find myself actually starting to look forward for more.
Keep it up.
YOU BETTER GET SPIKE BACK WERE HE BELONGS OR THERE WILL NOT BE ANY MORE CHAPTERS OR STORIES FOR YOU HEHEHE HEH HEH SONIC BLUEGOLDBOOM AWAY HEARS HEHEHEHEHEH FADE AWAY
i really look forward to the next chapters! how long are you expecting it to be?
It's predictable, bland, and boring. Not to mention cliched and poorly written.
2/5
The "Happy" Ending should leave spike back to normal but forever feeling guilty for his actions. Never loved by rarity, and forever doomed to never know happyness or love in life. If you make it all go back to normal and everypony forgives him it would kill this fantastic work of fiction. The ending but be bittersweet. mmore bitter than sweet mind you. The "Grimdark" Ending... Spike Dies at the End.
@Anonymous
Its a shame you feel that way. I think the story is great and from the 4.4 rating it seems I am not a minority.
This is getting good...
Holy hot damn, bit of a wait for chapter 7 there.
But it's worth it.
THE PLOT THICKENS.
Sorry about the wait, I've had a bunch of work stuff this past week. Updates should speed up a mite, hopefully. I've prettymuch got everything planned out, and I think you lot'll like the ending I have planned.
Oh, btw
@Anonymous
lol u mad?
I really hope this doesn't have a typical "happy ending for everyone lets all party and eat cake". Other than that, I love alternate stories. A bit excessive on the use of CAPS LOCK EMPHASIS though.
I like the general concept of the story although I find it hard to swallow the fact that Spike would be so angsty to want to harm the ponies and destroy their dwellings.
Nevertheless, I anticipate chapter eight to see what you do with it all.
I also kind of agree that a bittersweet ending would work best at this point. That would be WAY better than an "everypony laughs happy ending" or a complete "downer ending".
Of course, these things are my opinion and base them entirely out of nothing.
Cheers mate.
@Banana
Don't worry, you'll understand why soon enough. It's all explained. I actually submitted chapters eight and nine two days ago, I'm not quite sure why they haven't been posted yet. They're all on fanfiction, though.
>chapter nine's ending
That cliffhanger is just...cruel. Well played.
Anyway, I've enjoyed this story so far, but I do have one nitpick--some paragraphs seem a bit too long (or they are on FF.net, anyway--not sure about the google docs). The last paragraph of chapter nine, for example.
@D Mayhew
Yeah, I thought people'd think of it that way. While I agree with you on the paragraph length part (8 and 9 were originally one chapter, but I split it up, so there's some length discrepancies).
As well, though, I'm pointing this out both to you and all the anons who keep going TERRIBLE WRITING TERRIBLE WRITING TERRIBLE WRITING.
I quite literally write this story while piss drunk. Seriously. At the moment, I'm just finishing off chapter 10 (which I'll send in tomorrow), and I am having to doublecheck which key is which. I haven't been joking about that. The writing may suck, but you can blame the rum for that.
this story is so intense, i really want to know how everytrhing turns out and if twilight manages it to reason with spike if this cruel cliffhanger doesn't turns out as bad as it could be
but if you are truly writing this story drunk, i fear the worst ^^
TWILIGHT NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Chapter 8 sent chills up my spine when Twilight described the inside of the library. And, in regards to Chapter 9: Dat Cliffhanger.
I will say that the past three chapters have been considerably harder to read due to the formatting, and there are a few times where you've written Applejack as Apple Jack, but considering the circumstances it is fine.
And so, 9 chapters in, we finally find out where the owl's been this whole time.
All I can tell Twi at the end of Ch 9 is:
"Gravity is a harsh mistress."
YOU BETTER NOT LET TWILIGHT DIE D: I will be most disappointed if you do.
whoa chapter 10 blows your mind, i really hope the best for poor little twilight
the only thing i could think of while reading the first sentences was "fuck no, you cant be serious"
but it seems that the conclusion of the story draws near, with the gang meeting spike in one of the next chapters if not the next chapter
Awww shiiiieeettt.
This is gonna be good.
Oh, by the way, 10 points to anyone to get the Disney reference in Chapter 10
>Irreplaceable
To the left, to the left.
good god that was amazing! look extremely forward to the next chapter and i hope twilight isnt dead :/
If this wasn't a Spike story, I would probably rate it about 3 stars.
Simply put, the dialogue seems forced almost every time a conversation arises. Combined with that, you have horrible cliches (#1 goes to Rainbow Dash 'dying' then magically coming back to life a few moments later) and confusing intentions. In my opinion, you needed something more to make Spike decide to burn Ponyville to the ground.
In the end, you started out with a great plot, then quickly threw it down the gutter by enlarging Spike and suddenly turning the green dragon into a villain.
Still... it's a Spike fic. 5 stars.
One last thing, I may make it sound bad, but my first fic was pretty cliched and forced as well. You can only get better from here.
Good luck, and keep writing! I look forward to more from you.
@Cottonmouth
1. She wasn't all dead, she was only mostly dead
2. I'm gonna explain exactly WHY Spike went apeshit, as I've already said
3. Confusing people is fun. Once the full story is down, people will understand completely
@Cottonmouth It was quite clear why Spike did what he did to Ponyville. He was off his rocker in a BIG way. Bat shit insane some might even call him. And like La Barata said the whole story hasn't been posted, we cant assume there aren't reasons to things until the whole story is done. That's kinda like saying "I don't get why V is blowing up all those buildings, he doesn't have a clear motivation" before you even finished the book.
Why do I get the feeling I know what Spike pulled out of the hydra?? (Not gonna tell, waiting to see if I'm right)
@Anonymous
Chapter 11's gonna be done in about half an hour, so just check Fanfiction shortly to see if you're right xD
It was very good! Only thing i could possibly say (though it maybe because im slightly tired) is i found it hard too follow who was talking. Otherwise amazingly well wirtten like ive come too expect from you :)
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@La Barata
It's me: Anon from June 15, 9:09 p.m.
Yep, I knew it. It was Twi.
Indeed this came as no surprise. It was pretty obvious what Spike was after.
However, the ending of chapter 11 was a surprise. This fic flops around a bit, from decent to very decent as the chapters get published. This was a very decent chapter.
So, guess not much else to do but wait for chapter 12 then.
Sooo much tension! Such great writing.
Hey all, this is just a quick note to say that chapters might be a bit more infrequent now, as I'm starting night shifts at work and I normally write at night. I thought I'd posted this around 8 this morning (just before I passed out after one), but apparently I fell asleep first
If I've learned anything from dragon games, the only way to return a inraged dragon to it's normal state is to defeat it in mortal combat. If you do this all the dragons excess magic will drain from it's body and it will return to it's normal state, but it will still have all it's memories from when it was in it berserker state and will be haunted by them for years to come
So...is this getting continued, or not?
Sorry for the delay, all. I'm working on the next part of it, I've just been completely swamped with work. I've probably worked 60 hours since the last one was posted. I'm getting hit with a lot of 12 hour night shifts and a couple of day shifts, too. It WILL be continued, just less often
I'm honestly quite dissapointed. I really hate it when people go with the "character somehow survivors" thing.
Okay, I'm just going to say this.
This story does not know what it wants to be. There is no glue holding it together; every chapter takes it in a totally different direction, and quite a few things happen for apparently no reason at all. It feels like it's just rambling, and that there is no real ending planned.
The characters are also pretty OOC. It doesn't really work.
2/5
yeah twilight is back!
i have to admit that i felt u may overdid it a little bit with the whole twi is depressed and wants to kill herself (particulary the beginning of ch12 felt somehow wrong) but i'm glad that she now got her old spirit back :)
i dont have a problem with some of the manecast acting a bit out of character, it just adds up to the tension and honestly no one knows how they would react in such an unusual situation because the series will never feature something so grim and cruel, so it is all up to the authors freedom of art
okay it was a while for the update. but god damn if its gonna be that high quality then take all the time in the world! that was absolutely superb in my eyes and deserving of 5 stars easily.
Think you should have held back the rum a little this time, La Barata. Caught a couple typos in Chapter 12. Nothing too big, but still felt like a small trip in my reading, aha.
@Dave
Where, exactly? I was just so eager to get this one done and away (was starting to piss me off), so I didn't proofread it as closely as I normally would've.
I wonder what Twi will do next? Can't wait, hurry!!
I don't know if its done or not, you didn't put your usual "to be Continued" :p
Yes! Twilight's back in the action! Although how the implications of her actions will play out with Spike remains to be seen... I wonder what the little (big) guy is thinking right now?
La Barata, I hope you get this.
I like this story so much it's the only one I check up on EVERY day.
I'm happy to see you update.
It is 4:30 AM. I am sleepy. Chapter 13 is up on Fanfiction and has been sent into Seth. I shall now go to bed.
Goddamnit. I have chapter 14 all but done, literally 20 minutes more work. I was hoping to get it into Seth before this got updated. Ah well. Into the cue (and onto fanfiction) it goes
Hmm...very interesting chapter.
I'm curious about how this will play out...
Chapter 14 is up on Fanfiction
Ugh...reading those last two chapters made my head hurt...but in a good way.
It's good, but it can be pretty confusing at times.
I just wonder how long this story will be...
Love this series so much.
this is VERY good i spent like 2 hours reading it all.!!!
@La Barata
Seems I quite can't recall myself after going through it just now. Either you did some post-proofreading, or my eyesight is shot. Prolly need to get off the computer more, aha.
Glad you could find more rum and add these most recent chapters, it's really starting to pick up. I'm honestly surprised at how long it's managed to become while still making coherent sense. Some of the shorter fics fall apart by the fourth chapter.
@DaveI don't think I did much proofreading after I posted it. If you got off the computer, how could you read pony? But yeah, work's been kicking my ass these past few weeks, so I haven't had much time. I wrote these two one after another this weekend, why they're so close together. I'm gonna try to get them out more frequently, but after work most days, it's the most I can do to flop into my chair, turn on minecraft and bitch about the homeless. I'll give it my best shot, though. One thing I've realized these last few weeks, though, is that this isn't what it started out as. It started as a fun little thing, hey, I think that episode was too short, this is what they should've done with it, to it taking on a life of its own. It's not really a choice anymore to keep writing, it's more of an obligation. I've got a duty to you and to everyone else who (for some reason) loves this piece of crap. So yes, this WILL be continued, it WILL be finished, and it WILL be done to the best of my abilities.
Three word la barata...mutha fluffin' daww..I don't evn know how I started reading this wtf? But I can't stop
Last two chapters seemed kinda... forced by you. I mean, I get what you're saying, it is supposed to be a free project, don't let people get to you with the "OMG TWILIGHT ISN'T LIKE THAT" to limit you (or other characters).
The main thing about fanfiction writing is the freedom of ideas, hence why they function outside of the canon, an expanded tapestry where you're the artist and almost anything goes. Sure there are guidelines, but the best of ideas come from people that think outside the box which add something new to the table, like what you are doing.
It's still fun to read however, glad you managed to continue it. If you do other fanfics, I'm sure they'll be just as epic.
@Anonymous I have absolutely no intention of buckling to the pressure of anyone whining in the comments of a pony blog. I've actually had the entire thing structured out since day 1, so I've known exactly what my plan is. Btw, you're awesome
very interesting! i sure hope you'll make more soon, im hooked!
This! Is! SPAR-i mean FRIENDSHIP!!! 8D
Seriously, awesome fic. Loved it!
And my jaw dropped at the ending of 8 or was it 9(?) when we finally got to read the words Spike had left and why Twi had stood so long there watching it. I was like *OHMYGOSH!ISTHISFORREAL!?PLEASEDON`TWAKEMEUPNOW!* XD
Hope we get the next chapter soon and SPike give that *beep* of a *beep* dragon a beating he will never forget!!!
And happy ending, oh please, after chapter 8 or was it 9(?) i thought this must end happily or i will leave the saddest face ever in a comment below your fic. D:
So, uhm yeah. KEEP DRINKING RUM AND WRITING EPIC FICS; YOU OLD PIRATE!!! ;D
More please!!
I absolutely love this story!!! Though it is so awesome I'm impatient when it cone to it I have an e-mail alert whenever it comes out. >:3
Great story, and great idea. I would have never expected spike to change so much. Almost felt it should deserve the sad tag, but hopefully everything turns out alright in the end. Optimism ftw!
Roast owl for dinner.
This is a pretty interesting story. Can't wait for the next part.
@La Barata
But a 15 minute break means I can read pony for 15 more hours without a burning sensation. Besides, I restarted a save file with Paper Mario and The Thousand Year Door, so at least I know what to do with break time.
Work is understandable, and at least you have Minecraft to turn to. My laptop, as great as it is, does not handle games at all well. It struggles with Age of Mythology, much less Team Fortress 2, and I have no idea why.
But I'm glad you have dedication. I tried doing a Pikmin IAS on the GameFAQS forums lord knows how long ago...and it got really twisted and weird and morphed into all these other gaming dimensions that made no sense at all.
And I trust your faith in story writing yet. I've stuck around this long, haven't I?
Part 15 was interesting. I'm assuming the third negative aspect of the spell with the madlings will be revealed later on, but how come the sudden turn in the tide of war?
(Alestorm is in Toronto September 4th, while I have obligations to be a university frosh boss. feelsbadman.jpg)
I am in LOVE with this story. I'm only on chapter 3, however, but I honestly enjoyed this. Good job Brony!
The Sober Pilot Pony approves of this fic ;)
Ha ha. Celestia gets shit done.
Chapters 1-13 are just so amazingly well written and emotionally heavy that I lack words for it. You're starting to lose me in 14-15, though. I feel this is all just becoming a lot more complicated than it needs to be.
@Anonymous
Don't worry, it won't get too much more complex than it is. The board is set, the pieces are in play. Now all that's left is to watch the game unfold.
@La Barata
I'm glad to hear that. I eagerly awat the rest of it.
Orthanx and Baradur? I hope I'm not the only one to have picked up that reference.
@Tesla Spark
From the looks of things, it seems so. And that makes me very sad.
@Dave
I know exactly what you mean, I have to ship out the day before for uni. Shit sux.
I'm about halfway done Chapter 16 now, so it should be posted within the next week, definitely.
@Tesla Spark
I understand!
Chapter 16, after many rewrites and revisions, should be in to Seth and posted on Fanfiction and FiMFiction tomorrow night, along with a little author's note.
I forsee a happy ending. And yet another reason Luna is the best pony ever. Besides Pinkie Pie.
Whoa! A slight hint at a Spike X Luna? Yessss!! I can tell that 16 is the built to some major character conflict coming up. Can't wait.
Keep up the good work and hope things turn out alright.
- Dragon wizard master
Wow man this last chapter was amazing, got me pumped all over again for this fic.
I dunno why, but I really enjoyed 16 more than I think should've been necessary for me, even if a bit short.
And dude, shit happens, it's understandable. Besides, wasn't Seth complaining before of having daily updates? aha
Mind you, the kind of people you deal with is why I could never do social work, you're a good guy doing what you do.
Hopefully your concussion pains leave you soon, and keep us as a happy afterthought. Things'll work out in the end.
Barata, don´t worry. We can wait if we get chapters as good as Chapter 16. :)
Want a drink?^^
@Anon
I think it´s more a hint of SpikeX*Her* than with Luna. Luna is more like the mediator, someone who knows what Spike feels right now cause she had done something similar. Luna knows that it´s less a case of others forgiving her as her forgiving herself, same for Spike in his current situation. Though i guess with this chapter, a happy ending is as good as confirmed. YAY! :D
Who *her* is, i don´t need to say, i think. ;)
Isn't spike gay though? At least it seems like it in the fanfic.
forget it kept reading the story
I'm gonna read it....
cool cool cool cool cool, very very awesome new chapter sir! the ending was funny
Haha, I see that grinch reference there. And I love the Lotr references you had in early chapters (my first read-through)
This is amazingly deep.
Hey all, just a note to let you know that I'm still working at this, and I WILL get it done. The lot of you are fucking AWESOME. Again, sorry about the update frequency, I just want to make it the best possible story, because you lot deserve it. Also, sorry for any typos there, I wrote this on my iPod at work on my break.
This REALLY needs some formatting reworks. The juggernaut walls of text are taking me out of what I think could be an otherwise very engaging and well-written story.
@La Barata You were knifed? Jesus, I knew anti-bronies despised us, but this...
Finally, part 18. You have no idea how thankful I am to finally be reading the next chapter of such an epic Fanfic. Also, YOU WERE KNIFED!? I had no idea the internet war was so serious!
Hmmmm....naked Normal tag. Not normally my cup o' tea. At. All.
But after futher review, Imma prolly read this because....
- As I've said before, Seth's record w/ Grimdark labeling is spotty as fuck and he probably wouldn't change the tags of a Normal Comedy fic that suddenly started depicting scenes of cannibalism and flaying.
- imho the implied 2nd class citizenship of Dragons in Equestria is one of the most Grimdark things about the Canon FIM universe. Then again, maybe that's just the negritude talking.
- The Author writes this while piss drunk, tells haters to kick rocks in the comments, and smashed the face of the guy who tried to stab him before quipping "I'm sending you my cleaning bill". In other words, this fic is written by a Real Ass Nigga™.
Heh, thanks to everyone concerned about me. I'm fine, he isn't xD.
And no, it wasn't as much for being a brony as it was for being a security guard who was probably going to have him arrested for being high off his ass on crack. ...You guys want the full story? Ah, why not.
Ok, so.
This guy walks in, right? He's all cracked out on something, shaking like he's got a jackhammer up his ass. Now, he's right next to the children's section, so I've gotta say something, because he's probably dangerous. I go to speak to him, and he immediately turns around and stabs me in the fucking sternum with a kitchen knife.
Needless to say, I didn't take that very well. I think I broke his arm, and I'm just about positive I broke his face with my kneecap. Then I sent him my drycleaning bill through the police. I gotta pay for that uniform, damnit!
Seriously, though, just everybody around me's reactions, the librarians on duty were just O_o;
Took bloody forever for the cops to show up, though. Had to lock the fucker in a study room, gave him a bucket so he'd stop bleeding all over the damn carpet.
I meant it about that bloody drycleaning bill, too. I have to PAY for that uniform, it's a week's fucking salary!
You, sir, are a true badass. To think you can work that kind of a job, get stabbed (and destroy the perp), and write this really good fanfic while drinking is an amazing feat. My hat would be off to you, if I were wearing one.
@RichiePops
Much appreciated. And yes, yes I do believe that 'destroy' is the right word there.
All that shit for minimum wage, eh?
....Actually, I just had a thought.
This might be an ideal time to plug my twitter. I have a twitter that I call 'Security Sillies' (I originally wanted shenanigans, but it was too long). It's essentially a stream of all the absolutely weirdass things I put up with on a daily basis at work.
If anyone feels like following me for more stories, I work 3-9 Monday to Friday, and the account is called SecuritySillies.
Oooo I really like this. Had a bit of a slow start, but it caught up nicely!
.......any way we can get multiple endings?
This story is also on FIM Fiction under the same author, can you have that as a link as well?
Oh God, the only fanfic I remember since I've been away from EqD. I can safely say you getting me hooked on Alestorm was the sole reason, Barata. And after reading your story on how you wrecked the guy in the library, not only do I wish to tip my hat to you, but get you a pint. What you did is what I only dream of (which I guess is sort of twisted that I want to do that sort of thing to prove my worth, but I digress).
Gonna catch up shortly, exams are almost done.
Dear La Barata,
thank you. For everything. This was my first fanfiction experience on Equestria Daily, and I'm loving every bit of it so far. Please continue writing this amazing, and emotionally full work of art, because I can guarantee that the star rating will go up, if it is included in the story updates. Such a beautiful story and i wanna know what happened to spike, and the princess. What about the town, and the library. The Elements of Harmony? Please continue writing. You don't have to, but at least tell me you're not dead. Give us a sign.
Signed
ALL of your fans here at ze studio.
Dear La Barata,
thank you. For everything. This was my first fanfiction experience on Equestria Daily, and I'm loving every bit of it so far. Please continue writing this amazing, and emotionally full work of art, because I can guarantee that the star rating will go up, if it is included in the story updates. Such a beautiful story and i wanna know what happened to spike, and the princess. What about the town, and the library. The Elements of Harmony? Please continue writing. You don't have to, but at least tell me you're not dead. Give us a sign.
Signed
ALL of your fans here at ze studio.
@Photofinish
I've been stabbed, slashed with a bottle and lost my laptop, but I am most certainly not dead. It takes a lot more than that to kill me.
There are a metric fuckton of reasons that I haven't yet finished the next chapter, but the three most prevalent are:
1. I have no computer. My laptop's been dead for close to three months, and I only have an iPod Touch to access the internet. It doesn't like the new google comments, so now, when I just stole my dad's laptop after he went to bed, is the first time I've been able to reply.
2. I've had writer's block like nothing else. I know what I want to happen, but I can't get it out.
3. I'm a lazy sack of shit.
I fucking love all you guys, and as soon as I get my computer back, I'm going to force a chapter out if it kills me. All your concerns and questions will be addressed and answered.
I WILL finish this. Also, to make up for the extent to which I've made you all wait, I WILL be writing multiple endings.
Thank you all so much for not forgetting me,
La Barata
I'm so excited for you to write more when you can! And lm sure that us fans can (maybe) wait patiently until it does come out. This is also the first fanfiction l've read for mlp, and l must say it is frickin awesome!! l love everything about, especially spike :D So take your time, and thankyou for inspiring me :3
SORRY! I DONE GOOFED! IT'S SHARED NOW!
SORRY! I DONE GOOFED! IT'S SHARED NOW!
"Not a power in the ‘verse could stop them from saving their friends."
And with just that line, I've started reading the story in Mal's voice.
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