Description: Rainbow Dash is stuck on the ground with the Skyfire Competition coming up.
Yay! Flutterdash for once
They brohoofed? Instead of arresting him on the spot? Well okay then.Great story 4/5
Personally I thought it would work better if The Wonderbolts and Red Stallion’s Flying Circus had more of a The Harlem Globetrotters vs. Washington Generals vibe, instead of Red Stallion’s Flying Circus being actual criminals.
@AnonymousAgreed.Still, a great read!
I feel kind of bad for Thanqol: this is the second time Sethisto has managed to butcher his name. What will the author tag wind up saying? =PAnyway. Story. Still hyper cute with all sorts of elements of the rather silly/absurd/ridiculous thrown in that make for a highly entertaining read. You already know how I feel about the rest, so I'll skip the in depth analysis and go straight for the... wait, ponies don't have thumbs. Hoof up? How do pony gladiatorial games work? This is a terrible system...
I personally loved the writing style in this one. Nice to see the limited omniscient POV being used here. It really lets you connect with Rainbow Dash, and shows how she ends up growing feelings for Fluttershy.
Very, very well written. I only have one complaint: it seems Dash turns from heartbroken and disappointed to happy instantaneously right at the end with no transition.Thanks for writing this. I was really able to get into it and it can be interpreted as non-romantic which makes it possible for me to read without feeling all icky afterward(I'm a prude).You did a fine job of describing Dash's feelings. I really felt I understood what she was going through, especially when she felt conflicted.In conclusion, five golden manbabies.
This is a great piece. It is without doubt one of my favorites now.
nnnnn....... it had such a good feel practically the whole way through. but the ending just felt so rushed. from when her wings get better onwards.... needs work but still quite awesome ^^
@AnonymousSo one of them needs to fail so hard their name becomes synonymous with loss?
“Mrghfhayurduring” she mrghfed.Quite simply the funniest line ever.
Tis a very nice story, was a great read.
Fluttershys dad would obviously be a pirate, but the ending was a bit fast but damthat was good 4.5/5 sry but that ending was a bit rushed