• Story: Filly on Fire

    [Shipping] I admit, Cherilee was kind of cute in show stoppers. Here is an 80's version Cherilee story for all her fans!
    Description:  It’s the prom of ‘86 and poor Cheerilee is without date! Will her night end on a bogus note, or is some totally tubular love just around the corner?
    Also 2 Versions for you, one is just a cute shipping story, the other has some...questionable content!

    Filly on Fire Cutesy Version
    Filly on Fire Dirty Dancing Version

    22 comments:

    1. Rad story, bro.

      This fic was well-written, and I enjoyed all the 80's references. Celestia trolling a high school prom for a date IS creepy as hell, but it still somehow managed to be really cute.

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    2. I haven't finished reading it but I'm giving it 5 stars for the Ponythmics. Lol'd heartily.

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    3. Well, well, well...this is quite interesting. And celestia's become a fillyphile I see :0 although it's not like there's any other ponies over thousand years old

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    4. Im curious as too the ratio or readers who went for the PG version over the R (more like pg-13) version. I went for the latter myself.

      And Did i detect a Futurama reference in there?

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    5. Victorian R. HellslyMarch 13, 2011 at 4:43 PM

      @Anonymous

      It seems to be about double. People seem to like the additional scene.

      As for a Futurama reference, not on purpose, but I think looking back I might have put one there by accident, if that's even possible.

      Anyway,thank you everyone for the comments so far!

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    6. "Like, fuck me gently with a chainsaw"

      This is the most awesome fic evar. Well written, hilarious, and different. 5 stars from me, and rightfully so, although I'm personally not so into the whole fillyphilia stuff. Actually, Cherilee's around 17-18 here so I guess it's okay.

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    7. Now we need 60's Ponies.

      For obvious reasons.

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    8. Really good story.

      Pretty unexpected, too.

      The dirty dancing version made me laugh as soon as the Princess was talking to Twilight.

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    9. ...You know, fuck it, i'm going to go out and find Flash for the sole purpose of remaking any scene from Dirty Dancing with ponies

      or maybe the Shes a Maniac thing from Flashdance

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    10. Celestia's ephebofillia and Cheerilee's rather jarring transition from lusting after the colts to puddy in Celestia's hands (okay, to be fair, that may be the most sensible reaction to being courted by a Goddess...) seemed a little too random to me. That's my only gripe, as it were, the fic is hilarious, well done and... kinda hot. The Twilight/Celestia teasing at the end is a bonus.

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    11. What did I read? Why did I read it? Why can't I unread it?

      Why did I give it 5 stars? I am both horrified and enraptured at Celestia's general stance.
      Worse, it attaches to Twilight and Cherilee just hanging out for no reason in Showstoppers... and now I can't get that image out of my head...

      At least she's not her mother...

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    12. This story is rad and you should feel rad.

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    13. Yeah, it's a lot of fun, right up until the fridge logic kicks in and you realize Celestia is being really, REALLY creepy here.

      At least, from our perspective. I think she gets something of a pass since anypony of her own age is centuries dead by now.

      I know it mentions a rainbow-maned pegasus, but now I have this mental image of a young Dash being told, "Now, you have to realize it was the '80s, and your mother and I were doing a lot of rainbow..."

      Rainblow?

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    14. Victorian R. HellslyMarch 14, 2011 at 12:58 PM

      @LordOfTheWrongs

      The fridge logic hit me 2/3s of the way in. I still hope the readers find it more cutesy than creepy, either way it still makes me laugh. This was so fun to write!

      Oh man, I wanted to make so many more 80s references, I just had no idea how to do it! I'll hate myself for the rest of time for not adding a DeLorean somewhere in there.

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    15. This is creepy...but in a very good way :3
      After reading the cute version first,I was expecting Twilight x Celestia sex though. :(

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    16. ....

      This is really good.

      Imma stop here before I seem creepy.

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    17. That was cute, and so nice of naughty Celestia to dance (and then "dance more") with the dejected young mare. The passion was terrific and I love the idea of the princess not only picking out a date at a prom but also finding someone she could help get even. Out of character or even AU, sure, but it was all in fun. :)

      Those certain scenes were very tastefully and tactfully written, but I won't hold that against you. ;) The '80s references made me smile too. What a great story to tell her student before teaching her how to really dance too. :D

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    18. Mildly clever at times, but overall, the story doesn't have much of a point, and it's clear that your focus is on referencing 80s music more than telling a story correctly. The romantic aspect is unconvincing (and that's putting it nicely), the pace is terrible (you spend far too long on an uninteresting build-up but hurry breakneck through the parts that focus on Cheerilee and Celestia's connection), and the 80s song references are overbearing, distracting, and often very jarring--the reader can tell that you're really reaching to add them in there. I also have to say that you haven't portrayed current ponies' predecessors as parents so much as carbon copies--is reproduction in Equestria just cloning? Because it seems that way here.

      It's written alright, its technical parts are done well enough, and at times the 80s references hit the mark, but overall, it seems like you're forcing 2 very different story foundations together here, and they just don't mix well--the emotional aspects don't feel real and the references are crammed in too numerously. 2/5. Sorry.

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    19. ...

      ...

      ...I think I need to take a shower now.

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