Description: After Celestia gets a strange letter from Derpy, she goes down to Ponyville to see whats going on with this strange pegasis.
Another "To Be Continued"... Welp, that means for another part, but I'm a little bit curious about how Derpy is going to be personified this time around... creepy derpy?
The story just unfolded slightly and thento be continued.Im excited for the next one.
Too mean.Derpy's not that stupid.
This one pissed me off. I loved how it was written, and I loved how it started... And then JUST as it started to get interesting... END.It made me rare so bloody hardcore.
Though I honestly prefer a Smart Derpy to stupid Derpy, your version is honestly shaping up to be a very interesting version of Derpy Hooves.I absolutely adore the Lined Letter gag (and the translation joke), the Junque (Junk Antique) Joke, Twilight's helmet, and Pinkie Pie's extremely blunt explanations about the eccentricities of Derpy Hooves.I look forward to the next part.
Sorry about the "TO BE CONTINUED," guys.I just started writing it at midnight, and the rest of it was written in the morning.In retrospect, I think it would have been MUCH better to just hold out sending it here until it was completely finished, or at the very least, had a better ending that ended a bit less abruptly.At least I SORTOF added some stuff at the end, but i guess I should still try to make it better.But then again, this is my first fic, so I'm just trying to get the hang of it.More critique's will help me, so keep it up!
Actually, now that i think about it, i think i should just keep it as one file, instead of making a whole nother doctument for part 2.I'm just gunna try and fix this.
Done and edited better (hopefully)
Much better ending-point. I wonder if there was a time-skip and Twilight went to Derpy's again or if this is the same time
Liked this story...For some strange reason this brings up images of Derpy Hooves and Twilight Sparkles star in Stephen Kings Misery.
@Shaded SpriterYou found my inspiration.
Really would like to see this continued. Is quite interesting.
I was planning to say that I can't wait for the next part...until I read the comment saying that Misery was one of the inspirations...I don't know if I want to now...
@BrianRelax, theres a reason this isn't Grimdark.
Still no 2nd part? :(
@Anonymous I was wondering about that myself.
Hey guys, this is Tooney, the one who wrote the story.Sorry I haven't written anything in a while, life was busy happening.My parents kept ripping into me about my grades, finals n' shit, kept getting in trouble, I got a girlfriend (that shocked and surprised even me). Plus, I've been teaching myself how to use Flash, and am working on a little pony thing that could take a while.Good news: Derpes P2 is on the way. It should be done by the end of the week, and I still have 2 months of freedom to work on this and my other stories, such as Ponies VS the Internet.I promise I'll be back soon.~Tooney
No permission to access.
...why do I have to request access for this?
It says i need "access" too view this, WHAT THE HELL. i cant read this.
It worked for me...Nah. It said I need access, too.
...I blame Trixie
Oh my Celestia, how I did misread the title....
Its obvious that Derpy got to the doc before we could read it.Obviously.
Ditzy just flew north to get the southern docs
GODAMN it. I want to reeeaaad. Open up mitcha website, it's teim 4 ur bweakfast. :(
Y U NO LET ME READ PART 2
So I heard you like stories about Derpy, so I derped on posting a story about Derpy so you can derp when I derp.>_> That... did not work.Anyway, at least this isn't like the time Sony hired Derpy to fix their network firewalls.
Silly Derpy, you derped up the file access...aw, don't be sad. It's not your fault, we still love you Derpy.
My inability Sparked the ember of irkedness. The fact I'm utterly fascinated by ponies to an unhealthy level because of my insomnia (curse this insomnia, it drives me to ponies) has fanned it into the inferno of RAEG!. But i'm far too sleepy to exact revenge and by thetime i'm awake enough to even consider attacking i'll not be raegful, you are safe... FOR NOW -Lordlyhour
The link for the second part appears to be either broken, or googledocs has pulled on of it's random deletions, since the link ends up at a "welcome to googledocs" page.
Why are we even using Google Docs for fanfics, anyway?
...Welp, I had a Derpy moment.Forgot to change it from Private to Public.Whoopsie.Should be better now.
What in the name of Luna's moon is going on?
Part two reminded me of the movie Misery, which with Derpy involved is a scary thought. Either way, I look forward to future updates.
JEEZUS!!When did this story decide to get grimdark?!
Okay, NOW I'm freaked.Seriously. If that ISN'T Derpy painted lavender, I am going to be beyond freaked.Still, you have said this ain't Grimdark, so... I trust you... for now.Frankly, I think it was the whole 'horn completely ripped off' line, which to me, evokes grisly images of brutal violence. Especially since a horn is actually bone, and a part of a pony's skull.... yeah. Ugh.I still trust you.... I think... Please do something soon, I need closure!
Oh Dear Celestia AND Luna! WTF just happened?!Okay, I'll only except two answers for this, one, it's actually Derpy just painted up, or two, Celestia is just having a real bad nightmare and that didn't actually just happen.Because I don't want a mean crazy Derpy, that's Pinkie Pie's shtick, not Derpy's!
@Delta PangaeaHorns aren't bone. They're made of keratin, like antlers.
Oh great, first cupcakes, now muffins. Please let this be Celestia's dream. One that she will wake up from at the beginning of the next chapter… with no more elaboration. Or any grimdark after that, please?
You have now made Derpy go from weird to creepy, and that makes me sad.
Did it occur to nobody else that Derpy could be wearing a suit she made? (that isn't constructed from Twilight's hide)
The locking the door and keeping her in a basement makes me think this is more Misery inspired than cupcakes/muffins
I'm thinking Derpy is wearing a Twilight costume made out of the stuffed animals from her basement...and yeah horns like antlers, they grow back when broken/ grow period, after all why else would rarity get her horn filed at the spa?
Neeeeeeed an update! PLeeeaaaase D:
Oh god, What happens next, I MUST KNOW!
COMMON RELEASE THE NEXT ONE!
Huh, what did I just read....Derpy as a.......MORE STORY NOW. I MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!
update for us update for us c'mon! YOU CAN'T BE DEAD